Clarity
Noun Phrases
Verbs
Combining Sentences
APA
100
Edit for clarity and concision: I never at all met her until the day before today, which was yesterday.
I never met her until yesterday.
100
Edit: Let's stop at the store and buy the magazine. I need something to read on the flight.
We don't know which magazine, but it's only one. So "a magazine" is correct.
100
IDENTIFY THE ERROR AND EDIT: Cell phones have been thought that they would replace laptops.
Passive voice: It has been thought that cell phones would replace laptops.
100
EDIT: Organic farming must also preserve the soil, and treat livestock humanely.
Delete the comma.
100
What is the problem with this in-text citation? According to Krolak (2015), she states that EPGS is one of the most challenging programs at MIIS.
Delete "According to" or "she states"
200
Revise for clarity/concision: Future educators of tomorrow need to prepare their students for a constantly changing world.
Future educators need to prepare their students for a constantly changing world.
200
Edit: American Idol is one of most popular TV shows today.
"one of THE most" -- Always "the" before "most" and other superlatives.
200
Identify the error and edit: In the past 20 years, the prevalence of autism increased dramatically.
present --> present perfect to indicate a connection between the past and present
200
EDIT: Organic foods are produced without use antibiotics, preservatives, radiation, or pesticides.
USE --> USING
200
What are the three different ways we can use a source in our papers?
Summarizing, paraphrasing and quoting
300
MIIS has a faculty and staff relations improvement program.
Too many nouns! MIIS has a program to improve relations among faculty and staff.
300
When the President Obama went to Africa, he spoke strongly against corruption.
No "the" in front of "President" -- his name is provided!
300
IDENTIFY THE ERROR AND EDIT: Interviewers who spoke moderately fast, at a rate of 3.5 words per second, was more successful at getting people to agree.
Subject/verb agreement (interviewers) was -- were
300
Identify the error: Although, local food was once seen as the concern of the eco-fringe.
Sentence fragment
300
What are the three requirements for avoiding plagiarism when summarizing or paraphrasing?
Change the structure; change the vocabulary; cite the source
400
Revise: The establishment of a different approach on the part of the committee has become a necessity.
Put the action in the verb! The committee has to approach the problem differently.
400
Don't forget to send Julie information that she requested yesterday.
"the information" -- it is more specific because of the relative clause.
400
Identify the error and edit: However, a two-year agreement requires for actual phone service.
Passive voice: However, a two-year agreement is required for actual phone service.
400
Edit: But advocates of organic and local foods hope for several benefits.
Delete "But" and replace with "However,"
400
What are two problems with this in-text citation? Approximately 25 percent of verbs in academic writing are in the passive voice. (Bieber et. al., 1999)
No period after voice and no period after "et"
500
Revise: I will now make a few observations concerning the matter of aid funding.
Language inflation! "I will now make a few observations about aid funding."
500
Many research has been conducted to discover the true cause of autism.
"research" is a non-count noun, so we cannot use "many". -- Much research
500
If Obama were running for president in 2016, many people would have been excited.
The "if clause" is in the future, so the following result needs to be "would + base form" to show the present. If Obama were running for president in 2016, many people would be excited.
500
EDIT: Moreover, there is some scientific evidence that eating organic foods may, in fact, be healthier; because such foods contain fewer hazardous chemicals (such as pesticide residues).
Delete the semi-colon
500
What should appear at the top of every page of your paper?
A header with a shortened title on the left and a page number on the right.
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