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Nowadays, lots of people like living in the city.
Nowadays, many people enjoy living in urban areas.
There are many things about education.
One significant aspect of education is the development of critical thinking.
Firstly pollution is a problem secondly it causes diseases.
Firstly, pollution is a problem; secondly, it causes disease.
People… People… People…
Use varied structures: While many people…, Although some believe…, It is often said…
Things are changing very fast in today’s world.
Society and technology are evolving rapidly in today’s world.
(avoid vague language - what things?)
It’s important to study.
It is important to study.
Important… important… important…
Use synonyms: crucial, essential, significant.
However many people disagree.
However, many people disagree.
Should we all recycle more? Of course we should!
Avoid questions; use statements instead.
“Education” is very important for the society.
Education is very important for society.
(Careful with misusing quotation marks or emphasis marks )
I think cities are better.
It can be argued that cities offer more advantages.
(do not overuse personal phrases)
good, bad, big, small
beneficial, disadvantageous, significant, minor
It is believed that.... it is considered that .... it is said that...
Mix active and passive for clarity.
We need to recycle, reduce waste, etc.
Avoid etc. – finish your list properly.
So yeah, that’s why cities are better places to live in.
For these reasons, cities can be considered better places to live.
This idea is cool but kinda risky.
This idea is appealing but somewhat risky.
A lot of people think…
Many people believe… / A large number of individuals consider…/ It is widely belived..
People need education. It is important. It helps them.
Combine ideas: Education is important because it helps people progress.
(do not use too simple or short sentences)
kind of, a bit, really, like
Replace with formal alternatives: somewhat, rather, quite.
Every coin has two sides.
While there are advantages, there are also certain disadvantages.
(do not use clichés or memorised phrases)
I’m going to talk about why technology is good.
This essay will examine the advantages of modern technology.
It’s terrible that people don’t recycle!
It is regrettable that recycling is often neglected.
( do not use overly emotional or subjective language)
When you travel, you learn a lot.
Travelling allows individuals to gain knowledge.
(be careful with the overuse of You and We)
Everyone prefers living in cities nowadays.
Many people prefer living in cities nowadays.
(do not overgeneralize)
The improvement of communication has led to the development of better collaboration.
Improved communication has led people to collaborate more effectively.
(too many nouns, not enough verbs)