QUOTE IT RIGHT
Fix this sentence:
According to the text video games improve important skills
According to the text, “video games improve important skills.”
Weak or strong?
This shows that video games are bad
Weak
What comes first in an essay?
Introduction
This shows that video games are good because they help
Too vague / needs more explanation
Rewrite:
video games are bad
video games can negatively affect students’ focus and performance
Fix this:
According to the text over 50% of teens say video games help them improve problem solving skills
According to the text, “over 50% of teens say video games help them improve problem-solving skills.”
Fix this:
This shows that video games are good
This shows that video games can improve problem-solving skills and help students think more quickly.
What are the 3 parts of the essay?
Introduction, Body Paragraphs, Conclusion.
According to the text video games improve memory
Missing comma and quotation marks
Rewrite:
video games are good
video games can improve problem-solving skills and cognitive development
What is missing in this sentence?
According to the text, video games can cause addiction
Quotation Marks
Finish this:
This shows that video games affect sleep, which can lead to __________
poor focus / low energy / worse school performance
Where does evidence go?
Body paragraphs
Paragraph:
Video games are good. According to the text. They help.
Incomplete sentences / poor structure
Rewrite:
this helps students
this helps students improve their ability to think and make decisions
Fix this sentence completely:
According to the text 41% of teens said video games have negative effects on their sleep
According to the text, “41% of teens said video games have negative effects on their sleep.”
Why is this weak?
This shows that it helps
Too vague / does not explain HOW or WHY
What comes after evidence?
Explanation
What is wrong?
Using only one article
Must use BOTH sources
Rewrite:
this is important
this is important because it affects students’ learning and success in school
Why are quotation marks important when using evidence?
They show the exact words from the text and separate the author’s words from your own.
Turn this into a strong explanation:
This shows that video games affect students
This shows that video games can negatively affect students’ sleep, which can lead to lower focus and poorer performance in school.
What is the purpose of the conclusion?
Restate the thesis and explain why it matters
What is wrong?
Writing everything in one paragraph
No structure / missing 4-paragraph format
Rewrite:
kids play games a lot
many students spend a significant amount of time playing video games