Revise and Edit Pt. 1
Combine these two sentences (do not change order). What change if any needs to be made:
Even though she works long hours. She keeps working hard after she gets home.
change the period to a comma after the word--hours and lowercase the s in --she
Even though she works long hours, she keeps working hard after she gets home.
What change if any needs to be made?
Of all the dogs at the obedience school, the beagle belonging to Bob and her was the more well behaved dog.
change more well behaved to most well behaved
Of all the dogs at the obedience school, the beagle belonging to Bob and her was the most well behaved dog.
What change if any should be made?
Dear principal Brodt, I would like to request an interview at your school. Sincerely, Mr. Hamm
Capitalize P in Principal Brodt.
Dear Principal Brodt, I would like to request an interview at your school. Sincerely, Mr. Hamm
I was proud that the plane Ann and I made flew the most swiftley of any in the contest.
Change the spelling of swiftley to swiftly.
I was proud that the plane Ann and I made flew the most swiftly of any in the contest.
Is this a run-on, fragment/dependent clause, or complete sentence?
Because it requires a lot of skill and determination.
fragment/ dependent clause
What change if any needs to be made? My sister needed help with her social study's project this week.
remove the apostrophe in --study's-- and change the word to --studies
My sister needed help with her social studies project this week.
What change if any needs to be made:
Henry has a boxer; and Sally has a golden doodle.
Remove the and, but keep the ;
Henry has a boxer; Sally has a golden doodle.
What change if any needs to be made?
During our summer trip I am going to water ski for the first time.
Add a comma after trip
During our summer trip I am going to water ski for the first time.
What change if any needs to be made?
Of the many trucks we looked at today, Jess and I think the last one is the more suitable for hauling equipment.
None needed
Is this a run-on, fragment/dependent clause, or complete sentence?
Water can be found in the earth's surface and it can be found under the earth's surface.
run-on
What change if any needs to be made?
Its their job to let us know if the games have been rained out.
change --Its to It's
It's their job to let us know if the games have been rained out.
What transition word can be added to the beginning of sentence 2 to improve clarity?
(1) I am so busy today. (2) Finally, I will go to the store. (3) I just need to do the laundry first.
Soon or Eventually
What change if any needs to be made?
During our summer trip, I am going to water ski, and scuba dive for the first time.
Delete the comma after ski
During our summer trip, I am going to water ski, and scuba dive for the first time.
What change if any needs to be made?
Until this year, Betsy was fastest than I was and would always win our races.
change fastest to faster
Until this year, Betsy was faster than I was and would always win our races.
Is this a run-on, fragment/dependent clause, or complete sentence?
If you want to become famous.
fragment/dependent clause
What change if any needs to be made to fix the meaning of the sentence? "It does," Alex agreed because a smile moved across her lips.
Change because to while (or as) to add clarity.
"It does," Alex agreed while a smile moved across her lips.
What change if any needs to be made?
Of the two plans Charles's plan was the more effective plan.
Add a comma after plans
Of the two plans, Charles's plan was the more effective plan.
What change if any needs to be made?
All of those long hours of practice finally paid off!
Make no change
What change if any needs to be made?
Val and I were surprised that the class member who agreed with us the more heartily was Al.
change more heartily to most heartily
Val and I were surprised that the class member who agreed with us the most heartily was Al.
Is this a run-on, fragment/dependent clause, or complete sentence?
Becoming a straight-A student is great, but understanding the material is more important.
Sentence (compound sentence)
What change if any needs to be made?
While I was minding my own business walking through the woods, a scorpion stung me on the foot.
Make no change.
What change if any needs to be made?
Sarah added "I can't wait to go to the mall!"
Add a comma after added
Sarah added, "I can't wait to go to the mall!"
What change if any needs to be made?
Repeated downpours cause out land to flood, however, the flood does not last too long.
change the first comma to a semicolon
Repeated downpours cause out land to flood; however, the flood does not last too long.
When compared to Galveston, Sweatwater gets more rain.
None needed.
Is this a run-on, fragment/dependent clause, or complete sentence?
It rained.
Sentence/ Independent Clause