Revising and Editing
Unclear meaning
Combining Sentences
Punctuation
Composition
100
(2) I was flying with my family to visit my Aunt Glenda my cousin Blenda and my cousin Splenda.
Problem:
How should Ethan revise sentence 2?
I was flying with my family to visit my Aunt, Glenda, Blenda, and Splenda.
I was flying with my family to visit my Aunt Glenda and my cousins Blenda and Splenda.
No revision is needed.
I was flying with my family to visit my aunt Glenda, my cousin Blenda, and my cousin Splenda.
I was flying with my family to visit my Aunt Glenda and my cousins Blenda and Splenda.
100
(2) They just kept on buzzing.
Problem:
The meaning of sentence 2 is unclear. Hunni can improve it by changing they to
bees
workers
no revision needed
the worker bees
the worker bees
100
(5) I like to use pictures. (6) I like to use few words.
Problem:
What is the correct way to write sentences 5 and 6?
I like to use pictures, but I like to use few words.
I like to use pictures and few words.
I like to use pictures and to use few words.
I like to use pictures, and I like to use few words.
I like to use pictures and few words.
100
(20) My sister said, I want to be Thing 2.
Problem:
How should sentence 20 be changed?
Add comma after want
Change comma to a period
Add quotation marks before I and after 2
Delete comma
Add quotation marks before I and after 2
100
Should you answer the multiple-choice questions first or write the composition first?
Answer the multiple-choice questions first.
200
(8) Finally, get an old book. (9) An old book you will not read again works good for this project. (10) Next, fold each page the same way. (11) Then, think about the way you would like to fold each page.
Problem:
The second paragraph does NOT read well. How should Marko correct sentence 8?
Change Finally to Later
Change Finally to As soon as
Change Finally to When suddenly
Change Finally to First
Change Finally to First
200
(9) Spending a few hours a day on a job can teach teens stuff needed for life.
Problem:
Thor wants to use a clearer word than stuff in sentence 9. Which of these words should Thor use?
skills
make no change
things
work
skills
200
(10) He has his own video game. (11) He has his own clothing line.
Problem:
What is the best way to combine sentences 10 and 11?
He has his own video game, he has his own clothing line.
He has his own video game and clothing line.
He has his own video game and own clothing line.
He has his game and clothing line.
He has his own video game and clothing line.
200
(8) Kids today grow up with computers and it is only fair that they understand computers.
Problem:
What change, if any, should Jake make in sentence 8?
Insert a comma after with computers
Make no change
Add a comma after up
Add a comma after fair
Insert a comma after with computers
200
What two things are in the introduction?
Strong lead and a topic sentence
300
We have three big kids on our team, and they ______ home runs for us all the time.
Problem:
Which verb below correctly completes the sentence above?
hit
hits
is hitting
hitting
hit
300
(6) I felt so light as I used my wings and flew.
Problem:
Hunni wants to use a stronger word than "used" in sentence 6. Which word should she use instead?
buzzed
had
flew
watched
buzzed
300
You need to study tonight. You may fail your test tomorrow.
Problem:
Which answer below BEST combines the two sentences above?
You need to study tonight, or you may fail your test tomorrow.
You need to study tonight and fail your test tomorrow.
Studying tonight, you may fail your test tomorrow.
You need to study tonight and you may fail your test tomorrow.
You need to study tonight, or you may fail your test tomorrow.
300
(10) There are many versions but an official one does not exist.
Problem:
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 10?
Insert a comma after versions
Add a period before but
Make no revisions
Change period to a question mark
Insert a comma after versions
300
What is in your conclusion?
Restate your topic sentence then end with a hope, wish, or feel.
400
Neil ___________ fifteen red scuba tanks.
Problem:
Which verb correctly completes the sentence shown above?
are have
is having
has
have
has
400
(1) Children should take music lessons early. (2) Learning the do-re-mis can help beyond the ABCs. (3) In classical Indian music, there are seven basic notes. (4) Whether it is singing and playing an instrument, music helps the brain grow.
Problem:
The first paragraph is hard to follow because one of the sentences does NOT belong in it. Which sentence should Atul delete?
Sentence 3
Sentence 4
Sentence 1
Sentence 2
Sentence 3
400
(1) I wanted to dress up for Halloween. (2) I did not have extra money.
Problem:
What is the BEST way to combine sentences 1 and 2?
I wanted to dress up for Halloween. And I did not have extra money.
I wanted to dress up for Halloween, because I did not have extra money.
I wanted to dress up. For Halloween I did not have extra money.
I wanted to dress up for Halloween, but I did not have extra money.
I wanted to dress up for Halloween, but I did not have extra money.
400
(12) She wanted to be a big girl but she missed her toy.
Problem:
How should Samantha correct sentence 12?
Put big in quotation marks
Insert a comma after girl
Add a period after girl
The sentence is correct
Insert a comma after girl
400
What does FEED stand for?
Fact, Explain, Example, Personal Detail
500
(2) I like it because the story is simple but it has a good message.
Problem:
How should Jaq correct sentence 2?
Insert a comma after simple
Add a period before but
Add a comma after it
Make no revision
Insert a comma after simple
500
Raul is writing a report on hurricanes. Following is a draft of his paper. It contains errors.
Hurricanes: What they are
(1) Hurricanes is large tropical storms. (2) They are also known as tropical cyclones. (3) They can have wind speeds up to 160 mph. (4) 80% of New Orleans was flooded in Katrina.
Hurricanes in the U.S.
(5) Heavy rain also happen in hurricanes. (6) Hurricane Katrina striked Louisiana in August of 2005. (7) It was one of the worse hurricanes in the U.S. (8) Misisipi was also affected by this huricane.
Hurricane Safety
(9) Hurricanes can be very dangerous. (10) Stay away from windows. (11) Do not use phones or candles.
Problem: Sentence 4 is NOT in the right place. Where should it be moved so the report reads better?
Make no change
To the second paragraph
To the beginning of the first paragraph
To the third paragraph
To the second paragraph
500
(2) It is the day to honor children. (3) It is the day to protect children.
Problem:
Which of these BEST combines sentences 2 and 3?
It is the day; to honor children, to protect children.
It is the day to honor children and to protect them.
It is the day, to honor children, to protect children.
It is the day to honor and protect children.
It is the day to honor and protect children.
500
(3) Deborah Vital, a guidance counselor, says, I think a job gets a teenager ready for the life ahead.”
Problem:
How should Thor correct sentence 3?
Delete quotation marks
Change the comma after says to a period
Make no change
Add quotation marks before I
Add quotation marks before I
500
What are the steps that you HAVE to do before you write your final draft on the lined paper?
Brainstorm, write a rough draft, then revise and edit