Word Choice
What word do we avoid using to begin our commentary/reasoning?
Bonus: What is the other word we avoid using?
"Shows"
Bonus: "Says"
Edit the following sentence:
The Dodgers a baseball team play on Wednesday in South Korea.
Bonus: Why did you make that edit? Must use the specific vocabulary word.
The Dodgers, a baseball team, play on Wednesday in South Korea.
Add commas after "Dodgers" and after "team".
Bonus: "a baseball team" is an appositive that is providing extra information about the Dodgers.
Write an effective topic sentence for the following paragraph:
_______________. The show features a group of brave and loyal puppies who work together to protect their community and solve problems. The value of Paw Patrol for youth lies in its ability to provide entertainment and promote positive values such as teamwork, courage, and community service. Through engaging storylines and relatable characters, the show can help young children develop important social and emotional skills, such as empathy, problem-solving, and resilience. Additionally, the show can serve as a tool for parents and educators to spark conversations with children about important topics such as safety, friendship, and responsibility. Overall, while there may be some criticisms of the show, Paw Patrol can be a valuable and enjoyable experience for young children that promotes positive values and social-emotional development.
Paw Patrol is a popular animated television series that has gained a wide following among young children due to its positive message and parental support.
Put the parts of an essay in order.
Body Paragraph
Body Paragraph
Body paragraph
Conclusion Paragraph
Introduction Paragraph
Introduction Paragraph
Body Paragraph
Body Paragraph
Body Paragraph
Conclusion Paragraph
What is the difference in paragraph structure between argumentative and explanatory essays?
Argumentative has a counter argument paragraph.
Explanatory does not.
Edit the following sentence:
It says that it will make you and those around you happier.
Replace the word "says"
Example: It mentions that it will make you and those around you happier.
Edit the following sentence:
To begin, "Monrovia softball is off to a great season". (pg. 12)
To begin, "Monrovia softball is off to a great season"
(pg. 12).
Write an effective concluding sentence for the following paragraph:
Sports can bring a wide range of benefits to schools and students. By providing opportunities for physical activity and competition, sports can promote physical health, self-esteem, and social connections among students. In addition, sports can teach important life skills such as teamwork, leadership, and perseverance, which can be valuable in both academic and professional settings. Sports can also help students develop a sense of school pride and community spirit, fostering a positive school culture and improving overall morale. Furthermore, participation in sports can have a positive impact on academic performance, as physical activity has been linked to improved cognitive function and academic achievement. ____________________________.
Overall, incorporating sports into school programs can provide numerous benefits to students and contribute to a well-rounded educational experience.
Put the Intro Paragraph in order.
__1__Finance teaches students how to save money, use it responsibly, use it wisely, and much more skills with money. Finance is a key skill to success. Even though it a vital skill to be known, it is a untaught skill in many school and you have to go out of your way to learn it. 80% of Americans say they wish they could have taken finance in high school. Only 21 states in the US mandate finance as a class.
__2__78% of Americans struggle and live paycheck to paycheck just because they didn't have the opportunity to learn finance early on.
__3__Monrovia Highschool students would benefit on a large scale from adding finance as a class because it can prevent unwanted stress, it is a necessary skill to survive in our world, and it can improve the overall outlook of your future.
2,1,3
__2__78% of Americans struggle and live paycheck to paycheck just because they didn't have the opportunity to learn finance early on.
__1__Finance teaches students how to save money, use it responsibly, use it wisely, and much more skills with money. Finance is a key skill to success. Even though it a vital skill to be known, it is a untaught skill in many school and you have to go out of your way to learn it. 80% of Americans say they wish they could have taken finance in high school. Only 21 states in the US mandate finance as a class.
__3__Monrovia Highschool students would benefit on a large scale from adding finance as a class because it can prevent unwanted stress, it is a necessary skill to survive in our world, and it can improve the overall outlook of your future.
Name two shows that have a dog as one of the main characters.
Bonus: Name three more.
Paw Patrol, Scooby Doo, Blues Clues, Clifford the Big Red Dog, Family Guy
What are three high level vocabulary words to replace the word "shows" when saying "This shows how extreme sports ..."?
Illustrates, demonstrates, conveys, highlights, emphasizes, etc.
Edit the following sentence:
In addition, "Monrovia has several sports that are doing well to start the season. This includes volleyball, track, and swim. (Source 2)"
In addition, "Monrovia has several sports that are doing well to start the season. This includes volleyball, track, and swim" (Source 2).
What are three transition words for your first piece of evidence?
What are three transition words for your second piece of evidence?
What are three transition words for your concluding/closing sentence?
To begin, To start, First, For example, For starters, For instance, For one, Etc.
Second, To add on, In addition, Furthermore, Additionally, Etc.
In conclusion, All in all, To sum up, Finally, To conclude, Etc.
Put the conclusion in order.
__1__Cooking class is more that just baking; it is preparing teens for a better future by teaching responsibility, health, and saving money.
__2__Students should be able to have more control of what they actually want to take in high school. Teens should be able to take classes that can help them in the future or life in general.
__3__In conclusion, including cooking classes in Monrovia High School’s curriculum would be beneficial because it allows students to make connections across subjects, develops social skills, and supports healthier choices.
__4__Talk with your school's administration and those in your community about the benefits of adding cooking class to the Monrovia High School curriculum.
3,2,1,4
__3__In conclusion, including cooking classes in Monrovia High School’s curriculum would be beneficial because it allows students to make connections across subjects, develops social skills, and supports healthier choices.
__2__Students should be able to have more control of what they actually want to take in high school. Teens should be able to take classes that can help them in the future or life in general.
__1__Cooking class is more that just baking; it is preparing teens for a better future by teaching responsibility, health, and saving money.
__4__Talk with your school's administration and those in your community about the benefits of adding cooking class to the Monrovia High School curriculum.
What teams are on the first slide?
Hint: There are six.
Improve the sentence. Rewrite any part that you believe should be improved.
This shows that my evidence supports my topic because extreme sports pushes your body beyond what it is built to withstand. Excessive physical stress on your body begins to add up over time which will lead to long term irreversible body pain. This will not only effect your ability to move, but also your quality of life by not allowing you to complete simple tasks, support your family by working, and support your kids by being present with them.
Level up the word "shows"
Remove the part telling the reader that the evidence supports my topic sentence. We do not need to literally tell them that it supports it.
New sentence beginning: This illustrates how extreme sports pushes your body beyond what it is built to withstand.
Edit the following sentence:
"Monrovia's band has been successful in competitions this year" (Liam).
Add a transition word followed by a comma
Example: For instance,
__________"Monrovia's band has been successful in competitions this year" (Liam).
Improve the commentary/reasoning by adding to it.
Sports Science helps athletes avoid injury and stay healthy. First, Dr. Smrithi states, "It helps to increase both performance and endurance while lowering the chance of injury" (24). This highlights that Sports Science can help an athlete be very healthy, while avoiding injury. It helps the athlete understand their own body.
_____________________________________ _____________________________________ _____________________________________ _____________________________________.
Sports Science helps athletes avoid injury and stay healthy. First, Dr. Smrithi states, "It helps to increase both performance and endurance while lowering the chance of injury" (24). This highlights that Sports Science can help an athlete be very healthy, while avoiding injury. It helps the athlete understand their own body. Sports play a major role in many students lives. Reducing students' injuries supports their mental and physical health, keeps them playing, and helps them stay in class in order to keep up strong academics. This also helps all students. Even when not playing sports, you use your body in similar ways, and keeping yourself healthy is vital to improving yourself everyday.
Put the short body paragraph in order.
_1_This vividly conveys how these skills can be used to make students successful outside of their high school careers. These skills make students more open to different job opportunities and would ultimately make them more valuable employees as well as college applicants. These opportunities could greatly help with networking and would give them prior work environment skills. The knowledge they gain is necessary to live a well balanced life. This might be as simple as how to cook meals, budgeting, and communications, all of which lead to a healthier and well rounded lifestyle.
_2_Home economics teaches students vital skills to use in adulthood.
_3_In closing, these reasons demonstrate how beneficial Home Economics is in students' lives.
_4_To illustrate, Stehno, from the Liberal Studies Program states, “Home economics is an important aspect of the curriculum for high school students as it teaches future generations life skills necessary for success - financial literacy, healthy lifestyles, and political competency” (Stehno).
2,4,1,3
_2_Home economics teaches students vital skills to use in adulthood.
_4_To illustrate, Stehno, from the Liberal Studies Program states, “Home economics is an important aspect of the curriculum for high school students as it teaches future generations life skills necessary for success - financial literacy, healthy lifestyles, and political competency” (Stehno).
_1_This vividly conveys how these skills can be used to make students successful outside of their high school careers. These skills make students more open to different job opportunities and would ultimately make them more valuable employees as well as college applicants. These opportunities could greatly help with networking and would give them prior work environment skills. The knowledge they gain is necessary to live a well balanced life. This might be as simple as how to cook meals, budgeting, and communications, all of which lead to a healthier and well rounded lifestyle.
_3_In closing, these reasons demonstrate how beneficial Home Economics is in students' lives.
How many pictures of Kike are on the first slide?
Three
What is/the purpose of a thesis?
Bonus: What do you include in your thesis.
The purpose of a thesis is to let the reader know what you will be talking about in your essay and how you will discuss it/answer it.
It is like a preview or a rode map of your essay.
Bonus: Answers the prompt and how you will answer the prompt (3 reasons).
Write the evidence as you would in an essay.
Information:
Second piece of evidence,
Source: Matthews
Evidence: Theater is putting on a performance in April.
In addition, "Theater is putting on a performance in April" (Matthews).
Improve the commentary/reasoning by adding to it.
If you know basic first aid you can save lives. For one, the Department of Neurosurgery of the University of Ioannina states, “Daily, a large number of people die as a result of cardiac arrest. This number would be lower if more people were trained in first aid and provided immediate assistance to people facing cardiac arrest, as the brain can survive without oxygen for 3-5 mins” (13). This demonstrates how the number of deaths by cardiac arrest could be reduced if people were taught how to confront it. It also demonstrates how the brain can’t be deprived of oxygen for too long.
_____________________________________ _____________________________________ _____________________________________ _____________________________________.
If you know basic first aid you can save lives. For one, the Department of Neurosurgery of the University of Ioannina states, “Daily, a large number of people die as a result of cardiac arrest. This number would be lower if more people were trained in first aid and provided immediate assistance to people facing cardiac arrest, as the brain can survive without oxygen for 3-5 mins” (13). This demonstrates how the number of deaths by cardiac arrest could be reduced if people were taught how to confront it. It also demonstrates how the brain can’t be deprived of oxygen for too long. This is significant because if high schools were to introduce a First Aid class the number of people who die from cardiac arrest would be significantly lower. When someone requires assistance and doesn’t have much time, someone with the knowledge of basic procedures would be able to help in an instant.
Put the body paragraph in order.
_1_This conveys that if students learned this early on in high school, they will be more prepared to do taxes in the future and avoid getting fined and getting serious consequences that could hurt them in the long run. Learning to file taxes is an essential life skill that can help individuals make informed financial decisions and be better prepared for their financial futures. By adding taxation into the curriculum, students can learn about important financial concepts, such as tax brackets, deductions, and credits. These skills can set students up for financial success leading to early retirement and a less stressful life. _2_ Learning about money is an essential life skill that can be imparted/ communicated to students through incorporating tax education into the school curriculum. _3_This emphasizes the fact that many Americans need a basic understanding of money and financial management. By incorporating tax education into the curriculum, high school students can gain the knowledge and skills they need to make important financial decisions and avoid these consequences in the future. These consequences can be severe enough to change the outlook of your life including preventing you from retiring. _4_Furthermore, “If students could learn to file their taxes in the classroom, they could be better prepared for their financial futures” (Mehra). _5_For instance, “This is especially pertinent because as the following data shows, Americans' level of money understanding is quite grim” (Mehra). _6_ If students could learn these skills they would be more prepared for life after high school and be more successful financially.
2,5,3,4,1,6
Learning about money is an essential life skill that can be imparted/communicated to students through incorporating tax education into the school curriculum. For instance, “This is especially pertinent because as the following data shows, Americans' level of money understanding is quite grim” (Mehra). This emphasizes the fact that many Americans need a basic understanding of money and financial management. By incorporating tax education into the curriculum, high school students can gain the knowledge and skills they need to make important financial decisions and avoid these consequences in the future. These consequences can be severe enough to change the outlook of your life including preventing you from retiring. Furthermore, “If students could learn to file their taxes in the classroom, they could be better prepared for their financial futures” (Mehra). This conveys that if students learned this early on in high school, they will be more prepared to do taxes in the future and avoid getting fined and getting serious consequences that could hurt them in the long run. Learning to file taxes is an essential life skill that can help individuals make informed financial decisions and be better prepared for their financial futures. By adding taxation into the curriculum, students can learn about important financial concepts, such as tax brackets, deductions, and credits. These skills can set students up for financial success leading to early retirement and a less stressful life. If students could learn these skills they would be more prepared for life after high school and be more successful financially.
What team did Kike Hernandez sign with?
Bonus: What two numbers did he wear with the Dodgers?
Dodgers
Bonus: 14 and 8 (because of Kobe)