Passage
One
One
DOUBLE JEOPARDY
Every team must bet up to the amount of point they have.
What is the difference between editing and revising?
Editing is correcting grammar, spelling and capitalization.
Revising is moving sentences around, bolstering vocabulary, and making the overall flow of the ECR better.
The word “lots” is not the most effective word to use in sentence 3. With the help of your group, determine what word would be more appropriate for this paragraph and its audience.
5. The writer would like to add another sentence to the paragraph.
In conclusion, humans would not be tasked with protecting Antarctica if tourists would treat the continent respectfully.
Where is the most effective place to insert this sentence?
Before Sentence 2
After Sentence 3
Before Sentence 5
After Sentence 6
D. After Sentence 6
What is the MOST effective way to revise sentence 6?
Change “being” to “been”
Change “helps” to “help”
Add a comma after “situation.”
Remove the words “sure possible”
Remove the words “sure possible”
The writer would like a more effective closing sentence for this paragraph. Which sentence BEST concludes the ideas presented?
Therefore, Antarctica is unusual due to its popularity for both science and adventure.
In conclusion, Antarctica is super cold and people like to ski there for entertainment.
All in all, Antarctica is not really that unusual compared to other continents in the world.
Finally, Antarctica is unusual because they have more penguins than any other location.
Therefore, Antarctica is unusual due to its popularity for both science and adventure.
The writer realizes that he did not offer an effective transition at the beginning of sentence 5. Which word or phrase should be added to ensure a flow of ideas occurs between the final two sentences?
In contrast,
Initially,
Subsequently,
Therefore,
"Therefore,"
Unfortunately, the writer has included an extraneous sentence. Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?
Sentence 2
Sentence 3
Sentence 4
Sentence 5
Sentence 3
Unfortunately, the writer has included an extraneous sentence. Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?
Sentence 2
Sentence 5
Sentence 6
Sentence 8
Sentence 5
The writer has not used the most effective transition at the beginning of sentence three. Which phrase should replace “surprisingly” in this sentence?
"Additionally" or "Furthermore"
The writer wants to use a more effective and descriptive piece of textual evidence in sentence 2. Which quotation should replace “54 nations have signed the agreement” in this sentence?
“In the years since the Antarctic Treaty was signed, activities on the continent have changed… Because of this, tourism in Antarctica has gained in popularity” (Par 7).
“Many countries have joined the agreement… while the initial document focused on research and keeping the peace, later documents covered the protection of marine life” (Par 4).
“By the 1940s, seven countries had laid claim to territory in Antarctica. Some of those territories overlapped, and some countries would not recognize the claims” (Par 2).
“Whatever Antarctica’s future holds, there will never be another place on Earth quite like this continent” (Par 10).
“Many countries have joined the agreement… while the initial document focused on research and keeping the peace, later documents covered the protection of marine life” (Par 4).
The meaning of sentence 6 is unclear. Which sentence can BEST replace sentence 6 to ensure the writer has a clear and effective piece of analysis.
It is very unusual that humans have to protect when they shouldn't have to, and tourists should treat the place with respect.
1. Because of this, humans have to protect Antarctica, as well as all of its inhabitants, from the impact of tourists.
2. Humans should not be responsible for a continent they can’t even live on or directly benefit from.
3. Because tourists are respectful, humans have to protect Antarctica even though they shouldn’t really have to.
4. Unusual as it might be, humans are having to protect environments that they shouldn’t have to.
Because of this, humans have to protect Antarctica, as well as all of its inhabitants, from the impact of tourists.
The author has not used effective diction in sentence 1. Which phrase would improve the clarity of sentence one?
The situation in Antarctica is caused by the growing rate of the population caused by tourists visiting the continent.
The unusual situation in Antarctica is the growing rate of the population caused by tourists visiting the continent.
The situation in Antarctica is not unusual even though there is a growing population caused by tourists visiting the continent.
No change necessary.
The unusual situation in Antarctica is the growing rate of the population caused by tourists visiting the continent.
The writer would like to add another sentence to the paragraph.
However, Antarctica has not always been a hub of tourist activity; it was originally unclaimed land coveted by many other countries.
Where is the most effective place to insert this sentence?
A. Before Sentence 2
B. After Sentence 2
C. Before Sentence 4
D. After Sentence 4
C. Before Sentence 4
Sentence 1 needs to be revised. On your white board, rewrite the sentence in a clear and effective way with your group.
The situation in Antarctica is unusual because many nations agreed to protect the continent from tourists and economic changes.
The writer realizes that his diction is becoming repetitive. Which synonym is the best replacement for the word “unusual’ in sentence 4?
commonplace
noteworthy
popular
vulgar
"Noteworthy"
Jace has not used the most effective transition at the beginning of sentence 4. Which revision would make this sentence more effective?
Change “Finally” to “Secondly”
Change “Finally” to “Therefore”
Remove “Finally,”
No change needed.
Remove "Finally,"
This essay needs a clear thesis statement. Confer with your team to write a great thesis statement for this essay.
Antarctica is unusual because it is popular for both tourism and scientific research.
What is the most effective way to combine sentences 3 and 4? On your white board, rewrite the sentence in a clear and effective way with your group.
This shows that lots of people are worried about how Antarctica is run and about how animals are affected by human involvement.
Sentence 1 needs to be revised. On your white board, rewrite the sentence in a clear and effective way with your group.
Antarctica is unusual because of how much tourism effects the economy and the environment.
What is the MOST effective way to combine sentences 7 and 8? On your white board, rewrite the sentence in a clear and effective way with your group.
Every country needs to do their part to place safer and more regulated rules to preserve the safety of Antarctica, both now and in the future