Editing 1
Underwater Games
(1) Dolphins are smart animals, but they are also curious and playful. (2) One of the most surprising facts about dolphins is how much they enjoy playing. (3) Dolphins can be seen jumping above the surface of the water and landing on their backs, bellies, or sides just for fun. (4) Dolphins even find ways to entertain themselfs under the water. (5) Since they do not have objects to play with, these creative animals make their own toys out of air!
(6) Unlike fish, dolphins are mammals, that breathe air. (7) They can stay under the water for up to 15 minutes with one breath. (8) Dolphins can control when they exhale. (9) The air comes out through their blowholes and makes bubbles. (10) One kind of air bubble is shaped like a circle and called a bubble ring it happens to be the perfect sea toy.
(11) Many Scientists have filmed and photographed dolphins playing with bubble rings. (12) Sometimes it looks like dolphins use the bubble rings as targets. (13) They will hit the bubbles with their long noses or spin around and slap the bubbles with their tails. (14) Dolphins also try to bite the bubbles. (15) In addition, dolphins use bubble rings to create more of a challenge. (16) These playful mammals will make a big bubble ring and try to swim through it. (17) They have been seen trying to catch a bubble ring or move it around without braking it. (18) Sometimes they can join two or three bubble rings together. (19) It is a fun game for the dolphins!
(20) Some experts were thinking that dolphins also use bubble rings to help them hunt for food. (21) Dolphins swim beneath the fish and send up bubbles. (22) The bubbles causes the fish to move toward the surface of the water and scatter. (23) Then the dolphins swim in and grab a tasty snack.
(24) It is amazing how dolphins play with bubble rings. (25) It does not matter if dolphins use bubble rings to help them hunt for food or use them just for fun. (26) What matters is that dolphins have fun playing with all the bubbles they make.
What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 4?
F Change find to found
G Change entertain to entertaining
H Change themselfs to themselves
J No change should be made in sentence 4.
H Change themselfs to themselves
Now or Never
(1) Jared felt dizzy as he looked over the cliff. (2) The ground seemed to be a long way down. (3) His camp counselor, Andrea, smiled up at him. (4) She gave Jared a thumbs-up. (5) Jared gulped. (6) He still wasn’t sure he could do this.
(7) All week at camp Jared had eyed the tall cliff. (8) He had seen other campers rappelling down the side of it. (9) It looked so cool—but so scary at the same time! (10) Jared wanted to do it, and it was to rappel.
(11) Now Jared was hooked up to a rope by a complicated mass of straps. (12) He was at the top of the cliff with him, saying something about how strong the rope was. (13) He explained that Jared didn’t need to be afraid because the rope and straps would hold an elephant. (14) “Nice to know,” Jared said. (15) At the bottom of the cliff, Andrea was also connected to the rope.
(16) It was time. (17) “Now or never,” Jared thought.(18) Keeping his eyes on the counselor at the top, he slowly leaned back. (19) He felt the strong, straight rope in his hands. (20) Jared gripped it tightly and leaned out as far as he could stretch. (21) Step, step, step—his feet took turns creeping down the side of the cliff. (22) He was doing it! (23) Jared was actually rappelling! (24) He made his way steadily down. (25) A grin began to spread over his face. (26) He went faster and faster until his last step was more like a jump. (27) Jared suddenly realized that he had made it to the bottom. (28) His legs were still a bit shaky as he gave Andrea a high five. (29) But Jared knew exactly what his first words would be now that he had made it down.
Claire wants to strengthen the focus of her story. Which of the following is the
BEST replacement for sentence 10?
A Being at camp had been a wonderful experience for Jared and the other kids.
B Jared was sometimes a little afraid to do things he had never done before.
C Today was Jared’s last chance to overcome his fear and give rappelling a try.
D Even though the others had been rappelling down the side of the cliff, Jared didn’t want to.
C Today was Jared’s last chance to overcome his fear and give rappelling a try.
(1) Dale carefully picked up a mug, stared at it, and frowned. (2) He thought to him, “This is not good enough.” (3) He also had looked at cards, flowers, and candy. (4) Dale finded nothing that would be a wonderful gift for his favorite teacher, Mrs. Smith. (5) Nothing was special enough for someone whose words always encouraged him. (6) Suddenly Dale had a bright ideas. (7) He would write a poem about his teacher called “Our Guide.” (8) His kind words would be the best gift for Mrs. Smith. (9) He smiled as he imagined how happy his gift would make her.
What change should be made in sentence 2?
A Change thought to thinks
B Change him to himself
C Change is to are
D Delete the period after enough
B Change him to himself
The Acton Children’s Business Fair
(1) Rows of white tents cover a huge lawn at the Acton Children’s Business Fair in Austin, Texas. (2) Inside the tents children talk excitedly about topics like slime, magic tricks, and pet daycare. (3) Since 2007, children aged 6 to 14 have been rewarded for their ideas and creativity at this fair. (4) It is a place where children can sell things they make to others. (5) The fair is fun, and it can also be profitable.
(6) Jeff and Laura Sandefer worked with the Acton Academy to help start the first fair. (7) This event was small, but it was fun and successful. (8) The Sandefers invited neighborhood children to sell items they had made such as cupcakes and artwork. (9) The goal was to give children an opportunity to participate in the business world and to make money doing something they loved. (10) Children also enjoyed learning about business ownership.
(11) Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair. (12) It still has the same goal. (13) Children are required to be in charge of all parts of their businesses. (14) The first requirement is that the children must make and sell their own products and services. (15) Most importantly, they have to fill out their own application form to be part of the fair. (16) They also have to set up their own booths.
(17) Although parents may attend the fair, they are not allowed to help sell products or services. (18) In fact, parents may not even answer questions from possible buyers. (19) This rule helps children learn how to communicate with customers and make business decisions. (20) Because of this rule, children learn about running a business.
(21) One successful business at a recent fair was called “Slimy Hannah.” (22) At this booth, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime that she had made by herself with no help from her parents. (23) Hannah worked hard to advertise her booth at the fair and on social media. (24) Hannah’s hard work paid off because she made more than $400 in 3 hours.
(25) Over time the event has grown in popularity. (26) Now there are Acton Children’s Business Fairs in cities across the country. (27) The fairs give many children hands-on experience running a business. (28) For some young people, the fairs may even lead to a successful career. (29) The Acton Children’s Business Fairs help prepare the future business leaders of tomorrow.
Julie needs a more clearly stated central idea. Which sentence BEST replaces sentence 4 to improve the central idea of her paper?
A It is a place where anything can happen as long as the kids are excited about their ideas.
B It is a place where young people can sell things to other people who attend the fair.
C It is a place where parents can enjoy watching their children learn about business.
D It is a place where young people who run their own businesses can make money by selling their products or services.
D It is a place where young people who run their own businesses can make money by selling their products or services.
Underwater Games
(1) Dolphins are smart animals, but they are also curious and playful. (2) One of the most surprising facts about dolphins is how much they enjoy playing. (3) Dolphins can be seen jumping above the surface of the water and landing on their backs, bellies, or sides just for fun. (4) Dolphins even find ways to entertain themselfs under the water. (5) Since they do not have objects to play with, these creative animals make their own toys out of air!
(6) Unlike fish, dolphins are mammals, that breathe air. (7) They can stay under the water for up to 15 minutes with one breath. (8) Dolphins can control when they exhale. (9) The air comes out through their blowholes and makes bubbles. (10) One kind of air bubble is shaped like a circle and called a bubble ring it happens to be the perfect sea toy.
(11) Many Scientists have filmed and photographed dolphins playing with bubble rings. (12) Sometimes it looks like dolphins use the bubble rings as targets. (13) They will hit the bubbles with their long noses or spin around and slap the bubbles with their tails. (14) Dolphins also try to bite the bubbles. (15) In addition, dolphins use bubble rings to create more of a challenge. (16) These playful mammals will make a big bubble ring and try to swim through it. (17) They have been seen trying to catch a bubble ring or move it around without braking it. (18) Sometimes they can join two or three bubble rings together. (19) It is a fun game for the dolphins!
(20) Some experts were thinking that dolphins also use bubble rings to help them hunt for food. (21) Dolphins swim beneath the fish and send up bubbles. (22) The bubbles causes the fish to move toward the surface of the water and scatter. (23) Then the dolphins swim in and grab a tasty snack.
(24) It is amazing how dolphins play with bubble rings. (25) It does not matter if dolphins use bubble rings to help them hunt for food or use them just for fun. (26) What matters is that dolphins have fun playing with all the bubbles they make.
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 6?
A Change are to were
B Delete the comma after mammals
C Change that to they
D No change should be made in sentence 6.
B Delete the comma after mammals
Now or Never
(1) Jared felt dizzy as he looked over the cliff. (2) The ground seemed to be a long way down. (3) His camp counselor, Andrea, smiled up at him. (4) She gave Jared a thumbs-up. (5) Jared gulped. (6) He still wasn’t sure he could do this.
(7) All week at camp Jared had eyed the tall cliff. (8) He had seen other campers rappelling down the side of it. (9) It looked so cool—but so scary at the same time! (10) Jared wanted to do it, and it was to rappel.
(11) Now Jared was hooked up to a rope by a complicated mass of straps. (12) He was at the top of the cliff with him, saying something about how strong the rope was. (13) He explained that Jared didn’t need to be afraid because the rope and straps would hold an elephant. (14) “Nice to know,” Jared said. (15) At the bottom of the cliff, Andrea was also connected to the rope.
(16) It was time. (17) “Now or never,” Jared thought.(18) Keeping his eyes on the counselor at the top, he slowly leaned back. (19) He felt the strong, straight rope in his hands. (20) Jared gripped it tightly and leaned out as far as he could stretch. (21) Step, step, step—his feet took turns creeping down the side of the cliff. (22) He was doing it! (23) Jared was actually rappelling! (24) He made his way steadily down. (25) A grin began to spread over his face. (26) He went faster and faster until his last step was more like a jump. (27) Jared suddenly realized that he had made it to the bottom. (28) His legs were still a bit shaky as he gave Andrea a high five. (29) But Jared knew exactly what his first words would be now that he had made it down.
The meaning of sentence 12 is unclear. What change can Claire make to improve the clarity of this sentence?
F Change He to Another counselor
G Change cliff to spot
H Change him to them
J Change the rope to it
F Change He to Another counselor
(1) Dale carefully picked up a mug, stared at it, and frowned. (2) He thought to him, “This is not good enough.” (3) He also had looked at cards, flowers, and candy. (4) Dale finded nothing that would be a wonderful gift for his favorite teacher, Mrs. Smith. (5) Nothing was special enough for someone whose words always encouraged him. (6) Suddenly Dale had a bright ideas. (7) He would write a poem about his teacher called “Our Guide.” (8) His kind words would be the best gift for Mrs. Smith. (9) He smiled as he imagined how happy his gift would make her.
What change should be made in sentence 4?
A Change finded to found
B Change would be to had been
C Change his to their
D Change favorite to more favorite
A Change finded to found
The Acton Children’s Business Fair
(1) Rows of white tents cover a huge lawn at the Acton Children’s Business Fair in Austin, Texas. (2) Inside the tents children talk excitedly about topics like slime, magic tricks, and pet daycare. (3) Since 2007, children aged 6 to 14 have been rewarded for their ideas and creativity at this fair. (4) It is a place where children can sell things they make to others. (5) The fair is fun, and it can also be profitable.
(6) Jeff and Laura Sandefer worked with the Acton Academy to help start the first fair. (7) This event was small, but it was fun and successful. (8) The Sandefers invited neighborhood children to sell items they had made such as cupcakes and artwork. (9) The goal was to give children an opportunity to participate in the business world and to make money doing something they loved. (10) Children also enjoyed learning about business ownership.
(11) Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair. (12) It still has the same goal. (13) Children are required to be in charge of all parts of their businesses. (14) The first requirement is that the children must make and sell their own products and services. (15) Most importantly, they have to fill out their own application form to be part of the fair. (16) They also have to set up their own booths.
(17) Although parents may attend the fair, they are not allowed to help sell products or services. (18) In fact, parents may not even answer questions from possible buyers. (19) This rule helps children learn how to communicate with customers and make business decisions. (20) Because of this rule, children learn about running a business.
(21) One successful business at a recent fair was called “Slimy Hannah.” (22) At this booth, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime that she had made by herself with no help from her parents. (23) Hannah worked hard to advertise her booth at the fair and on social media. (24) Hannah’s hard work paid off because she made more than $400 in 3 hours.
(25) Over time the event has grown in popularity. (26) Now there are Acton Children’s Business Fairs in cities across the country. (27) The fairs give many children hands-on experience running a business. (28) For some young people, the fairs may even lead to a successful career. (29) The Acton Children’s Business Fairs help prepare the future business leaders of tomorrow.
Julie forgot to add the following detail to the second paragraph (sentences 6–10).
The first fair was made up of a few tables in the Sandefers’ yard.
Where should this sentence be added?
A After sentence 6
B After sentence 8 H After sentence 9 J After sentence 10
A After sentence 6
Underwater Games
(1) Dolphins are smart animals, but they are also curious and playful. (2) One of the most surprising facts about dolphins is how much they enjoy playing. (3) Dolphins can be seen jumping above the surface of the water and landing on their backs, bellies, or sides just for fun. (4) Dolphins even find ways to entertain themselfs under the water. (5) Since they do not have objects to play with, these creative animals make their own toys out of air!
(6) Unlike fish, dolphins are mammals, that breathe air. (7) They can stay under the water for up to 15 minutes with one breath. (8) Dolphins can control when they exhale. (9) The air comes out through their blowholes and makes bubbles. (10) One kind of air bubble is shaped like a circle and called a bubble ring it happens to be the perfect sea toy.
(11) Many Scientists have filmed and photographed dolphins playing with bubble rings. (12) Sometimes it looks like dolphins use the bubble rings as targets. (13) They will hit the bubbles with their long noses or spin around and slap the bubbles with their tails. (14) Dolphins also try to bite the bubbles. (15) In addition, dolphins use bubble rings to create more of a challenge. (16) These playful mammals will make a big bubble ring and try to swim through it. (17) They have been seen trying to catch a bubble ring or move it around without braking it. (18) Sometimes they can join two or three bubble rings together. (19) It is a fun game for the dolphins!
(20) Some experts were thinking that dolphins also use bubble rings to help them hunt for food. (21) Dolphins swim beneath the fish and send up bubbles. (22) The bubbles causes the fish to move toward the surface of the water and scatter. (23) Then the dolphins swim in and grab a tasty snack.
(24) It is amazing how dolphins play with bubble rings. (25) It does not matter if dolphins use bubble rings to help them hunt for food or use them just for fun. (26) What matters is that dolphins have fun playing with all the bubbles they make.
What is the correct way to write sentence 10?
F One kind of an air bubble is shaped like a circle and called a bubble ring. Happening to be the perfect sea toy.
G One kind of air bubble is shaped like a circle, and called a bubble ring. Then it happens to be the perfect sea toy.
H One kind of air bubble is shaped like a circle, called a bubble ring it happens to be the perfect sea toy.
J One kind of air bubble is shaped like a circle. It is called a bubble ring, and it happens to be the perfect sea toy.
J One kind of air bubble is shaped like a circle. It is called a bubble ring, and it happens to be the perfect sea toy.
Now or Never
(1) Jared felt dizzy as he looked over the cliff. (2) The ground seemed to be a long way down. (3) His camp counselor, Andrea, smiled up at him. (4) She gave Jared a thumbs-up. (5) Jared gulped. (6) He still wasn’t sure he could do this.
(7) All week at camp Jared had eyed the tall cliff. (8) He had seen other campers rappelling down the side of it. (9) It looked so cool—but so scary at the same time! (10) Jared wanted to do it, and it was to rappel.
(11) Now Jared was hooked up to a rope by a complicated mass of straps. (12) He was at the top of the cliff with him, saying something about how strong the rope was. (13) He explained that Jared didn’t need to be afraid because the rope and straps would hold an elephant. (14) “Nice to know,” Jared said. (15) At the bottom of the cliff, Andrea was also connected to the rope.
(16) It was time. (17) “Now or never,” Jared thought.(18) Keeping his eyes on the counselor at the top, he slowly leaned back. (19) He felt the strong, straight rope in his hands. (20) Jared gripped it tightly and leaned out as far as he could stretch. (21) Step, step, step—his feet took turns creeping down the side of the cliff. (22) He was doing it! (23) Jared was actually rappelling! (24) He made his way steadily down. (25) A grin began to spread over his face. (26) He went faster and faster until his last step was more like a jump. (27) Jared suddenly realized that he had made it to the bottom. (28) His legs were still a bit shaky as he gave Andrea a high five. (29) But Jared knew exactly what his first words would be now that he had made it down.
Which of these sentences can BEST follow and support sentence 15?
A She would help keep the rope tight and make sure Jared was safe coming down.
B Andrea had been such a good friend, and looking down at her right now made Jared think of all the fun they had had.
C Jared was feeling great and stepped back from the cliff to look around at all the beautiful scenery.
D Andrea was right there, connected to the rope that Jared was connected to at the bottom of the cliff.
A She would help keep the rope tight and make sure Jared was safe coming down.
(1) Dale carefully picked up a mug, stared at it, and frowned. (2) He thought to him, “This is not good enough.” (3) He also had looked at cards, flowers, and candy. (4) Dale finded nothing that would be a wonderful gift for his favorite teacher, Mrs. Smith. (5) Nothing was special enough for someone whose words always encouraged him. (6) Suddenly Dale had a bright ideas. (7) He would write a poem about his teacher called “Our Guide.” (8) His kind words would be the best gift for Mrs. Smith. (9) He smiled as he imagined how happy his gift would make her.
What change should be made in sentence 6?
A Change Suddenly to Sudden
B Change had to have
C Change bright to brightly
D Change ideas to idea
D Change ideas to idea
The Acton Children’s Business Fair
(1) Rows of white tents cover a huge lawn at the Acton Children’s Business Fair in Austin, Texas. (2) Inside the tents children talk excitedly about topics like slime, magic tricks, and pet daycare. (3) Since 2007, children aged 6 to 14 have been rewarded for their ideas and creativity at this fair. (4) It is a place where children can sell things they make to others. (5) The fair is fun, and it can also be profitable.
(6) Jeff and Laura Sandefer worked with the Acton Academy to help start the first fair. (7) This event was small, but it was fun and successful. (8) The Sandefers invited neighborhood children to sell items they had made such as cupcakes and artwork. (9) The goal was to give children an opportunity to participate in the business world and to make money doing something they loved. (10) Children also enjoyed learning about business ownership.
(11) Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair. (12) It still has the same goal. (13) Children are required to be in charge of all parts of their businesses. (14) The first requirement is that the children must make and sell their own products and services. (15) Most importantly, they have to fill out their own application form to be part of the fair. (16) They also have to set up their own booths.
(17) Although parents may attend the fair, they are not allowed to help sell products or services. (18) In fact, parents may not even answer questions from possible buyers. (19) This rule helps children learn how to communicate with customers and make business decisions. (20) Because of this rule, children learn about running a business.
(21) One successful business at a recent fair was called “Slimy Hannah.” (22) At this booth, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime that she had made by herself with no help from her parents. (23) Hannah worked hard to advertise her booth at the fair and on social media. (24) Hannah’s hard work paid off because she made more than $400 in 3 hours.
(25) Over time the event has grown in popularity. (26) Now there are Acton Children’s Business Fairs in cities across the country. (27) The fairs give many children hands-on experience running a business. (28) For some young people, the fairs may even lead to a successful career. (29) The Acton Children’s Business Fairs help prepare the future business leaders of tomorrow.
What is the BEST way to combine sentences 11 and 12?
A Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair, so it still has the same goal.
B Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair, it still has the same goal.
C Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair, but it still has the same goal.
D Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair, or it still has the same goal.
C Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair, but it still has the same goal.
Underwater Games
(1) Dolphins are smart animals, but they are also curious and playful. (2) One of the most surprising facts about dolphins is how much they enjoy playing. (3) Dolphins can be seen jumping above the surface of the water and landing on their backs, bellies, or sides just for fun. (4) Dolphins even find ways to entertain themselfs under the water. (5) Since they do not have objects to play with, these creative animals make their own toys out of air!
(6) Unlike fish, dolphins are mammals, that breathe air. (7) They can stay under the water for up to 15 minutes with one breath. (8) Dolphins can control when they exhale. (9) The air comes out through their blowholes and makes bubbles. (10) One kind of air bubble is shaped like a circle and called a bubble ring it happens to be the perfect sea toy.
(11) Many Scientists have filmed and photographed dolphins playing with bubble rings. (12) Sometimes it looks like dolphins use the bubble rings as targets. (13) They will hit the bubbles with their long noses or spin around and slap the bubbles with their tails. (14) Dolphins also try to bite the bubbles. (15) In addition, dolphins use bubble rings to create more of a challenge. (16) These playful mammals will make a big bubble ring and try to swim through it. (17) They have been seen trying to catch a bubble ring or move it around without braking it. (18) Sometimes they can join two or three bubble rings together. (19) It is a fun game for the dolphins!
(20) Some experts were thinking that dolphins also use bubble rings to help them hunt for food. (21) Dolphins swim beneath the fish and send up bubbles. (22) The bubbles causes the fish to move toward the surface of the water and scatter. (23) Then the dolphins swim in and grab a tasty snack.
(24) It is amazing how dolphins play with bubble rings. (25) It does not matter if dolphins use bubble rings to help them hunt for food or use them just for fun. (26) What matters is that dolphins have fun playing with all the bubbles they make.
How should sentence 11 be changed?
A Change Scientists to scientists
B Insert a comma after filmed
C Change playing to play
D Change rings to ring
A Change Scientists to scientists
Now or Never
(1) Jared felt dizzy as he looked over the cliff. (2) The ground seemed to be a long way down. (3) His camp counselor, Andrea, smiled up at him. (4) She gave Jared a thumbs-up. (5) Jared gulped. (6) He still wasn’t sure he could do this.
(7) All week at camp Jared had eyed the tall cliff. (8) He had seen other campers rappelling down the side of it. (9) It looked so cool—but so scary at the same time! (10) Jared wanted to do it, and it was to rappel.
(11) Now Jared was hooked up to a rope by a complicated mass of straps. (12) He was at the top of the cliff with him, saying something about how strong the rope was. (13) He explained that Jared didn’t need to be afraid because the rope and straps would hold an elephant. (14) “Nice to know,” Jared said. (15) At the bottom of the cliff, Andrea was also connected to the rope.
(16) It was time. (17) “Now or never,” Jared thought.(18) Keeping his eyes on the counselor at the top, he slowly leaned back. (19) He felt the strong, straight rope in his hands. (20) Jared gripped it tightly and leaned out as far as he could stretch. (21) Step, step, step—his feet took turns creeping down the side of the cliff. (22) He was doing it! (23) Jared was actually rappelling! (24) He made his way steadily down. (25) A grin began to spread over his face. (26) He went faster and faster until his last step was more like a jump. (27) Jared suddenly realized that he had made it to the bottom. (28) His legs were still a bit shaky as he gave Andrea a high five. (29) But Jared knew exactly what his first words would be now that he had made it down.
What is the most effective way to combine sentences 24 and 25?
F Since he made his way steadily down with a grin, it began to spread over his face.
G He made his way steadily down because a grin began to spread over his face.
H As he made his way steadily down, a grin began to spread over his face.
J He made his way steadily down a grin began to spread over his face.
H As he made his way steadily down, a grin began to spread over his face.
(1) Last spring I visited a canyon in West Texas with Mom and Dad. (2) The Palo Duro Canyon is large, so we explored it by horse. (3) At first I was nervous about riding a horse, and luckily Pepper seemed very gentle. (4) I soon relaxed and enjoyed my surroundings. (5) As we made our way up a hill, we past rocky cliffs, patches of low cactus, and tall juniper trees. (6) At last Pepper’s clopping feet came to a stop. (7) We had reached the canyon’s top after the long ride! (8) Pepper stood still as I admired the view of the red canyon against the blue sky.
4 What change should be made in sentence 3?
A Change nervous to nervis
B Change riding to rode
C Change and to but
D Change seemed to seems
C Change and to but
The Acton Children’s Business Fair
(1) Rows of white tents cover a huge lawn at the Acton Children’s Business Fair in Austin, Texas. (2) Inside the tents children talk excitedly about topics like slime, magic tricks, and pet daycare. (3) Since 2007, children aged 6 to 14 have been rewarded for their ideas and creativity at this fair. (4) It is a place where children can sell things they make to others. (5) The fair is fun, and it can also be profitable.
(6) Jeff and Laura Sandefer worked with the Acton Academy to help start the first fair. (7) This event was small, but it was fun and successful. (8) The Sandefers invited neighborhood children to sell items they had made such as cupcakes and artwork. (9) The goal was to give children an opportunity to participate in the business world and to make money doing something they loved. (10) Children also enjoyed learning about business ownership.
(11) Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair. (12) It still has the same goal. (13) Children are required to be in charge of all parts of their businesses. (14) The first requirement is that the children must make and sell their own products and services. (15) Most importantly, they have to fill out their own application form to be part of the fair. (16) They also have to set up their own booths.
(17) Although parents may attend the fair, they are not allowed to help sell products or services. (18) In fact, parents may not even answer questions from possible buyers. (19) This rule helps children learn how to communicate with customers and make business decisions. (20) Because of this rule, children learn about running a business.
(21) One successful business at a recent fair was called “Slimy Hannah.” (22) At this booth, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime that she had made by herself with no help from her parents. (23) Hannah worked hard to advertise her booth at the fair and on social media. (24) Hannah’s hard work paid off because she made more than $400 in 3 hours.
(25) Over time the event has grown in popularity. (26) Now there are Acton Children’s Business Fairs in cities across the country. (27) The fairs give many children hands-on experience running a business. (28) For some young people, the fairs may even lead to a successful career. (29) The Acton Children’s Business Fairs help prepare the future business leaders of tomorrow.
Which transition BEST replaces Most importantly at the beginning of sentence 15?
A Instead
B In addition
C In other words
D Finally
C In other words
Underwater Games
(1) Dolphins are smart animals, but they are also curious and playful. (2) One of the most surprising facts about dolphins is how much they enjoy playing. (3) Dolphins can be seen jumping above the surface of the water and landing on their backs, bellies, or sides just for fun. (4) Dolphins even find ways to entertain themselfs under the water. (5) Since they do not have objects to play with, these creative animals make their own toys out of air!
(6) Unlike fish, dolphins are mammals, that breathe air. (7) They can stay under the water for up to 15 minutes with one breath. (8) Dolphins can control when they exhale. (9) The air comes out through their blowholes and makes bubbles. (10) One kind of air bubble is shaped like a circle and called a bubble ring it happens to be the perfect sea toy.
(11) Many Scientists have filmed and photographed dolphins playing with bubble rings. (12) Sometimes it looks like dolphins use the bubble rings as targets. (13) They will hit the bubbles with their long noses or spin around and slap the bubbles with their tails. (14) Dolphins also try to bite the bubbles. (15) In addition, dolphins use bubble rings to create more of a challenge. (16) These playful mammals will make a big bubble ring and try to swim through it. (17) They have been seen trying to catch a bubble ring or move it around without braking it. (18) Sometimes they can join two or three bubble rings together. (19) It is a fun game for the dolphins!
(20) Some experts were thinking that dolphins also use bubble rings to help them hunt for food. (21) Dolphins swim beneath the fish and send up bubbles. (22) The bubbles causes the fish to move toward the surface of the water and scatter. (23) Then the dolphins swim in and grab a tasty snack.
(24) It is amazing how dolphins play with bubble rings. (25) It does not matter if dolphins use bubble rings to help them hunt for food or use them just for fun. (26) What matters is that dolphins have fun playing with all the bubbles they make.
What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 17?
F Change catch to caught
G Insert a comma after ring
H Change braking to breaking
J No change should be made in sentence 17.
H Change braking to breaking
Now or Never
(1) Jared felt dizzy as he looked over the cliff. (2) The ground seemed to be a long way down. (3) His camp counselor, Andrea, smiled up at him. (4) She gave Jared a thumbs-up. (5) Jared gulped. (6) He still wasn’t sure he could do this.
(7) All week at camp Jared had eyed the tall cliff. (8) He had seen other campers rappelling down the side of it. (9) It looked so cool—but so scary at the same time! (10) Jared wanted to do it, and it was to rappel.
(11) Now Jared was hooked up to a rope by a complicated mass of straps. (12) He was at the top of the cliff with him, saying something about how strong the rope was. (13) He explained that Jared didn’t need to be afraid because the rope and straps would hold an elephant. (14) “Nice to know,” Jared said. (15) At the bottom of the cliff, Andrea was also connected to the rope.
(16) It was time. (17) “Now or never,” Jared thought.(18) Keeping his eyes on the counselor at the top, he slowly leaned back. (19) He felt the strong, straight rope in his hands. (20) Jared gripped it tightly and leaned out as far as he could stretch. (21) Step, step, step—his feet took turns creeping down the side of the cliff. (22) He was doing it! (23) Jared was actually rappelling! (24) He made his way steadily down. (25) A grin began to spread over his face. (26) He went faster and faster until his last step was more like a jump. (27) Jared suddenly realized that he had made it to the bottom. (28) His legs were still a bit shaky as he gave Andrea a high five. (29) But Jared knew exactly what his first words would be now that he had made it down.
Claire’s paper ends abruptly and leaves the reader wondering what happens next. Which sentence should Claire add to the end of her paper?
F He had made it down and had actually rappelled.
G “Where’s my snack?” he asked the counselors.
H He didn’t have a doubt about what he wanted to say.
J “Can I do it again?” he shouted with excitement.
J “Can I do it again?” he shouted with excitement.
(1) Last spring I visited a canyon in West Texas with Mom and Dad. (2) The Palo Duro Canyon is large, so we explored it by horse. (3) At first I was nervous about riding a horse, and luckily Pepper seemed very gentle. (4) I soon relaxed and enjoyed my surroundings. (5) As we made our way up a hill, we past rocky cliffs, patches of low cactus, and tall juniper trees. (6) At last Pepper’s clopping feet came to a stop. (7) We had reached the canyon’s top after the long ride! (8) Pepper stood still as I admired the view of the red canyon against the blue sky.
What change should be made in sentence 5?
A Change past to passed
B Delete the comma after cliffs
C Change cactus to Cactus
D Change trees to tree
A Change past to passed
The Acton Children’s Business Fair
(1) Rows of white tents cover a huge lawn at the Acton Children’s Business Fair in Austin, Texas. (2) Inside the tents children talk excitedly about topics like slime, magic tricks, and pet daycare. (3) Since 2007, children aged 6 to 14 have been rewarded for their ideas and creativity at this fair. (4) It is a place where children can sell things they make to others. (5) The fair is fun, and it can also be profitable.
(6) Jeff and Laura Sandefer worked with the Acton Academy to help start the first fair. (7) This event was small, but it was fun and successful. (8) The Sandefers invited neighborhood children to sell items they had made such as cupcakes and artwork. (9) The goal was to give children an opportunity to participate in the business world and to make money doing something they loved. (10) Children also enjoyed learning about business ownership.
(11) Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair. (12) It still has the same goal. (13) Children are required to be in charge of all parts of their businesses. (14) The first requirement is that the children must make and sell their own products and services. (15) Most importantly, they have to fill out their own application form to be part of the fair. (16) They also have to set up their own booths.
(17) Although parents may attend the fair, they are not allowed to help sell products or services. (18) In fact, parents may not even answer questions from possible buyers. (19) This rule helps children learn how to communicate with customers and make business decisions. (20) Because of this rule, children learn about running a business.
(21) One successful business at a recent fair was called “Slimy Hannah.” (22) At this booth, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime that she had made by herself with no help from her parents. (23) Hannah worked hard to advertise her booth at the fair and on social media. (24) Hannah’s hard work paid off because she made more than $400 in 3 hours.
(25) Over time the event has grown in popularity. (26) Now there are Acton Children’s Business Fairs in cities across the country. (27) The fairs give many children hands-on experience running a business. (28) For some young people, the fairs may even lead to a successful career. (29) The Acton Children’s Business Fairs help prepare the future business leaders of tomorrow.
What is the MOST effective revision to make in sentence 22?
A At this booth, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime, she had made it by herself with no help from her parents.
B At this booth, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime that she had made by herself.
C With no help from her parents, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime that she had made by herself at this booth.
D With no help from her parents, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime at the booth that she made by herself.
B At this booth, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime that she had made by herself.