Revising
(1) Have you ever seen a porcupine? (2) Porcupines are known for their needle-like spikes, called quills. (3)They cover the back, sides, and tail. (4) A porcupine can have more than 30,000 quills. (5) Thats a lot of quills!
(6) The quills are sharp bristles of hair. (7) They are the porcupine’s defense against other animals. (8) When an animal attaches the porcupine, its quills detach. (9) The quills stick into the flesh of the attacker and are very painful and could be deadly. (10) In fact, I would definitely stay away from porcupines.
The word attaches is not the right word for sentence 8. Which word would be best to describe when an animal is violent toward another animal ?
A. includes
B. joins
C. attacks
D. attempts
C. attacks
(1) Did you know that Vampires are real? (2) Well at least vampire bats are real. (3) They get there names because they drink the blood of other animals. (4) The vampire bats are nocturnal mammals. (5)That means they do their hunting at night.
(6) The vampire bats mostly drink the blood of cows, horses, pigs, and even birds. (7) The bats feed on these animals while they are asleep. (8) They are so light the animals don’t even feel the bats feeding. (9) The bats make a small cut on the animals and then lap up the blood with their tongues. (10) The animals are not harmed during the feeding. (11) It’s very important the vampire bats get blood nightly. (12) If they miss feeding two nights in a row they will die.
What changes, if any, should be made to sentence 1 ?
A Change real to really real
B Delete Did
C Change Vampires to vampires
D No change is needed
C Change Vampires to vampires
(1) Last summer, my family and I went camping. (2) The campsite was surrounded by tall trees, we were right next to the lake. (3) During the day I would go swiming in the lake.
(4) My sister wouldn’t never jump in. (5) She said she was scared of the fish biting her.
(6) My parents would take us hiking in the woods to see the animals. (7) It was fun because you never knew what you would find. (8) My sister would get frustrated when they ran away. (9) All she wanted to do was get close enough to take a picture of them.
(10) Camping is so much fun. (11) I can’t wait to go back next year.
What is the correct way to write sentence 2?
A The campsite was surrounded by tall trees, and we were right. Next to the lake.
B When the campsite was surrounded by tall trees. We were right next to the lake.
C The campsite was surrounded by tall trees. And we were right,
next to the lake.
D The campsite was surrounded by tall trees, and we
were right next to the lake.
D The campsite was surrounded by tall trees, and we were right next to the lake.
A Day in the Life of a Cat
(1) “Is it dinnertime yet,” I exclaimed. (2) I have been busy all day running around this barn chasing mice. (3) It is tough being a cat. (4) Everyone thinks cats are lazy. (5) And all we do is sleep. (6) That is not true! (7) We are made to hunt mice, play with kids, and cuddle with our owners.
(8) All that work makes me tired and hungry. (9) So, have you saw my owner? (10) I would really like my dinner. (11) If your not going to eat that fish, I’ll take it. (12) Seriously, give me the fish!
What change needs to be made to sentence 11?
A Change I’ll to i’ll
B Change to eat to too eat
C Change your to you’re
D No change should be made.
C Change your to you’re
(1) Have you ever seen a porcupine? (2) Porcupines are known for their needle-like spikes, called quills. (3)They cover the back, sides, and tail. (4) A porcupine can have more than 30,000 quills. (5) Thats a lot of quills!
(6) The quills are sharp bristles of hair. (7) They are the porcupine’s defense against other animals. (8) When an animal attaches the porcupine, its quills detach. (9) The quills stick into the flesh of the attacker and are very painful and could be deadly. (10) In fact, I would definitely stay away from porcupines.
What change should be made in sentence 5 ?
A Change Thats to That’s
B Change a lot to alot
C Insert a comma after Thats
D No change should be made in this sentence.
A Change Thats to That’s
(1) Have you ever seen a porcupine? (2) Porcupines are known for their needle-like spikes, called quills. (3)They cover the back, sides, and tail. (4) A porcupine can have more than 30,000 quills. (5) Thats a lot of quills!
(6) The quills are sharp bristles of hair. (7) They are the porcupine’s defense against other animals. (8) When an animal attaches the porcupine, its quills detach. (9) The quills stick into the flesh of the attacker and are very painful and could be deadly. (10) In fact, I would definitely stay away from porcupines.
James needs to use a better transition at the beginning of sentence 10. Which of the following should replace In Fact?
A However
B For example
C Therefore
D Finally
C. Therefore
(1) JJ Watt is one of the best defensive players in the NFL. (2) He started playing football for the Houston Texans and now plays for the Arizona Cardinals. (3) JJ was voted Best Defensive Player of the Year in 2012, 2014, and 2015. (4) It did not come easy to him. (5) He had to work hardly for everything.
(6) JJ Watt is determined to be the best football player he can be. (7) He gets up at 3:45 am to workout and goes to bed at 7:00pm. (8) He works out and trains for at least twelve hours a day. (9) He is always focussed on football. (10) JJ Watt believes work hard and make your dreams come true.
What change should be made in sentence 3?
F Change the period to a question mark
G Delete the comma after 2012
H Change voted to vote
J No change should be made to this sentence
J No change should be made to this sentence
A Day in the Life of a Cat
(1) “Is it dinnertime yet,” I exclaimed. (2) I have been busy all day running around this barn chasing mice. (3) It is tough being a cat. (4) Everyone thinks cats are lazy. (5) And all we do is sleep. (6) That is not true! (7) We are made to hunt mice, play with kids, and cuddle with our owners.
(8) All that work makes me tired and hungry. (9) So, have you saw my owner? (10) I would really like my dinner. (11) If your not going to eat that fish, I’ll take it. (12) Seriously, give me the fish!
What is the correct way to write sentence 4 and 5?
F Everyone thinks cats are lazy, and all we do is sleep.
G Everyone thinks cats are lazy and all. We do is sleep.
H Everyone thinks cats are lazy, all we do is sleep.
J Sentences 4 and 5 are written correctly.
F Everyone thinks cats are lazy, and all we do is sleep.
(1) Did you know that Vampires are real? (2) Well at least vampire bats are real. (3) They get there names because they drink the blood of other animals. (4) The vampire bats are nocturnal mammals. (5)That means they do their hunting at night.
(6) The vampire bats mostly drink the blood of cows, horses, pigs, and even birds. (7) The bats feed on these animals while they are asleep. (8) They are so light the animals don’t even feel the bats feeding. (9) The bats make a small cut on the animals and then lap up the blood with their tongues. (10) The animals are not harmed during the feeding. (11) It’s very important the vampire bats get blood nightly. (12) If they miss feeding two nights in a row they will die.
What change, if any, should be made to sentence 3?
A Insert a comma after blood
B Change there to their
C Change drink to drunk
D No change should be made.
B Change there to their
(1) JJ Watt is one of the best defensive players in the NFL. (2) He started playing football for the Houston Texans and now plays for the Arizona Cardinals. (3) JJ was voted Best Defensive Player of the Year in 2012, 2014, and 2015. (4) It did not come easy to him. (5) He had to work hardly for everything.
(6) JJ Watt is determined to be the best football player he can be. (7) He gets up at 3:45 am to workout and goes to bed at 7:00pm. (8) He works out and trains for at least twelve hours a day. (9) He is always focussed on football. (10) JJ Watt believes work hard and make your dreams come true.
How should sentence 5 be changed?
F Insert a comma after work
G Change had to has
H Change everything to every thing
J Change hardly to hard
J Change hardly to hard
(1) JJ Watt is one of the best defensive players in the NFL. (2) He started playing football for the Houston Texans and now plays for the Arizona Cardinals. (3) JJ was voted Best Defensive Player of the Year in 2012,2014, and 2015. (4) It did not come easy to him. (5) He had to work hardly for everything.
(6) JJ Watt is determined to be the best football player he can be. (7) He gets up at 3:45 am to workout and goes to bed at 7:00pm. (8) He works out and trains for at least twelve hours a day. (9) He is always focussed on football. (10) JJ Watt believes work hard and make your dreams come true.
What is the BEST way to revise sentence 10?
F JJ Watt believes if you work hard, you can make your dreams come true.
G JJ Watt believes hard work and dreams come true.
H JJ Watt believes dream and work hard.
J The sentence does not need to be revised.
F. JJ Watt believes if you work hard, you can make your dreams come true.
A Day in the Life of a Cat
(1) “Is it dinnertime yet,” I exclaimed. (2) I have been busy all day running around this barn chasing mice. (3) It is tough being a cat. (4) Everyone thinks cats are lazy. (5) And all we do is sleep. (6) That is not true! (7) We are made to hunt mice, play with kids, and cuddle with our owners.
(8) All that work makes me tired and hungry. (9) So, have you saw my owner? (10) I would really like my dinner. (11) If your not going to eat that fish, I’ll take it. (12) Seriously, give me the fish!
What changes, if any, should be made to sentence 1?
A Change the comma to a question mark
B Change exclaimed to exclaim
C Delete the quotation marks after the comma
D Make no change
A Change the comma to a question mark
(1) Have you ever seen a porcupine? (2) Porcupines are known for their needle-like spikes, called quills. (3)They cover the back, sides, and tail. (4) A porcupine can have more than 30,000 quills. (5) Thats a lot of quills!
(6) The quills are sharp bristles of hair. (7) They are the porcupine’s defense against other animals. (8) When an animal attaches the porcupine, its quills detach. (9) The quills stick into the flesh of the attacker and are very painful and could be deadly. (10) In fact, I would definitely stay away from porcupines.
What is the correct way to write sentence 9?
A The quills stick into the flesh of the attacker and are very painful. They could be deadly.
B The quills stick into the flesh of the attacker. And are very painful. Could be deadly.
C The quills stick into the flesh. Of the attacker, and are
very painful, and could be deadly.
D The quills stick into the flesh of the attacker. Are very
painful and could be deadly.
A The quills stick into the flesh of the attacker and are very painful. They could be deadly.
(1) JJ Watt is one of the best defensive players in the NFL. (2) He started playing football for the Houston Texans and now plays for the Arizona Cardinals. (3) JJ was voted Best Defensive Player of the Year in 2012, 2014, and 2015. (4) It did not come easy to him. (5) He had to work hardly for everything.
(6) JJ Watt is determined to be the best football player he can be. (7) He gets up at 3:45 am to workout and goes to bed at 7:00pm. (8) He works out and trains for at least twelve hours a day. (9) He is always focussed on football. (10) JJ Watt believes work hard and make your dreams come true.
What change, if any, should be made to sentence 9?
A Change He is to Hes
B Change football to Football
C Change focussed to focused
D No change should be made.
C Change focussed to focused
A Day in the Life of a Cat
(1) “Is it dinnertime yet,” I exclaimed. (2) I have been busy all day running around this barn chasing mice. (3) It is tough being a cat. (4) Everyone thinks cats are lazy. (5) And all we do is sleep. (6) That is not true! (7) We are made to hunt mice, play with kids, and cuddle with our owners.
(8) All that work makes me tired and hungry. (9) So, have you saw my owner? (10) I would really like my dinner. (11) If your not going to eat that fish, I’ll take it. (12) Seriously, give me the fish!
How should sentence 9 be changed?
A Change the question mark to a period
B Change saw to seen
C Change my to mine
D Change owner to Owner
B Change saw to seen
(1) Last summer, my family and I went camping. (2) The campsite was surrounded by tall trees, we were right next to the lake. (3) During the day I would go swiming in the lake.
(4) My sister wouldn’t never jump in. (5) She said she was scared of the fish biting her.
(6) My parents would take us hiking in the woods to see the animals. (7) It was fun because you never knew what you would find. (8) My sister would get frustrated when they ran away.
(9) All she wanted to do was get close enough to take a picture of them.
(10) Camping is so much fun. (11) I can’t wait to go back next year.
The meaning of sentence 8 is unclear. Jeremy can use a more accurate word by changing they to -
A my parents
B the animals
C things we were looking for
D everything
B the animals
(1) Last summer, my family and I went camping. (2) The campsite was surrounded by tall trees, we were right next to the lake. (3) During the day I would go swiming in the lake.
(4) My sister wouldn’t never jump in. (5) She said she was scared of the fish biting her.
(6) My parents would take us hiking in the woods to see the animals. (7) It was fun because you never knew what you would find. (8) My sister would get frustrated when they ran away.
(9) All she wanted to do was get close enough to take a picture
of them.
(10) Camping is so much fun. (11) I can’t wait to go back next year.
What change, if any, should be made to sentence 4 ?
F Change never to ever
G Change wouldn’t to won’t
H Change sister to sisster
J No change is needed to this sentence.
F Change never to ever
(1) I was standing in line and all I could hear were the screams of the people above. (2) What was I thinking, I was about to get on this crazy rollercoaster. (3) I was scared and excited at the same time.
(4) My brother and I were ready to get on, I chickened out at the last minute. (5) He was worried that I wasn’t feeling good. (6) I said, “this is just a little too scary for me.” (7) He was so sweet and told me it was okay to be scared. (8) He said he got scared the first time he rode it. (9) We than left the rollercoaster to go ride the tea cups.
What is the correct way to write sentence 4?
F My brother and I, were ready to get on, but I chickened out, at the last minute.
G My brother and I were ready to get on, but I chickened out at the last minute.
H My brother and I were ready to get on but. I chickened out at the last minute.
J The sentence is written correctly.
G My brother and I were ready to get on, but I chickened out at the last minute.
(1) Last summer, my family and I went camping. (2) The campsite was surrounded by tall trees, we were right next to the lake. (3) During the day I would go swiming in the lake.(4) My sister wouldn’t never jump in. (5) She said she was scared of the fish biting her.
(6) My parents would take us hiking in the woods to see the animals. (7) It was fun because you never knew what you would find. (8) My sister would get frustrated when they ran away. (9) All she wanted to do was get close enough to take a picture of them.
(10) Camping is so much fun. (11) I can’t wait to go back next year.
What change should be made in sentence 3?
F Change swiming to swimming
G Change during to durring
H Add a comma after during
J No change should be made to this sentence
F Change swiming to swimming
(1) I was standing in line and all I could hear were the screams of the people above. (2) What was I thinking, I was about to get on this crazy rollercoaster. (3) I was scared and excited at the same time.
(4) My brother and I were ready to get on, I chickened out at the last minute. (5) He was worried that I wasn’t feeling good. (6) I said, “this is just a little too scary for me.” (7) He was so sweet and told me it was okay to be scared. (8) He said he got scared the first time he rode it. (9) We than left the rollercoaster to go ride the tea cups.
How should sentence 6 be changed?
F Delete the comma after said
G Delete the quotation marks after the period
H Change this to This
J The sentence should not be changed
H Change this to This
(1) Did you know that Vampires are real? (2) Well at least vampire bats are real. (3) They get there names because they drink the blood of other animals. (4) The vampire bats are nocturnal mammals. (5)That means they do their hunting at night.
(6) The vampire bats mostly drink the blood of cows, horses, pigs, and even birds. (7) The bats feed on these animals while they are asleep. (8) They are so light the animals don’t even feel the bats feeding. (9) The bats make a small cut on the animals and then lap up the blood with their tongues. (10) The animals are not harmed during the feeding. (11) It’s very important the vampire bats get blood nightly. (12) If they miss feeding two nights in a row they will die.
What is the BEST way to combine sentences 4 and 5 ?
F The vampire bats are nocturnal mammals, which means they do their hunting at night.
G The vampire bats are nocturnal mammals that means, they do their hunting at night.
H The vampire bats are nocturnal mammals that means they do their hunting at night.
J The vampire bats are nocturnal mammals because they do their hunting at night.
F The vampire bats are nocturnal mammals, which means they do their hunting at night.
(1) I was standing in line and all I could hear were the screams of the people above. (2) What was I thinking, I was about to get on this crazy rollercoaster. (3) I was scared and excited at the same time.
(4) My brother and I were ready to get on, I chickened out at the last minute. (5) He was worried that I wasn’t feeling good. (6) I said, “this is just a little too scary for me.” (7) He was so sweet and told me it was okay to be scared. (8) He said he got scared the first time he rode it. (9) We than left the rollercoaster to go ride the tea cups.
What change needs to be made to sentence 9?
A Change go to went
B Change than to then
C Insert a comma after rollercoaster
D Change left to leaved
B Change than to then
(1) I was standing in line and all I could hear were the screams of the people above. (2) What was I thinking, I was about to get on this crazy rollercoaster. (3) I was scared and excited at the same time.
(4) My brother and I were ready to get on, I chickened out at the last minute. (5) He was worried that I wasn’t feeling good. (6) I said, “this is just a little too scary for me.” (7) He was so sweet and told me it was okay to be scared. (8) He said he got scared the first time he rode it. (9) We than left the rollercoaster to go ride the tea cups.
What is the correct way to write sentence 2?
A What was I thinking because I was about to. Now get on this crazy rollercoaster.
B What was I thinking, and I was about to get on this crazy rollercoaster.
C What was I thinking. Was about to get on this crazy rollercoaster.
D What was I thinking? I was about to get on this crazy rollercoaster.
D What was I thinking? I was about to get on this crazy rollercoaster.
(1) Did you know that Vampires are real? (2) Well at least vampire bats are real. (3) They get there names because they drink the blood of other animals. (4) The vampire bats are nocturnal mammals. (5)That means they do their hunting at night.
(6) The vampire bats mostly drink the blood of cows, horses, pigs, and even birds. (7) The bats feed on these animals while they are asleep. (8) They are so light the animals don’t even feel the bats feeding. (9) The bats make a small cut on the animals and then lap up the blood with their tongues. (10) The animals are not harmed during the feeding. (11) It’s very important the vampire bats get blood nightly. (12) If they miss feeding two nights in a row, they will die.
What change, if any, should be made to sentence 12 ?
A Change two nights to too nights
B Change die to dye
C Delete feeding
D Make no change
D Make no change
(1) I was standing in line and all I could hear were the screams of the people above. (2) What was I thinking, I was about to get on this crazy rollercoaster. (3) I was scared and excited at the same time.
(4) My brother and I were ready to get on, I chickened out at the last minute. (5) He was worried that I wasn’t feeling good. (6) I said, “this is just a little too scary for me.” (7) He was so sweet and told me it was okay to be scared. (8) He said he got scared the first time he rode it. (9) We than left the rollercoaster to go ride the tea cups.
What change needs to be made to sentence 5?
A Change worried to woried
B Change wasn’t to wasnt
C Add a comma after that
D Change good to well