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Marina A Masterson. (2021). When play becomes work: Child labor laws in the era of “kidfluencers.” University of Pennsylvania Law Review, 169(2), 577–607.
Masterson, Marina A. "When Play Becomes Work: Child Labor Laws in the Era of 'Kidfluencers'." University of Pennsylvania Law Review, vol 169, no 2, 2021, pp 577-607. https://pascal-usc.primo.exlibrisgroup.com/permalink/01PASCAL_USCCOL/1brpj2a/cdi_rmit_agispt_search_informit_org_doi_10_3316_agispt_20210514046645
"This is a very good solution that everyone will like because there's something in it for everyone."?
DESCRIPTOR
(clues: 'very' 'good' 'everyone' 'something' 'everyone')
"Kids are suffering everyday and no one does anything about it."
"Lack of school lunch programs result in hungrier students with diminished cognitive abilities than better-fed peers."
"Kids are suffering everyday and no one does anything about it."
"Hunger negatively impacts a student's ability to learn as much as many other impairments that have improved through further accommodations."
"This is a very good solution that everyone will like because there's something in it for everyone."?
(clues: 'very' 'good' 'everyone' 'something' 'everyone')
What might be more specific and therefore potentially more accurate (depending on data):
"compositing allows for more locally-based waste disposal programs, prevents methane build-up in landfills, and though there are higher start-up costs, create local business and employment opportunities that other services do not."
Grossman, Lev. “Jonathan Franzen. The Wide Shot. (Cover Story).”
TIME Magazine, vol. 176, no. 8, Aug. 2010, pp. 42–48. EBSCOhost, search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&AuthType=sso&db=a9h&AN=52896051&authtype=sso&custid=s3604775&site=ehost-live&scope=site
Grossman, Lev. “Jonathan Franzen: The Wide Shot. (Cover Story).”
Time Magazine, Aug. 2010. EBSCOhost, search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&AuthType=sso&db=a9h&AN=52896051&authtype=sso&custid=s3604775&site=ehost-live&scope=site
"there are dangerous substances everywhere you look-- grocery shopping is a mine field"
'dangerous' 'substances' 'everywhere' 'mind field' (metaphor)
Can anyone catch another issue that might unintentionally undermine logos & pathos
"You can find trash on any of the beaches you might go to."
"Marine pollution presents a unique predicament in that it cannot be sequestered in some beaches and not others-- it washes up along all coastlines from Antartica to the Artic."
"You can find trash on any of the beaches you might go to."
"Although there are thirty US States that border oceans, there remains no state alliances or organizations other than the EPA that sets shared pollution regulations-- or solutions."
"there are dangerous substances everywhere you look-- grocery shopping is a mine field"
"'inactive' ingredients like talc may be contaminated with known carcinogens like asbestos, or may be procured unethically through labor practices illegal in the US such as child labor in mining and other safety violations. Those 'inactive' ingredients are regulated differently than 'active' ingredients and may have much higher concentrations."
GARCIA-PELEGRIN, E.; WILKINS, C.; CLAYTON, N. S. Investigating expert performance when observing magic effects. Scientific Reports, [s. l.], v. 12, n. 1, p. 1–10, 2022. DOI 10.1038/s41598-022-09161-5. Disponível em: https://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&AuthType=sso&db=a9h&AN=155955304&authtype=sso&custid=s3604775&site=ehost-live&scope=site. Acesso em: 17 abr. 2023.
Garcia-Pelegrin, Elias, et al. “Investigating Expert Performance When Observing Magic Effects.” Scientific Reports, vol. 12, no. 1, Mar. 2022, pp. 1–10. EBSCOhost, https://doi.org/10.1038/s41598-022-09161-5.
"The government really should be more in charge of what's going on in this situation"
"Clipper ships are made of wood. Clipper ships go fast. I would like to sail on a clipper ship."
"The narrow structure and sustainable materials used to build clipper ships make for one of the speediest nineteenth century sailing vessels, helping their captain's escape piracy."
"Clipper ships are made of wood. Clipper ships go fast. I would like to sail on a clipper ship."
"The speed and maneuverability that made Clipper ships famous in the 19th century may have partially inspired the name for the Los Angeles Clippers, a team in the NBA."
"The government really should be more in charge of what's going on in this situation"
OPINION.
"Federal regulations can prevent legal discrepancies between states in managing shared coastlines."
MAHESHWARI, SAPNA. “Brands Pour Money Into Online Fountain of Youth: Kidfluencers. (Cover Story).” New York Times, vol. 168, no. 58254, 2 Mar. 2019, pp. A1–15. EBSCOhost, search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&AuthType=sso&db=a9h&AN=135061196&authtype=sso&custid=s3604775&site=ehost-live&scope=site.
Maheshwari, Sapna. "Brands Pour Money Into Online Fountain of Youth: Kidfluencers." New York Times, 29 Mar. 2019, p. a1+. Academic Search Complete, search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&AuthType=sso&db=a9h&AN=135061196&authtype=sso&custid=s3604775&site=ehost-live&scope=site&custid=s3604775.
"The consequences of this are clear"
'this' 'are' 'clear' (what consequences? what can be more specific?)
"CTE injuries happen across so many sports, it basically impacts everyone."
"Data collected from studies conducted by professional sports organizations like the NFL to amateur teams like juvenile soccer organizations demonstrate the ubiquity of CTE injuries, regardless of skill level or compensation"
"CTE injuries happen across so many sports, it basically impacts everyone."
"Protections can benefit athletes in a variety of contexts, from the NFL to youth league soccer, demonstrating both the need for more research, but the practical implementation on proven uniform improvements."
"The consequences of this are clear."
"Groundwater poisoning will impact local agriculture, livestock mortality, and the necessary, local water supply."
Reardon, Joan. “New Kidfluencers on the Block: The Need to Update California’s Coogan Law to Ensure Adequate Protection for Child Influencers.” Case Western Reserve Law Review, vol. 73, no. 1, Fall 2022, pp. 165–90. EBSCOhost, search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&AuthType=sso&db=a9h&AN=161921015&authtype=sso&custid=s3604775&site=ehost-live&scope=site.
Reardon, Joan. “New Kidfluencers on the Block: The Need to Update California’s Coogan Law to Ensure Adequate Protection for Child Influencers.” Case Western Reserve Law Review, vol. 73, no. 1, Fall 2022, pp. 165–90. EBSCOhost, search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&AuthType=sso&db=a9h&AN=161921015&authtype=sso&custid=s3604775&site=ehost-live&scope=site.
(NOTHING WRONG-- THIS IS A CORRECT CITATION)
"There's never been a better time than now to do what we need to do."
"When you die from an overdose, it's sad because it could have been prevented."
"In addition to addiction treatment, simple supplying procedures-- like supplying all EMTs with Narcan for immediate response to overdoses-- can save lives according to sources of objective data."
"When you die from an overdose, it's sad because it could have been prevented."
"The efficacy of various "prevention-based" plans allows for more sophisticated solutions than a one-size-fits-all-approach, and can assist in deciding funding for specialized approaches in particular places."
"There's never been a better time than now to do what we need to do."
"Immediate action through delivery of necessary provisions like shelter, blankets, and potable drinking water will provide the quickest benefit with the lowest costs."