COMMAS
GRAMMAR
Plural or Posessive
EDITING
100
Swords flashing our heroes dashed into action.
Swords flashing, our heroes dashed into action
100
If a student parks a car on campus, they have to buy a parking sticker.
If a student parks a car on campus, he or she has to buy a parking sticker. OR If students park their cars on campus, they have to buy a parking sticker.
100
Plural, plural posessive, or singular posessive? The children's game was postponed until next Saturday.
The childrens game was postponed until next Saturday.
100
Of the less popular forms of energy is tidal.
Tidal is one of the less popular forms of energy. Or any answer that fixes the fragment and makes it active voice.
200
The climbers must reach the summit today or they will have to turn back.
The climbers must reach the summit today, or they will have to turn back.
200
Everybody should do their best.
Everybody should do his or her best. (Everybody, anybody, somebody, etc. are singular!)
200
After reading the original study, the article remains unconvincing.
After reading the original study, I find the article unconvincing. Add a subject to fix the dangling modifier.
200
Often an overlooked "drug" that many don't realize is sugar.
Sugar is a "drug" that many people overlook. Make it active voice!
300
Aunt Emilia was an impossible demanding guest.
Aunt Emilia was an impossible, demanding guest.
300
As the child becomes older they gradually begin to alter their state of consciousness through use of chemical agents.
As children grow older, they gradually begin to alter their state of consciousness through use of chemical agents. Fix the pronoun disagreement.
300
Trouble is caused when people disobey rules that have been established for the safety of all
When people disobeys laws established for everyone's safety, trouble results. Or any sentence that makes it active voice and simplifies the wording.
300
But it is mostly just a change in preference, concerning alcohol.
However, alcohol is primarily a change in (matter of?) preference. Take out the conjunction and replace with a transition word. Fix the wording (make it active).
400
Your cat watching the dog intently walked carefully away.
Your cat, watching the dog intently, walked carefully away. non-essential clause.
400
Although the motorcycle hit the tree, it was not damaged.
The motorcycle was not damaged, even though it hit the tree. Or any sentence that clarifies the vague pronoun "it."
400
The production manager was asked to write his report quickly, accurately, and in a detailed manner.
The production manager was asked to write his report quickly, accurately, and thoroughly. Fix the non-parallel construction.
400
That end being the need to experience other modes of consciousness, drugs just so happen to get the job done.
People have the need to experience other modes of consciousness, and drugs get the job done. Or any sentence that adds a subject, makes it active voice and simplifies the wording.
500
Jan's costume was completed with bright red snakeskin sandals.
Correct. No commas.
500
As a child growing up in Nigeria, my mother taught me to treat all elders with respect.
When I was a child growing up in Nigeria, my mother taught me to treat all elders with respect. Or any correction that fixes the dangling modifier and adds a subject.
500
Similar to other physiological desires of our body, altering consciousness in among them.
Altering consciousness is one of our physiological desires. Or any answer that fixes the redundancy and simplifies the wording.
500
In Weil's essay "Why People Take Drugs", he argues that drugs are used in order to satisfy one's desire's, and drugs are used to learn and discover certain experiences that the effects of drugs have on oneself.
In his essay "Why People Take Drugs," Weil argues that people use drugs to satisfy their desires and discover new experiences. Or any sentence that gets rid of the redundancies, simplifies the wordiness and fixes the punctuation.
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