Revision
What is the best way to combine sentence 1 and 2?
(1) She couldn't find an outfit to wear to the party. (2) She talked to her mother.
a) She couldn't find an outfit to wear to the party because she talked to her mother.
b) She couldn't find an outfit to wear to the party, even though she talked to her mother.
c) She couldn't find an outfit to wear to the party, so she talked to her mother.
d) She couldn't find an outfit to wear to the party when she talked to her mother.
c)She couldn't find an outfit to wear to the party, so she talked to her mother.
(5) I was uncomfortable in small spaces, and afraid that we might get lost.
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 5?
A Delete the comma
B Change and to I was
C Change we to you
D No change is needed in sentence 5.
A Delete the comma
What word is misspelled in the following sentence?
They must use their lungs to breath.
a) change they to day
b) change their to there
c) change to to two
d) change breath to breathe
breathe
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 5?
(5) For a reason unknown to my family and me, my brother believes he's the boss of the hole house.
a) change believes to beliefs
b) change house to howse
c) change hole to whole
d) Insert comma after unknown
c) Change hole to whole
What transition word or phrase could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 9?
(8) At first, he wanted to build the Eiffel Tower in Canada. (9) Canada didn't want it.
F For example
G However
H In the same way
J Finally
G However
Which transition is best to add to the beginning of sentence 5?
(1) When Jenny drew her first sketch of a penguin, it was awful. (2) She said it looked like dog with feathers. (3) She kept watching youtube videos, and pretty soon, her classmates told her how well she drew. (4) She began sharing her drawings with her friends and teachers to brighten their day. (5) Jenny was selected to part of a district art competition.
a) However
b) Therefore
c) As a result
d) Unfortunately
c) As a result
(11) My heart raced, but I kept putting one foot in front of the other. (12) As we walked, the ceiling dropped lower and lower untill we had to crawl on our hands and knees. (13) The smaller the opening got, the more anxious I felt.
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 12?
A Change dropped to droped
B Change untill to until
C Change hands and knees to hand’s and knee’s
D Make no change
B Change untill to until
What word is a homophone in the sentence and need to be spelled correctly?
I have been skateboarding since I was ate years old.
a) change at to eight
b) change skateboarding to scateboreding
c) change old to older
d) change since to sinse
c)
d)
a) change ate to eight
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 3?
(1) The fragrance of the flowers filled my room and the hoots of owls echo through my room.
a) change fragrance to fragrant
b) change hoots to hooted
c) Insert a comma after room
d) change through to threw
c) Insert a comma after room
(8)In the early days Girl Scouts sold only original sandwich, chocolate mint, and shortbread cookies. (9) There are many interesting flavors available, including lemon, peanut butter, and caramel.
Samantha needs to add a transition word or phrase to help her readers move from sentence 8 to sentence 9.
Which transition could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 9?
A After all
B Today
C At first
D Then
B Today
What change, if any, should be made in the following sentence?
She dresses me in doll close and pushes me around in a baby stroller.
a) change dresses to dressed
b) change close to clothes
c) change pushes to pushing
d) change baby to babe
b) change close to clothes
How should this sentence be changed?
My life was exciting, for every day was a knew adventure.
a) change exciting to excited
b) change knew to new
c) Insert a comma after life
d) change adventure to adventures
b) change knew to new
What is the plural form of the following words?
woman
man
child
tooth
mouse
foot
women
men
children
teeth
mice
feet
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 5?
(5) Neither my mother nor I could believe that such a dog existed, but it did!
a) Change neither to either
b) Change believe to belief
c) Remove comma after existed
d) No change should be made
d) No change should be made
Which change Jenny make to improve the clarity of sentence 29?
(30) Jenny's teacher is very proud of her. (31) She motivates them to use their creative talents.
a) change them to her students
b) change their to you
c) change her to him
d) No revision is needed in this sentence
a) change them to her students
What is the correct way to write the sentences?
(4) Before you acquire your tadpoles from a store or pond. (5) You have to set up a habitat.
a) Before you acquire your tadpoles, from a store or pond. You have to set up a habitat.
b) Before you acquire your tadpoles from a store or pond, you have to set up a habitat.
c) Before you acquire your tadpoles, from a store or pond you have to set up a habitat.
d) Before you acquire, your tadpoles from a store or pond. You have to set up a habitat.
b) Before you acquire your tadpoles from a store or pond, you have to set up a habitat.
(18) I was surprised at how peaceful it felt. (19) Dad suggested that we sit on a rock. (20) And turn off our headlamps. (21) Up to that moment I had never experienced total darkness. What is the correct way to write sentences 19 and 20?
A Dad suggested that we sit on a rock, we turned off our headlamps.
B Dad suggested that we sit on a rock and turn off our headlamps.
C Dad suggesting that we sit on a rock and turn off our headlamps.
D Sentences 19 and 20 are correct in the paper.
B Dad suggested that we sit on a rock and turn off our headlamps.
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 17?
(17) Since he has a license to drive a car, he can drive me to my best friends house from time to time.
a) Change drive to drove
b) Change friends to friend's
c) Change time to thyme
d) Change license to lisince
b) Change friends to friend's
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 23?
(23) I know cause my mother bought me two of them, Jack and Tiger Lily!
a) change know to knew
b) change two to too
c) change cause to because
d) No change is needed
c) change cause to because
Jenny would like to replace sentence 2 with a sentence that will improve the focus of her paper. Which sentence should she use?
(1) I think Six Flags Over Texas is the best theme park in the U.S.A. (2) I just had one of the best experiences of my life.
a) Six Flags over Texas has rides, shows, and games to play.
b) Going on roller coasters is something my whole family likes to do.
c) I never knew that Six Flags Over Texas was the first amusement park in the Six Flags chain.
d) Last week I had the best birthday with my family and I got to ride on all the adult roller coasters.
d) Last week I had the best birthday with my family and I got to ride on all the adult roller coasters.
Jenny needs to add a topic sentence to the first paragraph. Which sentence should be added just before sentence 1 as the topic sentence for this paragraph?
(1) When Jenny drew her first sketch of a penguin, it was awful. (2) She said it looked like dog with feathers. (3) She kept watching youtube videos, and pretty soon, her classmates told her how well she drew. (4) She began sharing her drawings with her friends and teachers to brighten their day. (5) Jenny was selected to part of a district art competition.
a) Jenny loved to draw and desired to be an artist one day.
b) Eventually Jenny needed help from her art teacher to learn how to draw.
c) Jenny hated to draw.
d) Jenny gave out her drawings to everyone at school.
a) Jenny loved to draw and desired to be an artist one day.
(29) Slowly we began to crawl. (30) We traveled the same path, but this time I felt different.
What is the correct way to write sentences 29 and 30?
a) Slowly we began to crawl, we traveled the same path, but this time I felt different.
b) Slowly we began to crawl. Traveling the same path, but feeling different this time.
c) Slowly we began to crawl, and travel the same path. But feeling different this time.
d) Sentences 29 and 30 are correct in the paper.
D Sentences 29 and 30 are correct in the paper.
What change should be made in sentence 14?
(14) Are they're some good things about having an older brother?
a) Change they're to there
b) Change they're to their
c) Change older to oldest
d) Change brother to brotha
a) Change they're to there
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 3? (3) Apparently, it had snowed all threw the night.
a) change apparently to apparent
b) change threw to through
c) change snowed to snowing
d) No change is needed
b) change threw to through
Jenny included an extraneous sentence in the second paragraph (sentences 3-8). Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?
(3) Six Flags Over Texas is a 212-acre theme park located in Arlington, Texas. (4) It is one of my favorite amusement parks. I am so excited am 48 inches in height, I can finally go on rides like Shock Wave or Ms. Freeze: Rivers Blast. (5) The park opened on August 5, 1961, following just a year of construction and an initial investment of $10 million. (6) I was so excited when my family said that we would be celebrating my eight birthday at to Six Flags. (7) I had no idea what to expect when my parents said that we'd be going. (8) I have always loved rollercoasters, but I didn't realize how awesome it would be.
(5) The park opened on August 5, 1961, following just a year of construction and an initial investment of $10 million.