Revising
1 Which is the best way to combine these sentences?
A He didn’t see any that he liked because he talked with his grandmother.
B He didn’t see any that he liked, even though he talked with his grandmother.
C He didn’t see any that he liked, so he talked with his grandmother.
D He didn’t see any that he liked when he talked with his grandmother.
C He didn’t see any that he liked, so he talked with his grandmother.
6 Xavier has included an extraneous sentence in the second paragraph (sentences 3–8). Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?
F Sentence 4
G Sentence 5
H Sentence 6
J Sentence 7
G Sentence 5
11 What change should be made in sentence 8?
A Change rain forests to rain forest’s
B Change thickly to thick
C Delete the comma after areas
D Insert a comma after shore
B Change thickly to thick
16 What change is needed in sentence 28?
F Change prefer to prefers
G Change climb to climbing
H Change traditionul to traditional
J No change needs to be made.
H Change traditionul to traditional
21 How should sentence 11 be changed?
A Change Scientists to scientists
B Insert a comma after filmed
C Change playing to play
D Change rings to ring
A Change Scientists to scientists
2 Which transition is best to add to the beginning of sentence 15?
F However
G Therefore
H After all
J Soon
J Soon
7 What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 26?
A Visitors were able to build a LEGO brick model and add it to any state on the map.
B Visitors were able to build a LEGO brick model to any state on the map they could add what they built.
C Visitors were able to build a LEGO brick model, then they were able to add that LEGO model to any state on the map.
D Visitors were able to build a LEGO brick model, then visitors could add the LEGO brick model to any state on the map.
A Visitors were able to build a LEGO brick model and add it to any state on the map.
12 What change should be made in sentence 13?
F Change need to needs
G Change walks to walk
H Change use to using
J No change is needed.
G Change walks to walk
17 What change, if any, should be made in sentence 29?
A Change provide to providing
B Change a to an
C Change enjoy to injoy
D No change is needed in this sentence.
D No change is needed in this sentence.
22 What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 17?
F Change catch to caught
G Insert a comma after ring
H Change braking to breaking
J No change should be made in sentence 17.
H Change braking to breaking
3 Darla needs to add a topic sentence for the fourth paragraph (sentences 16–19). Which sentence should be added just before sentence 16 as the topic sentence for this paragraph?
A From there, Mo’s Bows became very popular.
B Eventually, Mo needed help with his business.
C Mo was excited about starting the company.
D Mo sold some bows to a few people
A From there, Mo’s Bows became very popular.
8 Xavier would like to add a sentence to bring his paper to a more effective conclusion. Which sentence should he add after sentence 37 to help achieve this goal?
F The best part of the day was seeing the LEGO models.
G Next Saturday, my family and I are going to the San Antonio River Walk.
H There are many fun things to do in Texas.
J Until then, I plan to keep practicing my new master builder skills.
J Until then, I plan to keep practicing my new master builder skills.
13 What change should be made to sentence 18?
A Change their to there
B Insert a comma after hotel
C Change shaped to shape
D Change bird’s to birds
A Change their to there
18 What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 4?
F Change find to found
G Change entertain to entertaining
H Change themselfs to themselves
J No change should be made in sentence 4.
H Change themselfs to themselves
23 What change should be made in sentence 20?
A Change experts to Experts
B Change were thinking to think
C Change help to helps D Change hunt to hunting
B Change were thinking to think
4 Which change can Darla make to improve the clarity of sentence 31?
F Change them to young people
G Change what to things
H Change they to you
J No revision is needed in this sentence.
F Change them to young people
9 What change should be made in sentence 3?
A Change Leaves to Leafes
B Change brush to brushes
C Insert a comma after windows
D Change through to threw
C Insert a comma after windows
14 What is the correct way to write sentence 22?
F The Frio River Treetop is closer. To home, it is located near Leakey, Texas.
G The Frio River Treetop is closer to home. It is located near Leakey, Texas.
H The Frio River Treetop is closer to home as a result it is located, near Leakey, Texas.
J No change is needed.
G The Frio River Treetop is closer to home. It is located near Leakey, Texas.
19 What change, if any, should be made in sentence 6?
A Change are to were
B Delete the comma after mammals
C Change that to they
D No change should be made in sentence 6.
B Delete the comma after mammals
24 What change should be made in sentence 22?
F Change causes to cause
G Change surface to surfase
H Insert a comma after water
J Change scatter to scater
F Change causes to cause
5 Xavier would like to replace sentence 2 with a sentence that will improve the focus of his paper. Which sentence should he use?
A LEGO bricks are a great toy because building with them teaches children important skills.
B Playing with LEGO bricks is a hobby families can really enjoy together.
C I was surprised that I had never heard of the LEGO KidsFest.
D Last week I had a great day with my family and learned about one of my favorite toys at LEGO KidsFest.
D Last week I had a great day with my family and learned about one of my favorite toys at LEGO KidsFest.
10 What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 5?
F Change like to likes
G Change we to they
H Change created to creating
J No change needs to be made.
G Change we to they
15 What change, if any, should be made to sentence 26?
A Change makes to make
B Change greatest to great
C Insert a comma after spot
D No change needs to be made in this sentence.
B Change greatest to great
20. What is the correct way to write this sentence?
F One kind of an air bubble is shaped like a circle and called a bubble ring. Happening to be the perfect sea toy.
G One kind of air bubble is shaped like a circle, and called a bubble ring. Then it happens to be the perfect sea toy.
H One kind of air bubble is shaped like a circle, called a bubble ring it happens to be the perfect sea toy.
J One kind of air bubble is shaped like a circle. It is called a bubble ring, and it happens to be the perfect sea toy.
J One kind of air bubble is shaped like a circle. It is called a bubble ring, and it happens to be the perfect sea toy.