Editing and Revising 1
Revise: Their going to the library after school.
They’re going to the library after school.
What is the difference between theme and main idea?
Theme = life lesson/message; Main idea = what the text is mostly about.
The principle of the school gave a speech.
The principal of the school gave a speech.
What is the mood of this sentence? The abandoned house creaked as the wind howled through broken windows.
Creepy, eerie, suspenseful
What is the climax of a story?
The turning point or moment of greatest tension.
What change, if any, should be made in the sentence?
How would you get rid of a huge colony of bees!
How would you get rid of a huge colony of bees?
True or False: A theme is always directly stated in the text.
False
What change, if any, should be made to the following sentence?
Maya picked peppers watermelons and lettuce to plant in the garden.
Maya picked peppers, watermelons, and lettuce to plant in the garden.
What is author's “voice” in writing?
The author’s unique style, personality, and perspective.
What’s the difference between third person limited and omniscient?
Limited = narrator knows one character’s thoughts; Omniscient = narrator knows all characters’ thoughts.
Revise: He asked did you finish the book.
He asked, “Did you finish the book?”
True or False: A story can have more than one theme.
True
What correction should be made to this sentence?
She went to the 1924 olympics and won a gold medal as part of the U.S. swim team.
She went to the 1924 Olympics and won a gold medal as part of the U.S. swim team.
What evidence shows a sarcastic tone?
Oh, great, another test. Just what I needed.
Oh, great used ironically
If an article explains the steps of how a volcano erupts, what is its text structure?
Sequence (or chronological order)
Combine: The sun set. The sky turned orange. The air grew cooler.
As the sun set, the sky turned orange and the air grew cooler.
A story shows a character working hard to achieve a goal, facing many setbacks, but never giving up. What is the theme?
Hard works pays off/Never give up/etc.
What change, if any, should be made in the sentence?
"The nurse will check your eyes today", announced Mrs. Howard.
No change
What tone shift occurs here?
The poem starts with playful imagery of children laughing, but ends with solemn reflection on growing older.
Tone shifts from playful to serious
Identify two types of figurative language used in this line: “The angry storm growled loudly like a beast.”
Personification + Simile
Combine: The scientist made a discovery. It changed the way people thought about space.
The scientist made a discovery that changed the way people thought about space.
Jake spent all summer building a treehouse in his backyard. He measured the wood carefully, hammered every nail himself, and painted it bright red when it was finished.
What is the main idea?
Jake built a treehouse in his backyard.
What change, if any, should be made to the following sentence?
She was aloud to go to the party after finishing her homework.
She was allowed to go to the party after finishing her homework.
Revise this passage to change the mood from cheerful to ominous:
The children ran through the meadow, laughing as butterflies danced around them.
The children ran through the meadow, their laughter fading as dark clouds gathered and shadows crept closer.
What’s the difference between a simile and a metaphor?
A simile uses like or as to compare; a metaphor does not.