Punctuation
Participles
Parallelism
Sentence Combination
What's Wrong
100
Even though she works long hours. She keeps working hard after she gets home.
Even though she works long hours, she keeps working hard after she gets home.
100
Ana Quinlen writes an essay, she discusses summer and downtime for kids.
Ana Quinlen writes an essay, discussing summer and downtime for kids.
100
Most animal welfare organizations focus their efforts on rescuing and providing care to animals in need. Which may entail helping an animal that is trapped somewhere or a lost or stray animal is brought to a shelter.
Most animal welfare organizations focus their efforts on rescuing and providing care to animals in need, which may entail helping an animal that is trapped somewhere or bringing a lost or stray animal to a shelter.
100
The student studies, and then the student passes the test.
The student studies and then passes the test.
100
About noon the sky darkened, a breeze sprang up, and a low rumble announces the approaching storm.
2. About noon the sky darkened, a breeze sprang up, and a low rumble announces the approaching storm.
200
Students work constantly, for its hard to succeed without studying.
Students work constantly, for it's hard to succeed without studying.
200
Ms. Berdea grades essays, she proposes improvements and asks for revisions.
Ms. Berdea grades essays, proposing improvements and asks for revisions.
200
Animal welfare organizations work constantly for their cause. They educate the public about important issues. They promote community involvement.
Animal welfare organizations work constantly for their cause, educating the public about important issues and promoting community involvement.
200
Anna Quinlen wrote an impacting essay. The essay mentions some crude truths about the way we treat our children nowadays.
Anna Quinlen wrote an impacting essay, one that mentions some crude truths about the way we treat our children nowadays.
200
The teacher explained that "quotation marks are not needed in indirect quotations."
The teacher explained that "quotation marks are not needed in indirect quotations."
300
The summer months especially August are so hot in Texas that you have to stay inside.
300
The worker went straight home. He was tired after the long shift.
Tired after the long shift, the worker went straight home.
300
The production manager was asked to write his report quickly, accurately, and in a detailed manner.
The production manager was asked to write his report quickly, accurately, and thoroughly.
300
Hartford is the capital of Connecticut. It is the second largest city in the state.
Hartford, the capital of Connecticut, is the second largest city in the state.
300
The agreement is only between you and I.
The agreement is only between you and me.
400
So when I read Anna Quinlen’s essay on the importance of downtime I started reconsidering my priorities in life.
So when I read Anna Quinlen’s essay on the importance of downtime, I started reconsidering my priorities in life.
400
I didn't know what to do. I called the police.
Not knowing what to do, I called the police.
400
The coach told the players that they should get a lot of sleep, that they should not eat too much, and to do some warm-up exercises before the game.
The coach told the players that they should get a lot of sleep, that they should not eat too much, and that they should do some warm-up exercises before the game.
400
Hartford was once known as an industrial center. It was the home of several manufacturers. They made firearms, typewriters, bicycles, and even cars.
Once known as an industrial center, Hartford was the home of manufacturers of firearms, typewriters, bicycles, and even cars.
400
The article was published recently by the Dallas Morning news and covered the presidential elections.
The article was published recently by the Dallas Morning News and covered the presidential elections.
500
Before I could even finish the essay I was convinced that downtime is critical for my children.
Before I could even finish the essay, I was convinced that downtime is critical for my children.
500
He entered the bank. He disguised himself as a cleaner and sang a popular song.
He entered the bank, disguising himself as a cleaner and singing a popular song.
500
The salesman expected that he would present his product at the meeting, that there would be time for him to show his slide presentation, and that questions would be asked by prospective buyers.
The salesman expected that he would present his product at the meeting, that there would be time for him to show his slide presentation, and that prospective buyers would ask questions.
500
The environment cannot sustain constant resource depletion. It cannot recover quickly from wide-scale resource extraction.
The environment cannot sustain constant resource depletion, nor can it recover quickly from wide-scale resource extraction.
500
When it rains, the rain forms runoff, the abundance of rain causes some areas to flood.
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