4th Grade STAAR Editing and Revising

Editing

100

(13) “Make sure that you don’t leave any lumps,” Dad instructed while I stired the mixture. What change should be made in sentence 13? 

(A) Change the comma after lumps to a period 

(B) Change instructed to instructing 

(C) Change stired to stirred 

(D) No change should be made in sentence 13.

(C) Change stired to stirred

200

Otherwise, the pancakes would stick to the surface, we would have a big mess to clean up then.

What is the correct way to write this sentence? 

(A) Otherwise, the pancakes would stick to the surface. And have a big mess to clean up. 

(B)Otherwise, the pancakes would stick to the surface then we would have a big mess to clean up.

(C)Otherwise, the pancakes would stick to the surface, and we would have a big mess to clean up. 

(D)The sentence is written correctly in the paper.

(C) Otherwise, the pancakes would stick to the surface, and we would have a big mess to clean up.

300

(22) It didn’t seem like such a small amount would be enough to make a pancake but I soon realized just how much the batter spreads out. What change should be made in sentence 22? A Change didn’t to did’nt B Insert a comma after pancake C Change "spreads out" to "spread out" D Sentence 22 should not be changed.

B Insert a comma after pancake

400

(24) My father was very clear about how long to wait. (25) Before trying to flip the pancakes over. What is the correct way to write sentences 24 and 25? F My father was very clear about this. How long to wait before trying to flip the pancakes over. G My father was very clear. About how long to wait before trying to flip the pancakes over. H My father was very clear about this he told me how long to wait before trying to flip the pancakes over. J My father was very clear about how long to wait before trying to flip the pancakes over.

J My father was very clear about how long to wait before trying to flip the pancakes over.

500

(36) I learned that cooking takes more patience and attention to detail then I have ever dreamed! What change needs to be made in sentence 36? F Change that to this G Change takes to take H Insert a comma after patience J Change then to than

J Change then to than

Revising

100

(7) Hedgehogs, or hedgies as some people call them, are affectionate, and they form strong bonds with their owners. (8) For example, it’s important not to frighten a hedgehog, especially when it’s still getting to know you. (9) If it feels threatened, it might stick you with its quills. You need to use a more appropriate transition at the beginning of sentence 8. Which of the following should replace For example? A Therefore B However C In fact D After that

B However

200

(1) Are you thinking about getting a new pet? (2) Would you like to try something a little different? (3) Get a hedgehog. The central idea of this paper is weak. Which of the following could replace sentence 3 and provide a better central idea for this paper? A For my paper I would like to tell you that you should definitely and for sure get a hedgehog this time. B Everyone likes to try different things, so this time don’t do the same thing again and get a hedgehog. C Instead of choosing a traditional pet, such as a dog, a cat, or a guinea pig, you might want to get a hedgehog. D Because you would like to try something that isn’t very normal, get a hedgehog.

C Instead of choosing a traditional pet, such as a dog, a cat, or a guinea pig, you might want to get a hedgehog.

300

(6) The outside of a hedgehog is contained with sharp quills, but the underside of this animal is soft and fluffy. The word contained is not the right word for sentence 6. Which word would better help describe the outside of the hedgehog? F included G covered H wrapped J colored

G covered

400

(9) One day he decided that into the tip of a pencil he would carve a miniature sculpture. What is the BEST way to revise sentence 9? F One day he decided to carve into the tip of a pencil, he would carve a miniature sculpture. G One day he decided that he would carve into the tip of a pencil where he carved a miniature sculpture. H One day he decided to carve a miniature sculpture into the tip of a pencil. J The sentence does not need to be revised.

H One day he decided to carve a miniature sculpture into the tip of a pencil.

500

(11) Today Ghetti uses only three tools to create his sculptures: a razor blade, a sewing needle, and a sculpting knife. (12) He now lives in Bridgeport, Connecticut. (13) Among Ghetti’s many creations are a tiny chair, a shoe, a mailbox, and a church. (14) He has even carved a miniature Elvis Presley into the tip of a pencil. Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph? A Sentence 12 B Sentence 13 C Sentence 14 D Sentence 11

A Sentence 12

Editing 2

100

(2) I look forward to the recess bell like everyone else, but every time I go Outside, I think about how recess could be even better. What change should be made in sentence 2? A Delete but B Change Outside to outside C Change better to more better D No change should be made.

B Change Outside to outside

200

(19) Some people might argue that a rock-climbing wall is dangerous and that it would require to much adult supervision. What change, if any, should be made in sentence 19? A Insert a comma after dangerous B Delete and that C Change to much to too much D Make no change

C Change to much to too much

300

(8) “Your holding up the line.” What change needs to be made in sentence 8? A Delete the quotation marks at the beginning of the sentence B Change Your to You’re C Change the period to a comma D No change needs to be made.

B Change Your to You’re

400

(15) My six legs and clawed feet gave me great balanse. What change should be made in sentence 15? F Insert a comma after legs G Change gave to given H Change great to grate J Change balanse to balance

J Change balanse to balance

500

(21) I turned my head to see one of the biggest, meanest-looking ants I had ever saw. How should sentence 21 be changed? F Change "to see" to "there was" G Change "biggest" to "bigest" H Change "meanest-looking" to "most meanest-looking" J Change "saw" to "seen"

J Change "saw" to "seen"

Revising 2

100

(9) The shoes quickly became popular because they were comfortable, and they were popular because they were easy to clean. What is the BEST way to revise sentence 9? A The shoes quickly became popular because they were comfortable and easy to clean. B The shoes quickly became popular because they were comfortable, they were also easy to clean. C Quickly popular because they were comfortable, the shoes were also easy to clean. D Because the shoes quickly became popular, they were comfortable and easy to clean.

A The shoes quickly became popular because they were comfortable and easy to clean.

200

(13) In fact, the rubber soles made them so quiet that people could sneak up on one another. (14) People were referring to the new shoes as sneakers, and the name stuck. Which transition word or phrase could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 14? F For example G However H Soon J In conclusion

H Soon

300

(15) In 1917 a company called Converse invented an athletic shoe for basketball players. Add a sentence to tell more about the idea expressed in sentence 15. Which of these could BEST follow and support sentence 15? A People everywhere enjoy playing and watching basketball. B This was in the beginning of the 1900s that this happened. C It had a higher top to support the ankle. D Basketball had been invented in 1891.

C It had a higher top to support the ankle.

400

(11)People searched on streets, in parks, on beaches, and in stores. (12)They weren’t really looking for wild beasts. (13)They were playing Pokémon GO, a hit mobile game that took the country by storm. Which sentence could come just before sentence (11) and help open this paragraph? A This summer, millions of Americans went monster hunting. B Have you heard of Pokemon Go? C Parents look under their children's bed for monsters. D Everyone wants to buy an iPhone.

A This summer, millions of Americans went monster hunting.

500

(1) Mr. Miller likes to skateboard. (2) He goes to the skate park every weekend with his friends. (3) He likes to go to the movies with his friends, too. (4) They like to try different tricks and practice new moves. Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph? A Sentence 1 B Sentence 2 C Sentence 3 D Sentence 4

C Sentence 3