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A student fixes spelling mistakes and comma errors.
Surface revision / editing
Global revision focuses on small grammar mistakes. True or false?
False
Surface revision usually happens at the end of the writing process. True or false?
True
Detailed revision improves details, clarity, and flow. True or false?
True
Fix it by adding more specific detail. What type of revision is this?
“My first day was bad. I did not like it.”
“My first day felt overwhelming because I could not find my classroom, and I kept checking my schedule every few minutes.”
Revision Type: Detailed revision
A student realizes the essay needs a clearer main point.
Global revision
What question should a writer ask during global revision: “Is my comma correct?” or “Does my essay make sense as a whole?”
Does my essay make sense as a whole?
Change this weak sentence into something after a detailed revision: “I was nervous.”
“My hands were shaking, and I kept looking at the door because I wanted to leave.”
What is one thing students should check during surface revision?
Grammar, spelling, punctuation, capitalization, formatting, MLA, fragments, run-ons.
“The event happened. Then I went home. That was it.”
Fix it by adding reflection. What type of revision is this?
“The event happened, and then I went home. At the time, I thought it was just another ordinary day, but later I realized it changed how I saw myself.”
Revision Type: Global revision
A student adds more description to a scene so the reader can imagine it better.
Detailed revision
A narrative essay has a beginning and middle, but no reflection at the end. What type of revision does it need?
Global revision
A student uses the word “good” five times in one paragraph. What kind of revision can help?
Detailed revision / word choice revision
Fix the mistake: “i went to school and it was raining.”
I went to school, and it was raining.
“The event happened. Then I went home. That was it.”
Fix it by adding reflection. What type of revision is this?
“The event happened, and then I went home. At the time, I thought it was just another ordinary day, but later I realized it changed how I saw myself.”
Revision Type: Global revision
A student changes the order of two paragraphs because the story is confusing.
Global revision
Why should global revision come before surface editing?
Because big problems like organization, main point, and development should be fixed before grammar.
What can transitions/connectives help with in detailed revision?
They help connect ideas, events, and paragraphs so the writing flows better.
Is adding a new body paragraph surface revision?
No, that is global revision.
Problem:
“My story starts in the middle of the event, but the reader does not know where I am, who is there, or why the moment matters.”
Fix it by adding context. What type of revision is this?
“Before describing the main event, I should add a few sentences explaining where I was, who was with me, and why this moment was important.”
Revision Type: Global revision
A student rewrites a confusing sentence to make it clearer, but does not change the whole paragraph.
Detailed revision
Name two things a writer can improve during detailed revision.
Description, sentence clarity, transitions, word choice, specific examples, paragraph flow.
Name two things a writer should check during global revision.
Main idea, organization, paragraph order, development, reflection, conclusion, clarity.
Why is surface revision still important even if the essay has strong ideas?
Because grammar, punctuation, and formatting help the essay look polished and easier to read.
“I learned a lot from this experience. It was very important and meaningful to me.”
Fix it by making the reflection more specific. What type of revision is this?
Possible Fix:
“This experience taught me that I often avoid asking for help because I do not want to seem weak. Looking back, I understand that asking for help is not a failure; it is part of learning.”
Revision Type: Detailed revision / Global revision