Active/Passive
The film Clueless was written and directed by Amy Heckerling
Passive
Amy Heckerling wrote and directed the film Clueless.
devi is constantly struggling with her relationships with her friends and family _ she also tries to navigate high school life.
Period.
two independent clauses
Reservation Dogs focuses on a group of Indigenous teenagers they struggle with loss, identity, and friendship.
run on
Evelyn navigates multiple universes, fights off enemies, and discovers herself.
parallel
Issa, watching her reflection in the mirror, has always been hesitant about her decisions.
Explanation: The modifier "watching her reflection in the mirror" is too far from "Issa," making it unclear whether it’s Issa or someone else doing the action.
Corrected: Watching her reflection in the mirror, Issa has always been hesitant about her decisions.
Alicia Silverstone portrays the character of Cher and Stacy Dash plays her best friend, Dionne.
Passive Version:
The character of Cher is portrayed by Alicia Silverstone and her best friend, Dionne, is portrayed by Stacy Dash.
Devi’s struggle with identity is central to the plot _ she tries to balance her cultural heritage with being an American teenager.
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two independent clauses
Bear struggles with finding his purpose, but he also wants to make his family proud.
comma splice
The film’s visuals shift between different genres, showing futuristic technology, and evoke emotions from the audience.
not parallel
The film’s visuals shift between different genres, show futuristic technology, and evoke emotions from the audience.
Explanation: The verbs "showing" and "evoke" are changed to “show” and “evoke” to maintain the same verb form.
After talking to Molly, the resolution to Issa’s problem seems much clearer.
Explanation: The modifier "after talking to Molly" is dangling because it implies that the resolution is the one talking to Molly.
Corrected: After talking to Molly, Issa finds the resolution to her problem seems much clearer.
The film's most iconic scenes continue to be referenced decades later.
Passive
Active Version
People/audiences continue to reference the film's most iconic scenes decades later.
paxton becomes more open to Devi’s friendship - although he initially dismisses her.
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"although he initially dismisses her" is a dependent clause
The characters find solace in their friendships they share a bond that allows them to cope with their challenges.
run on sentence
Evelyn’s journey involves facing her past, to reconnect with her daughter, and find redemption.
not parallel
Corrected: Evelyn’s journey involves facing her past, reconnecting with her daughter, and finding redemption.
Explanation: All verbs in the series should be in the same form. I changed "to reconnect" and "find" to the gerund form “reconnecting” and “finding.”
Issa often feels insecure about herself in the mirror while contemplating her choices.
Explanation: The modifier "while contemplating her choices" is squinting because it could describe either "feels insecure" or "in the mirror."
Corrected: While contemplating her choices, Issa often feels insecure about herself in the mirror.
The filmmakers carefully develop the characters' relationships, reflecting real-life issues that teens face today.
Active
Passive Version:
The characters' relationships are carefully developed (by the filmmakers), reflecting real-life issues that teens face today.
Devi is constantly struggling with her emotions _ even though she hides it from most people.
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"even though she hides it from most people" is a dependent clause
Bear’s inner struggle, especially with his sense of identity.
sentence fragment
The film explores family dynamics, the meaning of life, and being a mother in modern times.
not parallel
The film explores family dynamics, the meaning of life, and motherhood in modern times.
Explanation: "Being a mother" is changed to "motherhood" to match the parallel structure of the noun phrases.
Issa hurries over to Molly, trying to get to the meeting quickly.
Explanation: The modifier "trying to get to the meeting quickly" is squinting because it could describe either Issa or Molly
Corrected: Trying to get to the meeting quickly, Issa hurries over to Molly.
The term "as if!" is frequently used in modern conversations, especially when mocking an unrealistic idea.
Passive
Active Version
People frequently use the term "as if!" in modern conversations, especially when mocking an unrealistic idea.
Ben is intelligent and a bit arrogant _ he often competes with Devi_ but they also share an undeniable connection.
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The reservation is both a place of hardship and belonging, it’s where the characters find their identity.
comma splice
The movie uses humor to cope with trauma, explore complex themes, and depict diverse perspectives.
parallel
Issa, feeling increasingly overwhelmed by her career and personal life, discusses her struggles with Molly, who listens carefully and offers thoughtful advice, hoping to help her friend find clarity.