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Anzaldua exposes how language affects how women are treated in society: “We are robbed of our female being by the masculine plural (Anzaldua 53-64)."
Anzaldua exposes how language affects how women are treated in society: “We are robbed of our female being by the masculine plural" (Anzaldua 53-64).
What is the second part of the body paragraph called?
"Show me"
What is the first level a thesis statement?
Context! (Who/what you are responding to)
Tom is significant, because his character allows readers to compare their own choices with those made by Tom in the text.
No comma needed before "because"
There is 1 error.
Instead of directly stating Tom’s payment, it is defined as “one condition which need not to be mentioned, being generally understood in all cases where the devil grants favors.” (Irving 3).
Answer: there should not be a period inside the quote.
Explanation: move the period to the end of the sentence, so the in-text citation is a part of your sentence.
There are 2 errors.
In the article, "Winning the Jacket," an image appears to capture the Green Jacket being placed on the winner of the 2022 Master’s, Scottie Scheffler and shows his excitement for winning this prized piece of clothing (winning the jacket).
In the article, "Winning the Jacket," an image appears to capture the Green Jacket being placed on the winner of the 2022 Master’s, Scottie Scheffler and shows his excitement for winning this prized piece of clothing ("Winning the Jacket").
What is the purpose of the "tell me" sentence?
To tell your reader what you are arguing in that paragraph
What is the second level a thesis statement?
Argument!
Instead of directly stating Tom’s payment, it is defined. “One condition which need not to be mentioned, being generally understood in all cases where the devil grants favors” (Irving 3).
This is a drop quote! The writer needs to connect their quote to their sentence using a colon or a comma here.
There are 2 errors.
Tom’s payment to the Devil
Tom, a very miserable man, meets the devil and agrees upon a deal (Irving 2). Tom gets to be the userer for the devil’s money in exchange for a condition that is never actually mentioned in the text (Irving 3).
1. "Payment" is not capitalized in the title
2. This is ALL summary
Although the website Dictionary.com states that a “Celebrity” is “a famous or well-known person” (Dictionary.com), I argue that this definition is a simplistic and distorted definition, as the definition claims that one does not need to have a positive background and influence to be considered a celebrity.
Although the website Dictionary.com states that a “Celebrity” is “a famous or well-known person” (Dictionary.com), I argue that this definition is a simplistic and distorted definition, as the definition claims that one does not need to have a positive background and influence to be considered a celebrity.
What does the "tell me" sentence have to include?
An argument!
What is the purpose of the third level of the thesis statement?
To explain why your argument matters
Exposes how language affects how women are treated in society: “We are robbed of our female being by the masculine plural” (Anzaldua 53-64).
This is a fragment! We are missing a subject
There are 3 errors.
This talks about how art and language are used to curb women’s identity based on social conventions, (Cohen 2) which define them solely on their appearance rather than individuality. Suggesting that the limitations of identity placed upon a person, whoever they may be, is solely based on gender.
1. Vague referent. "This."
2. In-text citation goes before the comma or the period
3. Fragment! "Suggesting" cannot begin a sentence (missing a subject).
There are 2 errors below.
Works Cited
Johnson, Julian. The Revelations of Divine Love of Julian of Norwich. Translated by James Walsh, Abbey Press, 1974.
Work Cited
Johnson, Julian. The Revelations of Divine Love of Julian of Norwich. Translated by James Walsh, Abbey Press, 1974.
1. 1 citation = Work Cited; 2+ citations = Works Cited
2. A text title must be in quotes or italics depending on the source type.
What is the issue with this "tell me" sentence?
“Seeing and Being Seen: The Moral Order of Celebrity Sightings'' aims to draw much needed attention to how and why the public idolizes celebrities. I argue that we, as scholars, should also examine the extremity that the public will go to see and be seen by these celebrities, as shown in the image of Justin Beiber.
The "tell me" sentence does not state an argument (until the second sentence). The writer needs to combine these sentences and/or move the second sentence to the "tell me" position.
What levels does this thesis statement contain?
Both texts talk about how art and language are used to curb women’s identity based on social conventions, which suggests that the limitations of identity placed upon a person, whoever they may be, is solely based on gender.
Only 2 levels!
-Level 1
-Level 2 OR 3
In the lai, an unnamed wife is ostracized by society after discovering her husband is a werewolf and “betrays him!”. (France 50)
In the lai, an unnamed wife is ostracized by society after discovering her husband is a werewolf and “betrays him!” (France 50).
There are 4 errors.
No matter how great or terrible a winner’s career ends, he will always be known for one who beholds the jacket and a championship at the pinnacle of the golfing world. “It just connects the generations of champions. I mean, I would say it's the richest reward in golf.” (novak 4)
1. "Novak" should be capitalized
2. Drop quote
3. Period needed after quote
4. No period needed inside quote
There are 3 errors.
works cited
Anzaldua, Gloria. "how to tame a wild tongue." Borderlands/La Frontera: The New Mestiza. San Fransisco, CA: Aunt Lute, 1987, pp. 53-64. Print.
John Berger. “From Ways of Seeing.” Ways of Seeing. New York: Penguin, 1977, pp. 45–64. Print.
1. Works Cited
2. Berger, John.
3. "How to Tame a Wild Tongue."
What are the 3 jobs of the "show me" part of the paragraph?
1. Explain your quote
2. Connect your evidence to your argument
3. Reinforce why your argument matters
What is one way to structure a thesis if you want to agree and add on to what a source said? Punctuation matters!
(Author's last name) argues X; in response, I add Y, proving Z.
There are 2 errors
Because celebrities must come out from the shadows, gabler wants the reader to realize that these are the reasons why many celebrities now have reality television shows; to give the audience a sense of authenticity (Gabler 5).
1. Colon needed ( : ), not a semicolon ( ; )
2. Author's last name should be capitalized
There are 5 errors.
Because celebrities must come out from the shadows, gabler wants the reader to realize that these are the reasons why many celebrities now have reality television shows. To give the audience a sense of authenticity. With this, and in order to earn the title of “celebrity”, a person has to show who they really are and have an advantageous influence.
1. Capitalize author's last name
2. Missing in-text citation for Gabler
3. Commas go inside quotation marks in American English
4. Vague referent. "With this."
5. Fragment ("To give the audience...")