Editing & Revising
REVISING:
Nancy has not used the most effective word in sentence 4. Which word should replace have to create a more effective sentence?
(1) Students, are you having a difficult time completing all the activities in your schedule? (2) Teachers, are you exhausted from nonstop work? (3) You are not alone. (4) Every day in schools across the nation, teens have challenging classes, hours of homework, and extracurricular activities such as sports and music.
A) carry
B) accept
C) manage
D) enroll
c) manage
The mural in the school hallway shows students standing together during a protest. Bright colors and bold lines help depict the energy and determination of the crowd. Even without reading the artist’s statement, viewers can understand the message the image communicates.
In the excerpt above, what does depict most nearly mean?
A) Confuse the audience
B) Criticize harshly
C) Describe or show
D) Hide from view
C) Describe or show
Think back to the play Trifles. What is a major theme from the play?
A) Justice is always served through the legal system.
B) Women’s experiences and observations are often overlooked.
C) Ambition leads to corruption and downfall.
D) Revenge is the only way to solve personal conflicts.
B) Women’s experiences and observations are often overlooked.
What is an inference?
An educated guess, based on evidence and reasoning
When reading a text, how do you determine key ideas?
Several correct answers:
Details
Title
Context clues
Mood/tone
Diction
Every complete sentence contains a subject (who/what the sentence is mainly about) and a verb (the action being done by the subject).
Is this a complete sentence? If so, correctly identify the subject and the verb of the sentence.
Ethan is not the only teenage gubernatorial candidate this year.
Yes, it is a complete sentence
Subject: Ethan
Verb: is
When the teacher asked for volunteers, Maya raised her hand in a tentative way, glancing around the room as if unsure. Her voice was quiet, and she hesitated before answering the question, waiting to see how others might respond.
In the excerpt above, what does tentative most likely mean?
A) Confident
B) Certain
C) Hesitant
D) Careless
C) Hesitant
Glaspell wrote Trifles during the early 20th century when women had limited rights and influence in public life. The play shows women noticing evidence the men ignore.
Who was most likely the intended audience for this play when it was written?
A) Young children learning about family life
B) The general public interested in social issues
C) Historians studying the 1800s
D) Only feminists
B) The general public interested in social issues
In the story, the young farm boy leaves his small village after discovering a hidden letter from a mentor. He sets out on a long journey to defeat an evil ruler, encountering helpers, magical objects, and challenges along the way.
Which archetype does the main character best represent?
A) The Rebel – someone who breaks rules and challenges authority
B) The Trickster – someone who uses cleverness to outsmart others
C) The Hero – someone who undertakes a journey to face challenges and grow
D) The Outcast – someone rejected by society or isolated
C) The Hero – someone who undertakes a journey to face challenges and grow
The following is an excerpt from a student's essay, "How Military Rations Changed the Way We Eat."
What is the main idea of this passage:
(1) Walk down the aisles of a grocery store and you will find various cans, boxes, bags, and pouches of food available. (2) Specialized packaging allows food to be purchased and kept for long periods of time. (3) Packaged food is a convenient staple in many households and allows for easy transportation and storage. (4) The origin of food storage and preservation is the result of many military advancements in providing provisions for troops far away from home
A) Military advancements changed the way food is stored.
B) Packaged food is widely available and provides convenience in modern households.
C) Grocery stores sell many different types of food.
D) Transportation of food has always been difficult.
A) Military advancements changed the way food is stored.
EDITING:
What change, if any, is needed in sentence 24?
(24) After retiring from NASA, Ride becomes a fierce advocate for science education
A) Change becomes to became
B) Change fierce to feirce
C) Change advocate to advocates
D) No change is needed in sentence 24
A) Change becomes to became
As the soup cooled on the counter, a thick layer began to form on its surface. By the time dinner was served, the liquid had started to congeal, losing its smooth texture and becoming heavy and uneven.
In the passage above, the word congeal means-
A) Warm up
B) Evaporate
C) Thicken or solidify
D) Spill over
C) Thicken or solidify
In the play Trifles, why does Glaspell focus part of the play on the women noticing the “trifles” in the kitchen?
A) To entertain the audience with humor
B) To criticize the local police department
C) To show that women are naturally curious
D) To reveal how small details can hold great significance
D) To reveal how small details can hold great significance
In Trifles, John Wright is described as a quiet, hard-working man who isolates himself and his wife from the community. His controlling behavior contributes to Mrs. Wright’s loneliness and eventual emotional breaking point.
Which archetype best represents John Wright?
A) The Hero – someone who undertakes a journey to face challenges
B) The Mentor – someone who guides and teaches others
C) The Oppressor – someone whose control and harshness create conflict
D) The Trickster – someone who uses cleverness to manipulate others
C) The Oppressor – someone whose control and harshness create conflict
The following is an excerpt from a student's essay, "How Military Rations Changed the Way We Eat."
(5) Food spoils if it cannot be preserved. (6) The mixing of moisture, bacteria, and air makes food deteriorate quickly. (7) This rotting of food proves to be a huge challenge for troops who are many miles away from villages, towns, and cities. (8) Early attempts to provide provisions to troops left them weakened. (9) Troops were also left malnourished and susceptible to disease, which could be fatal. (10) It was obvious that something needed to be done.
Based on the details in the exerpt, what is the main problem presented?
A) Troops refused to eat the food provided.
B) Food spoils quickly, leaving troops weakened and at risk of disease.
C) Villages and towns did not supply enough food for soldiers.
D) The army did not know how to cook nutritious meals.
B) Food spoils quickly, leaving troops weakened and at risk of disease.
EDITING:
What is the correct way to write sentences 13 and 14?
(13) Ride was accepted into the astronaut program and began preparing for a space mission. (14) Trained both physically and mentally.
A) Ride was accepted into the astronaut program and began preparing for a space mission; trained both physically and mentally.
B) Ride was accepted into the astronaut program and began preparing for a space mission by training both physically and mentally.
C) Ride was accepted into the astronaut program and began preparing for a space mission: trained both physically and mentally.
D) Ride was accepted into the astronaut program and began preparing for a space mission and she training both physically and mentally
B) Ride was accepted into the astronaut program and began preparing for a space mission by training both physically and mentally.
After reaching the summit, the hikers rested briefly, despite the cold air. Sweat poured from beneath their jackets, and they had to remove extra layers because of the profuse perspiration caused by the steep climb.
In the passage above, what does profuse most nearly mean?
A) Unexpected
B) Excessive
C) Harmful
D) Sudden
B) Excessive
Competitive video games have become a global phenomenon. Players from around the world participate in tournaments, often streaming their gameplay for millions of viewers. These competitions not only showcase skill and strategy but also build online communities. Coaches and analysts study players’ techniques to improve performance, and fans celebrate victories with fan art, memes, and live chats.
What is the author’s purpose in this passage?
A) To persuade readers to stop playing video games
B) To entertain by telling a fictional story about gaming
C) To inform readers about the global impact of competitive gaming
D) To explain how to win video game tournaments
C) To inform readers about the global impact of competitive gaming
Mrs. O’Sullivan is in the next room, Desmond knows, in her own room listening. If he coughs she will hear. If he sings. She will know exactly the moment he sets down his next word on that top sheet of paper...She is a tall dry-skinned old woman with grey finger-waves caged in blue hair net, whose thick fingers dig into the sides of her face in an agony of desire to sympathize with everything that is said to her. “Oh I know I know I know,” she groans.
What can the reader infer based on the description of Mrs. O’Sullivan?
A) Mrs. O’Sullivan reminds Desmond of a relative he doesn’t like.
B) Desmond feels overwhelmed by Mrs. O’Sullivan’s presence.
C) Desmond is quick to judge people by their appearances.
D) Desmond is prejudiced against elderly people
B) Desmond feels overwhelmed by Mrs. O’Sullivan’s presence.
The following is an excerpt from the article Teen Studies Better Cleaning through Chemistry.
Inspiration for science projects can be found almost anywhere, even in the most common of tasks. Nathan Deng, 14, found his doing the dishes. The teen wondered why hot water worked better than cold water when washing, and what made soap a good cleaner. The simple experiments he devised to investigate these matters earned him the Lemelson Award for Invention here at the Broadcom MASTERS.
What is a key idea from this passage?
A) Nathan Deng enjoys doing the dishes at home.
B) The Broadcom MASTERS only rewards complicated experiments.
C) Hot water is always better than cold water for cleaning.
D) Everyday tasks can inspire scientific inquiry and innovation.
D) Everyday tasks can inspire scientific inquiry and innovation.
Which transition word or phrase should be added to the beginning of the fourth sentence to improve the connection between ideas?
(1) Many people believe that leadership requires age and experience. (2) Young candidates are often viewed as unprepared or unrealistic. (3) Some teenagers, however, have demonstrated strong leadership skills in their schools and communities. (4) They organize events, advocate for change, and motivate others to take action. (5) Young people can bring fresh ideas to politics. (6) These ideas challenge long-standing traditions.
A. For example,
B. In contrast,
C. As a result,
D. Similarly,
A. For example,
Each spring, the neighbors would prepare their gardens for planting. While shoveling the soil, they would often exhume old hockey pucks that had been buried beneath the flowerbeds during the winter.
In the excerpt above, what does exhume mean?
A) Dig up
B) Blend in
C) Establish
D) Conceal
A) Dig up
In The Fall of the House of Usher, Poe describes a decaying mansion and the eerie atmosphere surrounding the Usher family. The narrator observes the gloom, the sickness of Roderick Usher, and the strange events leading to the ultimate collapse of both the family and the house. The story is full of suspense, gothic imagery, and psychological tension.
What is Poe’s primary purpose in writing The Fall of the House of Usher?
A) To entertain readers with a suspenseful and eerie story while exploring themes of decay and madness
B) To persuade readers that old houses are dangerous
C) To inform readers about the architecture of 19th-century mansions
D) To criticize wealthy families for neglecting their estates
A) To entertain readers with a suspenseful and eerie story while exploring themes of decay and madness
Of course Desmond knows the story, has seen it all in his mind a hundred times as if someone else had gone to the trouble of writing it and producing it as a movie just for him. But he has never been one for plunging into things, oceans or stories, and prefers to work his way in gently. That opening paragraph, though, is only a paragraph after all and has no magic, only a few black lifeless lines at the top of the paper. So he writes it out again, beneath the first time, and again under that, and again, hoping that the pen will go on by itself to write the next words and surprise him. But it does not happen, not now.
Which phrase from the excerpt from “The Leper’s Squint” best supports the idea that Desmond is struggling with his writing?
A) has seen it all in his mind a hundred times
B) he has never been one for plunging into things
C) prefers to work his way in gently
D) hoping that the pen will go on by itself to write the next words
D) hoping that the pen will go on by itself to write the next words
The following is an excerpt from the article Teen Studies Better Cleaning through Chemistry.
Nathan didn’t have a lot of fancy equipment to work with. That didn’t stop him. To measure surface tension, he gathered a large plastic syringe, some tubing, a kitchen scale—and of course some water. If a water droplet has a high surface tension, it holds together longer—and gets bigger—before a drop breaks apart. Nathan filled his syringe with water and slowly pushed it out over the scale. Bigger drops have more surface tension. So by weighing his drops, the teen could find out if changes he made to the water increased or decreased the surface tension.
What key idea about experimentation do the details in paragraph 7 support?
A) Experimentation requires careful timing to ensure accuracy.
B) Experimentation needs to be conducted in a scientific laboratory.
C) Experimentation does not necessarily require expensive lab materials.
D) Experimentation cannot be completed in multiple steps.
C) Experimentation does not necessarily require expensive lab materials.