Describing a Photo
There are a boat in the middle of the photograph.
There is a boat in the middle of the photograph.
Sp
Spelling
Maybe its his job to manage the workers.
Maybe it's his job to manage the workers.
The photograph (portrays/displays) a group of young mill workers.
Portrays
He was richer and wealthier than the workers.
Richer and wealthier mean the same thing. Delete one.
There appear to be a foremen standing next to the children.
There appears to be a foremen standing next to the children.
Gr
Grammar
The man on the left looks wealthier then the workers.
The man on the left looks wealthier than the workers.
He (appears/looks) to be the foremen of the factory.
Appears
The machine is big.
"Big" is general / poor adjective choice.
The man is on the left holding a suitcase.
The man on the left is holding a suitcase.
P
Punctuation
To me, this picture is enlightening because it show the poor conditions of young workers.
To me, this picture is enlightening because it shows the poor conditions of young workers.
The poor working conditions made the laborers (miserable/inhumanity).
Miserable
In the top left corner of the photograph.
Not a full sentence (sentence fragment).
At the background, there appears to be a factory.
In the background, there appears to be a factory.
WW
Wrong word
In the top left corner of the photograph, I can see a man stood still.
In the top left corner of the photograph, I can see a man standing still.
His work (awared/enlightened) Americans about the dangers of child labor.
Enlightened
There is a group of boys standing in the top left corner of the photograph. In the bottom right corner, there is another group of boys. Towards the middle, a machine used for sewing can be seen.
The order of sentences doesn't make sense (poor spatial arrangement).
The group of boys are standing in the middle of the photograph.
The group of boys is standing in the middle of the photograph.
WO
Word order
The group of young mill workers appear to be stunted.
The group of young mill workers appears to be stunted.
Hine's photographs exposed Americans to the (inhumanity/peril) of child labor.
Inhumanity
In my opinion, the photograph captures the inhumanity of child labor. A group of boys can be seen standing in between two wealthy factory owners. Their clothes are worn-out and their faces are dirty. They appear poor and miserable, especially compared to the factory owners. The owners are wearing expensive looking suits. They have menacing looks on their faces. I really like this photograph.
Poor topic and concluding sentences.