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The missing piece of this topic sentence:
In The Assassination Bureau, Winter Hall was hell bent on stopping Ivan at first.
What is an abstract idea
Remember Raymond's platoon was captured in Korea and subject to this in the 1959 thriller The Manchurian Candidate
What is Brainwashing
These three things make up the basic structure of a body paragraph
what are topic sentence, evidence, close reading/analysis
Super human qualities are often given to this group of people in a conspiracy theory
Who are the conspirators
Incorporating this into your thesis allows you to take other points-of-view in consideration
what is a counter argument
The mistake here:
In "The Crying of Lot 49" and The Shadow Over Innsmouth, both authors discuss themes similar to those found in "The Manchurian Candidate" and the poem The Dog's Bark in "The Alphabet Conspiracy" book.
What is the way the titles are written: Book titles should be italicized, short stories or poems should be in quotes
Remember the strange way Hass is killed in the Assassination Bureau
What is being hit by a car
This section should account for a majority of a body paragraph
What is the analysis/close reading section
"Manichaean" refers to an endless battle between these two forces that are important in many conspiracy theories
What are the forces of good and evil
Having a list in your thesis makes your essay structure feel like this
What is fragmented/not cohesive
The incorrect part of this citation:
Pynchon writes, "Oedipa played the voyeur and listener" (Pynchon 77).
What is the authors name in the citation. You don't have to put the author's name in the citation if you used the author's name in the signal phrase. Correct way: Pynchon writes, "Oedipa played the voyeur and listener" (77).
Remember these three elements that make up the structure of a topic sentence
What are [transition] + [concrete detail] + [abstract idea]
You need to do these FOUR things to properly integrate a quote
What are context, signal phrase, quote, and citation
The opposite of occult power, the 'materialist' conspirator gains power through ____ and ____.
What are money and political corruption
These are the THREE parts of a thesis
What are answering the prompt, your rationale/roadmap, and the so what
The error in this analysis section:
Pynchon writes, "she listened to songs in the lower stretches of the Top 200, whose melodies and lyrics would perish as if they had never been sung" (76). Here, Pynchon comments on communication technology and the impermanence of self-expression. Pynchon adds to this through the concept of entropy in Maxwell's Demon. Pynchon writes, "Maxwells demon.......
What is not 'showing their work.' They move on too fast and don't show how the quote leads to their conclusion.
Remember this is the symbol that Oedipa runs into numerous times throughout the novel The Crying of Lot 49 (come up to the board and draw it)
[Drawing]
According to the B.E.A.M. framework, these are four ways you can integrate secondary sources into your essays
What are background, exhibit, argue, method
The conspiracy theory trope of apocalyptic events leading to great change has precedent in this religious type of thinking
What is Millennial eschatology
The logic and order of your essay's body paragraphs are foreshadowed by this part of the thesis [DAILY DOUBLE]
What is the rational or roadmap
The last two topic sentences are missing this crucial element:
1. The Trystero symbol in The Crying of Lot 49 symbolizes the disconnect between the signified and the signifier.
2. Oedipa' relationship with men in the novel highlights the different ways patriarchal control affects women's everyday lives
3. Bortz's domestic life highlights the peace and calm that can come from a peaceful domestic life
What are transitions
Remember the name of the Captain who eventually became the leader of the Esoteric Order of Dagon in "The Shadow Over Innsmouth"
Who is Captain Obed Marsh (i'll accept any ONE of the names)
These are the SIX basic parts of an introduction and conclusion
What are the hook, background information, thesis in the intro. In the conclusion, re-state thesis, re-state main points, have an 'ending'
When conspiracy theories are written down, the writers often copy this type of style in order to add to their credibility
What is the academic style
This is a 'so what' and why is it so important
What broadens your argument one final time and allows you to tell the reader why your argument is important to the ongoing conversation