Revising
What is the most effective way to revise sentence 2?
A) They enjoyed playing video games, they bowled and watched movies together.
B) They enjoyed playing video games, bowling, and watching movies together.
C) They enjoyed playing video games and watched movies together and bowling.
D) They enjoyed playing video games, while they also enjoyed movie watching and bowling.
What is B They enjoyed playing video games, bowling, and watching movies together.
Comparing two different items without using like or as.
What is a metaphor?
Julio did not write an effective thesis for this paper. He would like to delete sentences 4 and 5 and replace them with two sentences that better articulate his thesis. Which of the following should he use?
A) Wind turbines aren’t anything new. They have been around for a long time.
B) People come up with new ideas. And new ideas mean creative solutions for all.
C) This wind turbine is unique. It can produce both energy and water.
D) A wind turbine may be the perfect answer. Experts believe this is true.
What is C This wind turbine is unique. It can produce both energy and water.
What is the most effective way to combine sentences 7 and 8?
F) He used a wheelchair to get around and communicated through a sophisticated computer system that responded to his eye movements.
G) He used a wheelchair to get around, he communicated through a sophisticated computer system that responded to his eye movements.
H) Using a wheelchair to get around and communicating through a sophisticated computer system, he responded to his eye movements.
J) He used a wheelchair to get around, which communicated through a sophisticated computer system that responded to his eye movements.
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What is F He used a wheelchair to get around and communicated through a sophisticated computer system that responded to his eye movements.
Uses sensory words or phrases to create a picture in the reader's mind.
What is imagery?
Julio’s transition from the second paragraph (sentences 6–13) to the third paragraph (sentences 14–18) is weak. Which of the following could best replace sentence 14 and provide a more effective transition between these two paragraphs?
F) It’s our job as young people to bring national attention to the crisis.
G) We need something to assist with the serious water crisis we are facing.
H) Today there are people who are illiterate about this situation.
J) Many people in the United States are unaware that such a crisis exists.
What is J Many people in the United States are unaware that such a crisis exists
Dubious
What is Questionable, doubtful
What is the most effective transition to add to the beginning of sentence 18?
F) Consequently
G) In fact
H) However
J) In the end
What is H However
The main focus of the story or the lesson the author is trying to teach.
What is theme?
Which sentence can Julio add after sentence 17 to provide additional support for the ideas presented in the third paragraph (sentences 14–18)?
A) I cannot imagine having to spend any portion of my day collecting the water that my family needs to survive.
B) Some must travel great distances for water, carrying containers that weigh as much as 40 pounds.
C) Women and children are the ones who typically have to bear this responsibility.
D) Water has to be found that will meet all the family’s needs for drinking, bathing, and cooking.
What is B Some must travel great distances for water, carrying containers that weigh as much as 40 pounds.
Danny would like to add a relevant quotation to the end of the third paragraph (sentences 17–22). Which of the following could best follow sentence 22 and help support the ideas in this paragraph?
A) “He hangs out with Cameron every weekend,” Mack’s mom noted.
B) “I just felt like it needed to be done,” Mack said, “so I did it.”
C) “High school has been just great,” Mack commented.
D) “Mack was nice to me and really funny,” Cameron explained.
What is B “I just felt like it needed to be done,” Mack said, “so I did it.”
The author's attitude about what he or she is writing about.
What is tone?
The meaning of sentence 22 is unclear. What is the most effective way to clarify the meaning of this sentence?
F) Change This to It
G) Change them to some analysts
H) Change water to it
J) Change main to primary
What is G Change them to some analysts
Danny ended his paper abruptly. Which sentence could be added after sentence 32 to bring this paper to a more effective close?
F) Isn’t it hard to imagine a person in a wheelchair traveling that fast in a race?
G) In conclusion, only time will tell how much these amazing runners will be able to accomplish if their friendship stays strong and their determination brings hope to others.
H) Mack and Cameron’s story is inspirational, a reminder to the world that challenges can never stop true friendship.
J) Obviously, Mack and Cameron will be friends forever and will be sure to make a difference in many exciting ways
What is H Mack and Cameron’s story is inspirational, a reminder to the world that challenges can never stop true friendship.
Comparing two different items using like or as.
What is a simile?
What is the most effective way to revise sentence 26?
A) It had been over a period of six months, the turbine produced up to 211 gallons of water per day.
B) Because it had been over a period of six months, the turbine produced up to 211 gallons of water per day.
C) Over a period of six months, the turbine produced up to 211 gallons of water per day.
D) The turbine produced up to 211 gallons of water per day, this was over a period of six months.
What is C Over a period of six months, the turbine produced up to 211 gallons of water per day.
We use commas before conjunctions Which is NOT the correct way to use a comma before a conjunction?
A. We were hungry, so we grabbed a burger.
B. He wanted to buy the new game, but he didn't have enough money.
C. Do you want to ride your bike, or your scooter?
D. I love to sing yet, I am not very good at it.
What is D? I love to sing yet, I am not very good at it.
Camaraderie
What is Friendship