Vary Sentence Openings
Do Not Misuse Words
Avoid Sexist Language
Stay Away from Jargon
Use Idiomatic Expressions
100
Dejected and withdrawn, Edward nearly gave up his search for a job. Edward, dejected and withdrawn, nearly gave up his search for a job.
Dejected and withdrawn, Edward nearly gave up his search for a job.
100
We regret this delay, thank you for you patients.
changes patients to patience
100
Fireman
Firefighter
100
In my youth, my family was under the constraints of difficult material circumstance. In my youth, my family was poor.
In my youth, my family was poor.
100
Off of or Off
Off
200
John and I, anticipating a peaceful evening, sat down at the campfire to brew a cup of coffee. Anticipating a peaceful evening, John and I sat down at the campfire to brew a cup of coffee.
Anticipating a peaceful evening, John and I sat down at the campfire to brew a cup of coffee.
200
Ada's plan is to require education and experience to prepare herself for a position as property manager.
change require to acquire
200
Mailman
Mail Carrier; Postal Worker; Letter Carrier
200
For example, doctors, police officers, and teachers should recognize the power of their positions. For example, practitioners of medicine, officers of the law, and facilitators of learning should recognize the power of their positions.
For example, doctors, police officers, and teachers should recognize the power of their positions.
200
Capable of or Capable to
Capable of
300
Jim hit the ball with great force. With great force, Jim hit the ball.
With great force, Jim hit the ball.
300
Many people take for granite that public libraries have up-to-date networked computer systems.
change granite to granted
300
Mankind
People; Humans
300
It is obligatory for persons who bear the onus of responsibility for the lives of others to maintain maximal standard of ethical comportment. People who are responsible for the lives of others must hold themselves to the highest ethical standards.
People who are responsible for the lives of others must hold themselves to the highest ethical standards.
300
Abide with (a decision) or Abide by
Abide by
400
The underwater bingo game ended when Flo drowned. When Flo drowned, the underwater bingo game ended.
When Flo drowned, the underwater bingo game ended.
400
Even though she wanted to right out her answer, the teacher did not give her enough time before he called on her.
changed right to write
400
Policeman
Police Officer
400
Passengers should endeavor to finalize the customs declaration form prior to exiting the aircraft. Passengers should try to complete the customs declaration form before leaving the plane.
Passengers should try to complete the customs declaration form before leaving the plane.
400
According with or According to
According to
500
While free-falling, the skydiver realized she forgot her parachute. The skydiver, in free-fall, realized she forgot her parachute.
While free falling, the skydiver realized she forget her parachute.
500
The affect of Gao Xinjians novels on Chinese exiles is hard to gauge.
change affect to effect
500
Salesman
Salesperson; Sales Associate; Sales Clerk
500
Recognizing the amount of evidence against him, Volpe changed his plea from not guilty to guilty. Cognizant of the number of forces marshaled against him, Volpe repudiated his not guilty decision to guilty.
Recognizing the amount of evidence against him, Volpe changed his plea from not guilty to guilty.
500
Intend on doing or Intend to do
Intend to do
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