Argument
This paper discusses the issue that the violence in video games can have negative effects .
too broad
This paper discusses the issue that the violence in video games might have negative effects on children behavior's in school.
The chief executive of a successful computer company , a well-preserved little old lady ,has expanded the business oversees.
pedantic , exclusionary, biased
The chief executive of a successful computer company has expanded the business oversees.
The college library is accessible from the google engine.
correct?
No
I think online classroom are a waste of time for all students in all cases at all ages .
too extreme and personal
Online classrooms should be limited to adult learners to maximize its benefits and avoid its shortcomings.
Most of the feminist writer's are liberal in their writings .
liberal has political connotations
Not all what we read in prints and websites is accurate and unbiased.
correct?
yes
There was a discussion of the health care system by politician.
The politicians discussed the health care system.
choose the best style .Why?
The politicians discussed the health care system.
direct
Before a surgeon can operate ,he must know every detail of the patient history.
gender
Before surgeons can operate ,they must know every detail of the patient history.
It is irrelevant to mention opposing views in your literature review.
Correct?
No
You need to be neutral and discuss opposing views logically.
I bought me a backpack.
slang
Although Alexander the great was described as short , this fact did not hinder his achievements.
Although Alexander the great was described as vertically challenged , this fact did not hinder his achievements.
your writing has to stand up to the readers expectations not your expectations.
correct?
yes
so avoid using pretentious language as it makes your writing difficult.
The suprasegmental features of the sentences reveals several aspect of the writer's intention .
jargons
The concept of combating the Corona Virus is easier said than done.
cliches
The results of this study might suggest solutions to reading difficulties.
correct?
No
irresolute
not committed to confidence