Revising & Editing 1.0
What change is needed in the sentence?
Before Sally Ride joined NASA in the 1970s, the idea of a woman becoming an astronaut seemed incomprehensable.
a) Insert a comma after "NASA"
b) Change "idea" to "ideas"
c) Change "becoming" to "become"
d) Change "incomprehensable" to "incomprehensible"
What is d, change “incomprehensable” to "incomprehensible"
What is the author's purpose?
Jill ran up the hill with Jack. She was carrying a pail. Jack tripped over a rock and caused Jill to tumble down the side of the hill. She broke her arm and refused to talk to Jack for three weeks. Jack decided to make her a cake one day. He wanted to apologize. Jill accepted the cake and they were best friends once again.
What is to entertain the reader?
Which revision of the sentence below improves the clarity by using a more precise word?
The scientist did stuff in the lab that helped with the project.
a) The scientist worked in the lab to support the project.
b) The scientist was in the lab doing things for the project.
c) The scientist stayed in the lab a lot for the project.
d) The scientist helped the project by being in the lab.
What is a, the scientist worked in the lab to support the project.
Luke, a shepherd, circles his flock and scans for danger. This sentence shows that Luke is…
a) confused
b) happy
c) cautious
d) impatient
What is c, cautious?
The author's fundamental reason or intent for writing a text can be defined as what?
What is purpose?
How should the sentence be changed?
Leaving El Paso behind, my parents piled me and my sister into our car along with backpacks and snacks; we then will head east on the highway.
Delete the comma after "behind"
Change "me" to "I"
Change "will head" to "headed"
Change "east" to "East"
What is change "will head" to "headed"
What is the author's purpose?
Cookies are a necessary food item in your life. First, they taste amazing, like sweet nectar that warms your tummy. Second, they come in all kinds of flavors. Even if you are a picky eater, there is surely a type of cookie that will please you. Finally, cookies make you happy. If you decide not to eat cookies, you will be miserable and cranky for the rest of your life. Eat them now!
What is to persuade the reader?
Rewrite the sentence in a clear and effective way.
Natalie and Owen turned around with their hands over their ears to block the shrill sound, who had been watching a movie.
What is:
Natalie and Owen, who had been watching a movie, turned around with their hands over their ears to block the shrill sound.
In the story, The Three Little Pigs, which characters are the protagonist(s) and the antagonist(s)?
Who are the little pigs who are the protagonist and the wolf is the antagonist?
The individuals who actually end up reading a text can be defined as what?
What is audience?
What change needs to be made to the following sentence?
After I finish work on Friday, I am going swimming, fishing, and will hike at the lake.
Delete the comma after "Friday"
Change "Friday" to "friday"
Change "will hike" to "hiking"
No change needed.
What is change "will hike" to "hiking"
What is the author's purpose?
Brushing your teeth is very important. Some do not know the proper way to accomplish this task. First, you put a dime size amount of toothpaste on a toothbrush. Brush the top right side of your teeth, in a circular motion, all over the teeth. After 20 seconds, switch to the top left side of your teeth and repeat. Repeat four more times with the rest of your teeth. When done brushing, rinse your mouth clean with water. Make sure to clean the brush as well! You're finished! You now have beautiful, clean teeth.
What is to explain to the reader?
What is the correct way to rewrite the sentence?
Two hours later the car stopped, my head shot up, I must have dozed off.
a) Two hours later the car stopped and my head shot up. I must have dozed off.
b) Two hours later, the car stopped, my head shot up; but then I must have dozed off.
c) The car stopped two hours later. My head shot up; yet I must have dozed off.
d) The car stopped, my head shot up, it was two hours later and I must have dozed off.
What is A:
Two hours later the car stopped and my head shot up. I must have dozed off.
In the novel Long Way Down, Will can best be described as feeling…
a) scared
b) intimidated
c) upset
d) conflicted
What is d, conflicted.
The central idea, belief, or insight the writer wants readers to understand or take away from their work can be defined as what?
What is message?
Combine sentences 13 and 14 effectively.
(13) Ride was accepted into the astronaut program and began preparing for a space mission. (14) Trained both physically and mentally.
What is:
Ride was accepted into the astronaut program and began preparing for a space mission by training both physically and mentally.
What is the author's purpose?
The rabbit's long ears, which can be more than 10 cm (4 in) long, are probably an adaptation for detecting predators. They have large, powerful hind legs. The two front paws have 5 toes, the extra called the dewclaw. The hind feet have 4 toes.
What is to inform the reader?
What change needs to be made to the sentence?
It was an arduous process, and developers faced many challenges disease-carrying mosquitoes, rugged terrain, and heavy rainfall.
a) Change "It" to "Theirs"
b) Change "developers" to "develepers"
c) Insert a colon after "challenges"
d) Change "mosquitoes" to "Mosquitoes"
What is c, insert a colon after "challenges"
In the novel Long Way Down, Buck can best be described as behaving…
a) aggressive toward Will.
b) loving toward Will.
c) rude to Will.
d) teasingly toward Will.
What is d, teasingly.
The specific person or group the author writes for and attempts to influence can be defined as what?
What is the intended audience?
What change is needed in the sentence?
We went to the aquarium for the birthday party. We saw many sea creatures and we also some amphibians.
Change “saw” to “will see”
Change “aquarium” to “aquariam”
Insert a colon after “saw”
Delete “we also”
What is delete “we also.”
True or false?
An author's use of language informs and shapes the perception of readers.
What is true.
What change is needed in the sentence?
The solar water purifier can filter salt water to make it drinkable, however, the salt left behind quickly builds up and hinders the process.
a) Change "can" to "could"
b) Change the comma after "drinkable" to a semicolon
c) Change "quickly" to "quick"
d) Change "process" to "prosess"
What is b, change the comma after "drinkable" to a semicolon
In the novel Long Way Down, Dani is most concerned about…
a) what will happen to Will
b) the death of Shawn
c) how innocent people might be impacted
d) if Riggs deserves to die
What is c, how innocent people might be impacted.
Non-literal language used to add emphasis and complexity to writing can be defined as what?
What is figurative language?