R & E # 1
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 4?
(4) When it was time to add the sugar, I grabed a canister that was full of something white.
F Delete the comma
G Change grabed to grabbed
H Change that to it
J No change should be made.
G Change grabed to grabbed
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 27?
(27) As the tree grew, it watched a new forest spring up all around them.
F Change grew to grows
G Change spring up to sprung up
H Change them to it
J No change needs to be made in sentence 27.
H Change them to it
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 24?
(24) Mom, Chloe, and me all looked at one another
F Delete the comma after Mom
G Change me to I
H Change looked to looking
J Sentence 24 should not be changed.
G Change me to I
How should sentence 28 be changed?
(28) First, if your going to cook, you need to pay attention to the ingredients.
A Change your to you’re
B Change attention to atention
C Change ingredients to ingredient’s
D Sentence 28 should not be changed.
A Change your to you’re
How should sentence 5 be changed?
(5) I just think they get a little too much atention.
A Change get to got
B Change too much to to much
C Change atention to attention
D Sentence 5 should not be changed.
C Change atention to attention
What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 17?
(17) And you won’t never see a cat tip over a trash can and shred its contents.
F Change never to ever
G Change and shred to they don’t shred
H Change contents to contints
J No change needs to be made.
F Change never to ever
What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 30?
(30) This can save you a lot of embarrassment later.
F Change This to Which
G Change save to safe
H Change later to latter
J No change needs to be made in sentence 30.
F Change This to Which
What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 23?
(23) Woodpeckers pecked at bugs in dead trees, and blue jays plucked juicy fruit from live ones.
A Change pecked to peeked
B Delete the comma
C Change plucked to plucking
D No change needs to be made in sentence 23.
D No change needs to be made in sentence 23.
How should sentence 3 be changed?
(3) I was so bad that I figured the Coach wouldn’t care if I got bored at practice and lay down in the outfield.
A Change Coach to coach
B Change bored to borred
C Insert a comma after practice
D Sentence 3 should not be changed.
A Change Coach to coach
What change needs to be made in sentence 9?
(9) I was sure that with a little more practice, I would be catching and throwing just as good as Stan does.
F Change little to littel
G Change the comma to a period
H Insert a comma after catching
J Change good to well
H Insert a comma after catching
What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 18?
(18) It was time for me to move from T-ball to baseball, and my dad desided that I needed a new glove.
F Change It was to It is
G Delete and
H Change desided to decided
J Sentence 18 does not need to be changed.
H Change desided to decided
How should sentence 25 be changed?
(25) I kept the glove on my right hand, and picked up a ball with my left.
A Change kept to keeped
B Delete the comma after hand
C Change and to I
D Change picked to pick
B Delete the comma after hand
What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 34?
(34) Within a few weeks I had moved from the outfield to first base and finally to the pitchers mound.
F Change I had moved to moving
G Change finally to finely
H Change pitchers to pitcher’s
J Sentence 34 does not need to be changed.
H Change pitchers to pitcher’s
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 1?
(1) Jay Shafer lives in a house that is smaller then some people’s closets.
A Change lives to live
B Change then to than
C Change closets to closet’s
D No change should be made in sentence 1.
B Change then to than
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 7?
(7) It don’t seem like a house that small would have room for anything except a bed, but Shafer is very creative.
F Change don’t to doesn’t
G Change anything to nothing
H Delete the comma
J No change should be made.
F Change don’t to doesn’t
What change should be made in sentence 7?
(7) Some of my friends play soccer or football on the field, but these unorganized games usually consist of one or two kids hogging the ball and everyone else just running around chassing them.
F Change play to plays
G Change soccer or football to Soccer or Football
H Change chassing to chasing
J No change should be made in sentence 7.
H Change chassing to chasing
What change should be made in sentence 2?
(2) I look forward to the recess bell like everyone else, but every time I go Outside, I think about how recess could be even better.
A Delete but
B Change Outside to outside
C Change better to more better
D No change should be made.
B Change Outside to outside
What change should be made in sentence 22?
(22) It didn’t seem like such a small amount would be enough to make a pancake but I soon realized just how much the batter spreads out.
A Change didn’t to did’nt
B Insert a comma after pancake
C Change spreads out to spread out
D Sentence 22 should not be changed.
B Insert a comma after pancake
What change should be made in sentence 13?
(13) “Make sure that you don’t leave any lumps,” Dad instructed while I stired the mixture.
A Change the comma after lumps to a period
B Change instructed to instructing
C Change stired to stirred
D No change should be made in sentence 13.
C Change stired to stirred
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 6?
(6) “What do I do first,” I asked eagerly.
F Change the comma to a question mark
G Delete the quotation marks after the comma
H Change eagerly to eager
J Make no change
F Change the comma to a question mark
Every Wednesday, my mother and I rode that same subway train. (10) We always got off at Eighth Street and walked to my piano teacher’s house. (11) On that winter’s day and every Wednesday for several months, the cat rode the same train we did. (12) He seemed to be by himself, with no one looking after him.
1 Tyler would like to add the following detail to the second paragraph (sentences 9–12).
It’s cold outside, but the subway is warm.
Where should Tyler insert this sentence?
A After sentence 10
B After sentence 11
C After sentence 12
D This sentence should not be added to this paragraph.
D This sentence should not be added to this paragraph.
What is the BEST way to revise sentence 19?
(19) My mother shrieked about approaching strange animals and warned me.
F My mother shrieked about approaching strange animals that warned me.
G My mother shrieked. As she warned me about approaching strange animals.
H My mother shrieked about approaching strange animals, she warned me.
J My mother shrieked and warned me about approaching strange animals.
J My mother shrieked and warned me about approaching strange animals.
What is the correct way to write sentence 13?
(13) I wanted to take it off, my dad kept telling me that I would get used to it.
A I wanted to take it off my dad. Who kept telling me that I would get used to it.
B I wanted to take it off, and my dad kept telling me. That I would get used to it.
C I wanted to take it off, but my dad kept telling me that I would get used to it.
D The sentence is written correctly in the paper.
C I wanted to take it off, but my dad kept telling me that I would get used to it.
What is the correct way to write sentences 35 and 36?
(35) Besides, I don’t think we would have laughed nearly as hard. (36) If our cookies had been just perfect.
F Besides, I don’t think we would have laughed nearly as hard if our cookies had been just perfect.
G Besides, I don’t think. That we would have laughed nearly as hard if our cookies had been just perfect.
H Besides, I don’t think that we would have. Laughed nearly as hard if our cookies had been just perfect.
J Sentences 35 and 36 are written correctly in the story.
F Besides, I don’t think we would have laughed nearly as hard if our cookies had been just perfect.
What is the BEST way to revise sentence 12?
(12) The excited children wait excitedly for Soriano to come.
A The children wait excitedly for Soriano to come.
B The children wait excitedly. For Soriano to come.
C The children are excited, they wait excitedly for Soriano to come.
D The children who are excited wait excitedly for Soriano to come
A The children wait excitedly for Soriano to come.