Revising Sentences
This sentence is more clear:
A) Sam ran fast.
B) Sam ran very fast to catch the bus.
What is B- Sam ran very fast to catch the bus?
“my mom made pizza.”
What is capitalize “My”?
The puppy was curious. Define curious in this sentence.
What is wanting to know or learn?
“_____ we finished eating, we played outside.”
A) After
B) But
What is A- after?
“Yes I can help.”
What is A- "Yes, I can help?"
This is the better sentence.
A) The dog ran.
B) The dog ran across the yard to get the ball.
What is B- The dog ran across the yard to get the ball?
“She dont like carrots.”
What is "She doesn’t like carrots."
“The room was silent.” Define silent.
What is very quiet?
“I wanted ice cream, _____ it was too cold outside.”
A) so
B) however
What is B- however?
“I bought apples bananas and pears.”
What is "I bought apples, bananas, and pears?"
This sentence adds more detail:
A) The girl sang.
B) The girl sang loudly on the stage.
What is B- The girl sang loudly on the stage?
“we is going to the park.”
What is "We are going to the park."
“She felt proud after finishing her project.” Define proud.
What is feeling happy about what you did?
“First we cleaned the room. _____ we took out the trash.”
A) Then
B) Because
What is A- Then?
“After school we went to the store.”
What is "After school, we went to the store?"
This is the best revision to the sentence: “The storm was big.”
A) The storm was loud and heavy with rain falling quickly.
B) The storm was big and stormy.
What is A- The storm was loud and heavy with rain falling quickly.
“I like apples oranges and grapes”
What is "I like apples, oranges, and grapes."
“The boy made a bold choice and spoke in front of the class.” Define bold.
What is brave or not afraid?
“We visited the museum. _____, we went to the zoo.”
A) Next
B) Although
What is A- Next?
“My sister who is ten loves soccer.”
What is "My sister, who is ten, loves soccer?"
This original sentence does not sound interesting: “The boy walked home.”
What is: The boy walked home slowly through the cold rain?
“tom and sara plays basketball after school”
What is "Tom and Sara play basketball after school."
“The wind was fierce during the storm.” Define fierce.
What is strong, powerful, or intense?
“I studied for the test. _____, I felt ready.”
A) Therefore
B) Before
What is A- Therefore?
“After reading the book The Secret Garden it made me want to make my own floral hideaway."
What is “After reading the book, The Secret Garden, it made me want to make my own floral hideaway."