Parallelism
The father baked bread, cake, and boiled some pasta.
The father baked bread, made a cake, and boiled some pasta.
Change this sentence into multiple shorter sentences:
Creeping in on the tips of her polished shoes, Goldilocks entered the bears’ home, stepping past the threshold and looking around the odd cabin, which was populated with chairs, porridge bowls, and beds, all in threes, and large, medium, and small sizes.
Creeping in on the tips of her polished shoes, Goldilocks stepped past the threshold of the bears’ home. She looked around the odd cabin. It was populated with chairs, porridge bowls, and beds; there were three of each in large, medium, and small sizes.
The honey bee is being annihilated by pesticides.
Pesticides are annihilating the honey bee.
I loved seeing you and having met your mother.
Parallelism
I loved seeing you and meeting your mother.
The production manager was asked to write his report quickly, accurately, and in a detailed manner.
The production manager was asked to write his report quickly, accurately, and thoroughly.
Is the sentence simple, compound, complex, or complex-compound? Identify the clause(s):
China's Han Dynasty marked an official recognition of Confucianism.
Simple
China's Han Dynasty marked an official recognition of Confucianism.
This is revealed in the first paragraph of the short story when Montressor says: "I must not only punish, but punish with impunity" (Mays 108).
The first paragraph of the short story reveals this when Montresor says: “I must not only punish, but punish with impunity” (Mays 108).
Veganism is a diet. It is comprised of everything except animal products. This may extend beyond food and into lifestyle as well. Vegans may commit to removing animal products from every aspect of their life.
Sentence Variety
Veganism is a diet comprised of everything except animal products. Some vegans adopt it not only as a diet, but as a lifestyle; they commit to removing animal products from every aspect of their life.
Putting on her bathing suit, slapping on some sunscreen, and when she had called to Nick, Tina jumped into the pool.
Putting on her bathing suit, slapping on some sunscreen, and calling to Nick, Tina jumped in the pool.
Connect these sentences with only transitional words / phrases:
The first experiment was successful. It was found to have many errors. Another experiment was performed. Our budget was depleted.
The first experiment was successful. However, it was found to have many errors, so another experiment was performed. Our budget was depleted as a result.
In addition, new transportation has been developed.
NECESSARY PASSIVE: We don’t know, nor does it matter, who developed it; what matters is it was developed
This is one thing that is argued that kept Russia going for as long as it did before World War I.
Active / Passive Voice
Historians argue that this kept Russia going for as long as it did before World War 1.
Because the media have accused him of doping, because the fans are turning against him, and he asked for more money, the baseball team tried to trade the fading player.
Because the media have accused him of doping, because the fans are turning against him, and because he asked for more money, the baseball team tried to trade the fading player.
Combine these sentences into one lengthier sentence:
Hansel and Gretel went into the forest. They were with their mother and father. Their mother and father left without them. It became nighttime. They were lost in the forest.
Hansel and Gretel went into the forest. They were with their mother and father. Their mother and father left without them. It became nighttime. They were lost in the forest.
One major smart phone, the iPhone, which is produced by Apple Inc., has a big share on the industry.
One major smart phone, Apple Inc.’s iPhone, holds a major share of the industry.
Smellbert was very tired during the day because he did not get enough sleep the night before. He sat on the couch when he got home. He decided to take a nap after he sat for a bit, and he felt well rested afterwards.
Sentence Variety
Smellbert was very tired during the day because he did not get enough sleep the night before. Sitting on the couch after getting home, he decided to take a nap, and felt well rested afterwards.
The driver sent not only twenty text messages but also received a bunch before he crashed.
The driver not only sent twenty text messages, but also received a bunch before he crashed.
Is the sentence simple, compound, complex, or complex-compound? Identify the clause(s):
When her roommates are finished eating, they clean all the dishes, and she can finally take a break.
Complex-compound
When her roommates are finished eating, they clean all the dishes, and she can finally take a break.
50 Shades of Gray, which was originally a Twilight fanfiction, was written by E. L. James in 2011.
NECESSARY PASSIVE: The focus of the sentence is 50 Shades of Gray, not E. L. James.
The salesman expected that he would present his product at the meeting, that he would have time to show his slide presentation, and that questions would be asked by prospective buyers.
Parallelism AND Active / Passive Voice
The salesman expected that he would present his product at the meeting, that he would have time to show his slide presentation, and that prospective buyers would ask him questions.