Disastrous Definitions
Lyle has not used the most effective word in sentence 24. Which word should best replace "happening" to create a more effective sentence?
"Another figure in the happening of breakfast as we know it today was American dietary reformer, Slyvester Graham, who inspired the cracker of the same name."
A) unfolding
B) growth
C) progress
D) development
D) development
What is the most effective way to combine sentences 8 and 9?
"(8) Early attempts to provide provisions to troops left them weakened. (9) Troops were also left malnourished and susceptible to disease, which could be fatal. "
F Early attempts to provide provisions to troops left them weakened and troops were also left malnourished and susceptible to disease, which could be fatal.
G Early attempts to provide provisions to troops left them weakened, malnourished, and susceptible to disease, which could be fatal.
H Early attempts to provide provisions to troops left them weakened; troops were also left malnourished and susceptible to disease, which could be fatal.
J Early attempts to provide provisions to troops left them weakened, and were also malnourished and susceptible to disease, which could be fatal.
G Early attempts to provide provisions to troops left them weakened, malnourished, and susceptible to disease, which could be fatal.
What revision, if any, should be made in sentence 21?
"Even when a on a resolution the league agreed, there was no way to make member countries adhere to it."
A) Even when the league agreed on a resolution, there was no way to make member countries adhere to it.
B) Even when the league agreed, there was no way to make member countries adhere to it on a resolution.
C) Even when the league agreed on a resolution, there was no way to amke member countries adhere to and follow a resolution.
D) No change is needed.
A) Even when the league agreed on a resolution, there was no way to make member countries adhere to it.
What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 4?
"Worse still, the natural bridge that had connected the island to the mainland is now submerged."
A) Change that to it
B) Insert a comma after mainland
C) Change is now submerged to was now submerged
D) No change is needed
C) Change is now submerged to was now submerged
Raul wants to add a supporting sentence to the second paragraph (sentences 6-13). Which sentence should be added after sentence 8?
"(6) Visitors to Big Bend can 1,200 different species of plants and 550 species of birds, mammals, reptiles, and amphibians. (7) In addition, there are 40 species of fish that swim in the Rio Grande River. (8) Big Bend is in fact home to a greater variety of animal species than any other national park in the United States. (9) Many endangered species live there, including the peregrine falcon, black-capped vireo, and Mexican long-nosed bat. (10) Some animals, like the Carmen Mountain white-tail deer and Colima warbler, do not live anywhere else in the U.S. (11) Looking for the Chisos agave plant? (12) You won't find it anywhere outside this Texas wilderness. (13) Diverse wildlife thrive in Big Bend."
A) Most of the fish species in Big Bend are the size of minnows, but there are also large catfish.
B) Nearly a quarter of the animal species native to North America can be found in Big Bend.
C) If actions are not soon taken, many endangered species will be lost forever.
D) Tropical rain forests, which are not found in North America, would have more animal species.
B) Nearly a quarter of the animal species native to North America can be found in Big Bend.
Jace has not used the most effective transition at the beginning of sentence 27. Which phrase should replace "In comparison" in this sentence?
"(24) The boys paused to drink their remainig water. (25) Juan quickly consumed his bottle but complained that he was still thristy. (26) Jessie handed Juan his bottle and let his younger brother have what was left in it. (27) In comparision, Jessie realized he did not know as much about hiking in the canyon as he had thought he did. (28) He decided it was time to call their dad."
A) By the same token
B) In this case
C) At that point
D) In the long run
C) At that point
What is the correct way to write sentences 5 and 6?
"Mom loves to share these details and recount the extravagant, hilarious stories Grandaddy Roy told. (6) As the girls swung around in their seats."
A) Mom loves to share these details and recount the extravagant, hilarious stories Grandaddy Roy told as the girls swung around their seats.
B) Mom loves to share details. And recountthe extravagant, hilarious stoies Grandaddy Roy told as the girls swung around in their seats.
C) Mom loving to share these details and recount the extravagant, hilarious stories Grandaddy Roy told as the girls swung around in their seats.
D) Mom loves to share these details and recount the extravagant, hilarious stories. That Grandaddy Roy told as the girls swung around in their seats.
A) Mom loves to share these details and recount the extravagant, hilarious stories Grandaddy Roy told as the girls swung around their seats.
What revision, if any, should be made in sentence 28?
"It also served as a precursor to the United Nations, a still-active organization that was formed in 1946 to replace the league."
A) It also served as a precursor to a still-active organization that was formed in 1946 to replace the league, the United Nations.
B) A still-active organization that was formed in 1946 to replace the league is what is now the United Nations as a precursor.
C) As a precursor to the United Nations, a still-active organization that was formed in 1946 to replace the league, it also served.
D) No change is needed
D) No change is needed
What change needs to be made in sentence 6?
"She realized they weren't going to be able to get back across to the mainland since the tide went back out."
A) Change She realized to Realizing
B) Insert a semicolon after across
C) Change since to until
D) Change went to goes
C) Change since to until
Lyle needs a more effective conclusion to his essay. Which concluding sentence best replaces sentence 35 to accomplish this task?
"(34) Some people enjoy shifting to a different meal schedule on the weekend or on special occasions-such as a large breakfast on Saturday mornings or a big family meal on Sunday afternoon. (35) This concludes my report on how the practice of eating more meals a day got started."
A) If this upward trend continues, we may expect four, five, or even six meals a day in the future.
B) Now you know the curious history of how breakfast, lunch, and dinner mealtime traditions began.
C) I'm glad breakfast was added since it's my favorite meal of the day, and sometimes my family even eats cereal.
D) However, for most of us, the habit of having three meals a day won't be broken anytime soon.
D) However, for most of us, the habit of having three meals a day won't be broken anytime soon.
Jace has not used an effective phrase in sentence 36. Which phrase should replace "a truth to share" in this sentence?
"(36) As the group slowly made its way back up the trail, Jessie had a truth to share. (37) 'You were right, Dad,' he said. (38) 'I'll be sure to take all your hiking advice in the future.'"
A) a confirmation to express
B) a confession to make
C) an argument to dispel
D) a burden to announce
B) a confession to make
What is the most effective way to combine sentences 2 and 3?
"(2) Amir looked up from the kitchen table. (3) He had pencil sketches scattered across its smooth surface."
A) Amir looked up from the kitchen table and his pencil sketches and scattered them across its smooth.
B) Looking up from the kitchen table, the pencil sketches of Amir were scattered across its smooth surface.
C) Amir looked up from the kitchen table, his pencil sketches scattered across its smooth surface.
D) Scattered across the smooth surface of the table, Amir looked up from his pencil sketches.
C) Amir looked up from the kitchen table, his pencil sketches scattered across its smooth surface.
What revision, if any, should be made in sentence 18?
"David watched his sons head out toward the Hot Springs Canyon Trail, a hike that offered majestic views of the mountains and the Rio Grande River."
A) David watched his sons head out toward a hike that offered majestic views of the mountains and the Rio Grande River that was the Hot Springs Canyon Trail.
B) David watched his sons head out and toward the Hor Springs Canyon Trail and a hike that offered majestic views of the mountains and the Rio Grande River.
C) David watched his sons head out on a hike and offered them majestic views of the mountains, the Rio Grande River, and the Hot Springs Canyon Trail.
D) No change is needed.
D) No change is needed.
What change needs to be made in sentence 10?
"She checked the tide charts and discovered that the pair would be on the island a few hours longer than they had antisipated."
A) Insert a comma after charts
B) Change that to this
C) Change they to we
D) Change antisipated to anticipated
D) Change antisipated to anticipated
Lyle wants to add a supporting sentnece to the fifth paragraph (sentences 22-27). Which sentence should be added after sentence 26?
"(22) Kellogg and his brother manufactured two of the first breakfast cereals: cornflakes and granola. (23) Post observed the Kellogg's flaking process and created Grape-Nuts. (24) Another figure in the happening of breakfast as we know it today was the American dietary reformer, Slyvester Graham, who inspired the cracker of the same name. (25) He also recommended whole-grain cereal, exercise, fruits, and vegetables, clean water, and fresh air. (26) Then in the early nineteenth century, milk containing vitamin D solidified its place at the breakfast table as people began to learn about the importance of vitamins. (27) All of these changes shaped breakfast around the world."
A) Likewise, orange juice became a necessity in the morning because of the benefits of vitamin C.
B) Today people who are lactose intolerant are able to choose from other varieties of milk, such as soy, rice, almond, and coconut milk.
C) Vitamin D occurs naturally in milk, but vitamin D can also be produced in the body through exposure to sunlight.
D) Naturally the cereal manufacturers promoted milk because it tastes best with cereal.
A) Likewise, orange juice became a necessity in the morning because of the benefits of vitamin C.
The word "target" is not the most effective word to use in sentence 34. Which word should replace "target" in this sentence?
"(31) 'Yes, Hakeem, this is my grandson, Amir,' he proudly responded. (32) Amir's grandfather then turned to him. (33) 'Amir, Hakeem is a retired sketch artist, and his work has appeared in many newspapers and magazines around the world! (34) I told him how much you love to sketch, and we came up with a little target for you to take some classes from him.'"
A) adaptation
B) methodology
C) endeavor
D) arrangement
D) arrangement
What is the most effective way to combine sentences 19, 20, and 21?
"(19) The idea of eating cereal for health was being promoted by the late 1800s. (20) John Kellogg and Charles Post promoted this idea. (21) We now recognize Kellogg and Post as two of the biggest names in breakfast cereal."
A) The idea of eating cereal for breakfast was promoted by the late 1800s by John Kellogg and Charles Post the two men we now recognize as big names in breakfast cereal.
B) Although the idea of eating cereal for a healthy breakfast was being promoted in the late 1800s, John Kellogg and Charles Post were recognized as two of the biggest names in cereal.
C) By the late 1800s, John Kellogg and Charles Post, who we now recognize as two of the biggest names in breakfast cereal, promoted the idea of eating cereal for health.
D) The idea of eating healthy cereal was promoted by the late 1800s and John Kellogg and Charles Post promoted this idea so we now recognize them as the two biggest names in breakfast cereal.
C) By the late 1800s, John Kellogg and Charles Post, who we now recognize as two of the biggest names in breakfast cereal, promoted the idea of eating cereal for health.
What revision, if any, is needed in sentence 20?
"Embarrassed by the debacle, Sophia decided to just open the windows and if that would fix the problem."
A) Embarrassed by the debacle, Sophia decided to just open the windows for seeing if that would fix the problem.
B) Embarrassed by the debacle, Sophia decided to just open the windows and see if that would fix the problem.
C) Embarrassed by the debacle, Sophia decided to just fix the problem that would open the windows.
D) No change is needed.
B) Embarrassed by the debacle, Sophia decided to just open the windows and see if that would fix the problem.
What change is needed in sentence 10?
"It was an arduous process, and developers faced many challenges disease-carrying mosquitos, rugged terrain, and heavy rainfall."
A) Change It to Theirs
B) Change developers to develepers
C) Insert a colon after challenges
D) Change mosquitoes to Mosquitoes
C) Insert a colon after challenges
Chima has included a sentence that does not belong in the eighth paragraph (sentences 29-34). Which sentence should she remove from this paragraph?
"(29) While the United Nations faces some of the same problems that crippled the league, it is a stronger organization. (30) Students today learn about this organization in their history classes. (31) It represents more countries than the league did, and its decisions do not hinge on unanimous votes. (32) Furthermore, the member countries must comply with agreed-upon resolutions or face penalties. (33) The weaknesses of the League of Nations thus had value. (34) They heightened the world's resolve to form a new organization, one that many hoped would be better equipped to have an impact in the world."
A) Sentence 29
B) Sentence 30
C) Sentence 31
D) Sentence 32
B) Sentence 30
The meaning of sentence 2 is unclear. Which phrase should replace "it" in this sentence?
"A bit of gray smoke was seeping out of the edges of the oven, while it was lurking in the air."
A) a strange smell
B) a problem
C) something else
D) the smoke
A) a strange smell
What is the most effective way to combine sentences 7 and 8?
"(7) Natalia was in awe of O’Keeffe’s paintings of New York and its skyscrapers. (8) The flowers and landscapes of New Mexico most inspired the teenager."
A) Natalia, who was in awe of O’Keeffe’s paintings of New York and its skyscrapers, was a teenager most inspired by the flowers and landscapes of New Mexico.
B) Natalia was in awe of O’Keeffe’s paintings of New York and its skyscrapers, but it was the flowers and landscapes of New Mexico that most inspired the teenager.
C) Being in awe of O’Keeffe’s paintings of New York and its skyscrapers, the flowers and landscapes of New Mexico most inspired the teenager Natalia.
D) Because Natalia was in awe of O’Keeffe’s paintings of New York and its skyscrapers, the teenager was most inspired by the flowers and landscapes of New Mexico.
B) Natalia was in awe of O’Keeffe’s paintings of New York and its skyscrapers, but it was the flowers and landscapes of New Mexico that most inspired the teenager.
What is the correct way to write sentence 3?
"The ad said that you are looking for a responsible individual this person has pet care experience, excellent communication skills, and great compassion for animals."
A) The ad said that you are looking for a responsible individual who has pet care experience, excellent communication skills, and great compassion for animals.
B) The ad said you are looking for a responsible individual. Who has pet care experience, excellent communication skills, and great compassion for animals.
C) The ad said that you are looking for a responsible individual who has pet care experience. Plus a person who has excellent communication skills and great compassion for animals.
D) The ad said that you are looking for a responsible individual who has pet care experience and excellent communication skills this person also has a great compassion for animals.
A) The ad said that you are looking for a responsible individual who has pet care experience, excellent communication skills, and great compassion for animals.
What change needs to be made in sentence 28?
"The Panama Canal has been referred to as 'one of historys' most incredible examples of large-scale engineering.'"
A) Insert a comma after as
B) Change one to One
C) Change historys' to history's
D) increduble to incredable
C) Change historys' to history's
Beau has included an extraneous sentence in the fifteenth paragraph (sentences 24-27). Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?
"(24) 'You sure can,' his grandfather responded enthusiastically. (25) 'I'm demonstrating to my grandson how those of us born in previous generations used to find our way around.' (26) Amir's grandfather could easily remember a time before the invention of color television. (27) He then slid the piece of paper with the address on it across the counter and asked the attendant if she knew where the street was."
A) Sentence 24
B) Sentence 25
C) Sentence 26
D) Sentence 27
C) Sentence 26