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100

The triangular shape is an illusion resulting from one significant addition to the process dust


A. NO CHANGE

 B. process is 

C. process: 

D. process;  

C. process:

100

Bundled up in wool sweaters and thick coats, and we watched the sun setting on Mt. Fuji in Japan.

F. NO CHANGE 

G. coats while watching 

H. coats, we watched 

J. coats watching

H. coats, we watched

100

By 1976 he was selling pots to travelers and had taught several members of his family how to make pots.

A. NO CHANGE 

B. a dedication to teaching 

C. a teacher of 

D. has taught: 

A. NO CHANGE

100

During the flake’s descent from Earth’s upper atmosphere, other water vapor molecules bumps into the hexagonal structure.

F. NO CHANGE 

G. has bumped 

H. bumped 

J. bump  

J. bump  

100

In the half-light of the rising sun, we began to make out the dark lines of the cliffs’ at the crater’s edge.


A. NO CHANGE 

B. cliff’s at the craters’ 

C. cliffs at the crater’s 

D. cliffs at the craters  

C. cliffs at the crater’s

200

Although these snowflakes appear to have a triangular shape—they actually have a hexagonal pattern.

F. NO CHANGE 

G. shape, 

H. shape; 

J. shape:  

G. shape,

200

Snowflakes begin to form when water in the atmosphere freezes it causes the water molecules to bond into a hexagonal shape.

A. NO CHANGE 

B. freezes, causing 

C. freezes, it causes 

D. freezes, this causes  

B. freezes, causing

200

And protect them she did: When workers went on strike, Jones secured food donations and temporary living arrangements.


F. NO CHANGE 

G. protections, to name a few, included: 

H. she defined protection as: 

J. she did this by:

F. NO CHANGE

200

In 2009, Libbrecht and Arnold’s experiments revealed that triangular snowflakes begin with the same process of chemical bonding and forms a hexagonal shape.

F. NO CHANGE 

G. were they to form 

H. if they formed 

J. form

J. form

200

On West 45th Street in New York City, wedged between buildings more than twice it’s height, stands the Lyceum Theatre.

F. NO CHANGE 

G. they’re 

H. their 

J. its

J. its

300

In the half-light of the rising sun: we began to make out the dark lines of the cliffs’ at the crater’s edge.

F. NO CHANGE 

G. sun— 

H. sun, 

J. sun;

H. sun,

300

Snowflakes form from tiny water droplets, following a specific process of chemical bonding as they freeze, which results in a six-sided figure.

A. NO CHANGE 

B. form, from tiny, water droplets, 

C. form from tiny, water, droplets 

D. form, from tiny water droplets  

A. NO CHANGE

300

We waited for the sun. Generally: a sudden gap in the clouds left us blinking as the sunlight squelched out the severe landscape of gray volcanic rock.

A. NO CHANGE 

B. Furthermore, 

C. Once again, 

D. Finally  

D. Finally  

300

The greater the pressure from the wind, causes bonds to form quick at this edge than in the rest of the snowflake.

A. NO CHANGE 

B. more quickly 

C. most quickly 

D. quickest

B. more quickly

300

We tried to steady ourselves with our walking sticks but slipped and stumbled because of the jumbled rocks we were slipping on.

F. NO CHANGE 

G. even though we used our walking sticks. 

H. despite any efforts to remain steady. 

J. with each step. 

J. with each step.

400

Above the columns extends a horizontal stone band called a frieze; carved into it are the classical theatrical masks that represent comedy and tragedy. 

F. NO CHANGE 

G. frieze; into which are carved 

H. frieze. Into which are carved 

J. frieze, carved into it are

F. NO CHANGE

400

By 1900, the white-haired, calico-frocked figure was no longer known as Mary Harris Jones, the media, union leaders and workers, and even U.S. presidents referred to her as Mother Jones.

A. NO CHANGE 

B. Jones, in fact, 

C. Jones in fact 

D. Jones;

D. Jones;

400

We rested uneasily for a moment as a clerk burned the station brand into our walking sticks which it was proof of: our progress through the darkness.

F. NO CHANGE 

G. sticks, it was proof of 

H. sticks, proof of 

J. sticks proved  

H. sticks, proof of

400

The greater the pressure from the wind, causes bonds to form quick at this edge than in the rest of the snowflake.

F. NO CHANGE 

G. pressure from the wind, which 

H. the pressure, as the wind 

J. pressure from the wind

J. pressure from the wind

400

Jones, however, became one of the movement’s most powerful and controversial advocate’s. 

F. NO CHANGE 


G. movement’s most powerful and controversial advocates’. 


H. movement’s most powerful and controversial advocates. 


J. movements most powerful and controversial advocates.  

H. movement’s most powerful and controversial advocates.

500

These untruths—whether deliberate exaggerations or slips of the memory—ultimately matters very little, for the autobiography isn’t about the life of Mary Harris Jones.

F. NO CHANGE 

G. little. For 

H. little; for 

J. little

F. NO CHANGE

500

She herself, adopted the name and, subsequently, a corresponding public persona.

A. NO CHANGE

 B. She, herself, 

C. She, herself

 D. She herself

D. She herself

500

His search for their creator led him to Mata Ortiz and an eventual partnership with Quezada.

A. NO CHANGE 

B. lead himself:

C. led himself 

D. lead him:

A. NO CHANGE

500

It was August and our clothes were stifling, but we would have needed the warmth from our bodies sealed around us as we hiked into the high altitudes.

A. NO CHANGE 

B. would need 

C. will need 

D. need  

B. would need

500

Instead of these tireless efforts on there behalf, workers trusted Mother Jones and, by extension, the labor unions she represented.

F. NO CHANGE 

G. they’re behalves, 

H. their behalf, 

J. their behalve’s

H. their behalf,

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