Format & Construction
Are the paragraphs short, or enormous blocks? Do they vary or remain consistent?
paragraph structure
Are the words simple or fancy? Are they technical, flowery, colloquial, (and so on...)?
vocabulary
Are there any metaphors, similes, or symbols? What about personification, metonymy, and so on?
figures of speech
How is the story told? First, second, third, omniscient, limited omiscient, multiple, inanimate, free indirect discourse
point of view
Are the sentences long or short? When and why do they change?
sentence structure
Is the writing heavily descriptive, with emphasis on setting and atmosphere, or does it focus on action and plot movement?
diction & pace
What is the author's attitude? Sarcastic? Aggressive? Wistful? Pessimistic? In love? Detached? Hopeful? Ironic? Bitter? (and so on)
tone
How does the author introduce characters, and how do we see their evolution in the story?
character development
How and how often does the author refer to other texts, myths, symbols, famous figures, historical events, quotations, and other well known ideas that enhance the meaning of the text?
allusions
Do we see whole conversations or just fragments? Does it use slang or it formal? Does it appear natural or contrived? Does it give a sense of pacing, pauses, the unsaid? How much does it substitute for narration?
use of dialogue
Does the author use alliteration, assonance, consonance, dissonance, rhythm, unusual word choice, and so on?
word sound
How has the author organized the order of events? What is the work's structural rhythm?
time sequencing / chronology
Are there any unusual techniques, such as stream-of-consciousness, mixing styles and genres, unusual layout on the page, breaking rules of grammar and form, odd or unstable narrative perspectives?
experimentation in language
does the author call attention to his or her own process of narration? Are the narrator's thoughts as a storyteller mentioned explicitly in the text?
meta-fictional techniques