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A comparison of traditional and online leisure activities show a number of differences. (1)
A comparison of traditional and online leisure activities shows a number of differences.
The main similarities are communicate with others and entertainment. (1)
The main similarities are communicating/communication with others and entertainment.
What is the largest city in Australia?
Sydney
As we have seen in this essay, online leisure games and traditional leisure sports are similar regarding teamwork and communication between players.
This essay has shown that online leisure games and traditional leisure sports are similar regarding teamwork and communication between players.
Name 3 sports that have the word ball in it.
Netball, volleyball, handball, basketball
People usually take part in some chat rooms that they interested in to chat with others by social media. (3)
People usually take part in chat rooms that they are interested in to chat with others using/through/on social media.
The first main different between them is type of activities. (2)
The first main difference between them is types of activities.
How many states are there in Australia?
6 (NSW, VIC, SA, QLD, WA, TAS) + 2 territories (Canberra and NT)
In contrast in traditional activities people use their physical strength this is quite beneficial for their bodies. (4)
In contrast, in traditional activities, people use their physical strength. This is quite beneficial for their bodies.
In contrast, in traditional activities, people use their physical strength which is quite beneficial for their bodies.
What sport is played during Australian Open in Melbourne?
tennis
Both online and traditional leisure activities have many facilities which are make people playing any time they want. (4 changes needed)
Both online and traditional leisure activities have many facilities which enable people to play any time they want.
Some people believe that staying at home and have a chat or share photos on social media may cost less than go out. (3)
Some people believe that staying at home and having a chat or sharing photos on social media may cost less than going out.
Who is the head of Australia?
Queen Elizabeth II (British Queen)
Traditional activities such as football always require you to be there with other group members and physically interact with the game. (2)
Traditional activities such as football usually require people/players to be there with other group members and physically interact with the game.
In which sport was Muhammad Ali the world champion?
boxing
Compare to online leisure activities, traditional leisure activity has more chances to do sports including play football and running. (4 changes needed)
Compared to/with online leisure activities, traditional leisure activities have/provide more chances to do sports including playing football and running.
Online leisure activities are similar to traditional leisure activities in terms of relieve stress and increase the frequency of interpersonal communication. (2)
Online leisure activities are similar to traditional leisure activities in terms of relieving stress and increasing the frequency of interpersonal communication.
Name three unique Australian animals.
kangaroo, wombat, koala, possum,??
Furthermore, sitting for a whole day without moving your body will also have an effect on your back and waist. (2)
Furthermore, sitting for a whole day without moving may have a negative effect on people's/workers' back and waist.
What sport uses rackets, shuttlecocks, a net and a court?
badminton
In online leisure activity, people usually use electronic equipments to communicate with others,such as computer,mobile phone and tablet,but people who join in traditional leisure activity need to take some public transport, such as bus or subway,and talk with their friends face to face. (12)
In online leisure activities, people usually use electronic equipment to communicate with others such as computers,mobile phones and tablets,but people who join in traditional leisure activities need to take public transport such as the bus or the subway and talk with their friends face to face.
Online leisure activity and traditional leisure activity share several similarities, including communicate with other people and need to pay bills. (6 changes)
Online leisure activities and traditional leisure activities share several similarities which include communication with other people and the need to pay bills.
Who is the current Prime Minister of Australia?
Scott Morrison (Scomo)
Another big difference between these two leisure activities is that you can not expect enough physical exercise effect from online games. (2)
Another significant difference between these two leisure activities is that enough physical exercise cannot be expected from online games.
Another major difference between these two leisure activities is that one can not expect enough physical exercise effect from online games.
Wallabies are the national Australian team for which sport?
rugby