Combining Sentences
Janet skated onto the pond. She made a perfect figure eight.
How do we combine the sentences?
A) Janet skated onto the pond, but she made a perfect figure eight.
B) Janet skated onto the pond and made a perfect figure eight.
C) Janet skated onto the pond, so made a perfect figure eight.
B Janet skated onto the pond and made a perfect figure eight.
10 What change needs to be made in sentence 1? (1) My Literature teacher explained that a fable is a story that teaches a lesson or moral and often uses animals as characters.
F Change Literature to literature
G Insert a comma after story
H Change uses to use
J Change animals to animal’s
F Change Literature to literature
Read this paragraph: (1) Dr. Jane Goodall is known for her work with animals. (2) She became well known by studying how animals act. (3) And live to become famous. (4) For more than 30 years, she studied the chimps in Africa.
How should sentences 2 and 3 be combined?
A) She became famous by studying how animals act and live.
B) Well known she became by studying how animals act and live.
C) By studying how animals act and live, she became well known and famous.
D) To become famous and well known, she began studying how animals act and live.
A She became famous by studying how animals act and live.
Well known and famous mean the same thing so we don't need to say them both.
3 Byron has offered a weak thesis for his paper. Which of the following could replace sentence 9 and provide a more effective thesis statement for this paper? (9) It was Thonis-Heracleion.
A Before long they realized that they had found the city of Thonis-Heracleion.
B In time they realized that they had actually found what was a very ancient city.
C At first no one knew exactly what had been discovered, but there was plenty of curiosity.
D In the end it just happened to be the place and the city of Thonis-Heracleion.
A Before long they realized that they had found the city of Thonis-Heracleion.
What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 12? (12) Realizing that she hadn’t recovered from her previous race, her pace slowed to a jog.
F) Realizing that she hadn’t recovered from her previous race, she slowed her pace to a jog.
G) She realized that she hadn’t recovered from her previous race, her pace slowed to a jog.
H) Realizing that she hadn’t recovered from her previous race, a jog was all she could slow her pace to.
J) She realized that she hadn’t recovered from the pace of her previous race, which slowed to a jog.
F) Realizing that she hadn’t recovered from her previous race, she slowed her pace to a jog.
My dog has hair hanging over his eyes. He looks just like a dust mop.
Combine the two sentences.
A) My dog has hair hanging over his eyes, he looks just like a dust mop.
B) My dog has hair hanging over his eyes, or he looks just like a dust mop.
C) My dog has hair hanging over his eyes looks just like a dust mop.
D) My dog has hair hanging over his eyes, and he looks just like a dust mop.
D My dog has hair hanging over his eyes, and he looks just like a dust mop.
11 What change should be made in sentence 10? (10) The sides below the balcony railing was enclosed in plexiglass to make the area safer for pets and young children.
A Change was enclosed to were enclosed
B Change to make to this was supposed to make
C Change safer to more safer
D No change should be made.
A Change was enclosed to were enclosed
Read the paragraph: (5) Dr. Goodall was born in London, England. (6) She was born on April 3, 1934. (7) When Jane was young, she read may books on wild animals. (8) Later on, she wrote about them as if they were her friends. (9) Sometimes she imagined that she was living with them. (10) She dreamed of going to Africa. (11) She wanted to see wild animals in nature.
Which of these conclusions should be added to the end of this paragraph?
A) She had an amazing collection of animal pictures.
B) This area was known for having wild animals.
C) She hoped one day to become a scientist so she could study animals in their habitats.
D) This study of chimps made her famous.
C) She hoped one day to become a scientist so she could study animals in their habitats.
6 There is a redundant sentence in the last paragraph (sentences 23–28).
(23) Scientists aren’t sure why Thonis-Heracleion disappeared into the water. (24) There’s no certainty regarding this issue. (25) Some think that a rise in sea level combined with unstable sediment might have been the reason. (26) Others suggest that an earthquake was responsible. (27) Still others believe that it might have been a combination of these factors. (28) As the study of the site continues, researchers are learning more and more about this remarkable city and the period in which it thrived.
Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?
F Sentence 24
G Sentence 25
H Sentence 26
J Sentence 27
F Sentence 24
7 What is the most effective way to revise sentence 6? (6) Each day the penguins leave their burrows, and out to sea they head to spend the day swimming and feeding.
A Each day the penguins that leave their burrows head out to sea for spending the day swimming and feeding.
B Each day the penguins head out to sea to spend the day swimming and feeding, leaving their burrows.
C Each day the penguins leave their burrows they head out to sea to spend the day swimming and feeding.
D Each day the penguins leave their burrows and head out to sea to spend the day swimming and feeding.
D Each day the penguins leave their burrows and head out to sea to spend the day swimming and feeding.
My friend shares her lunch with me. She doesn't like what her dad packs.
Combine the sentences.
A) My friend shares her lunch with me, so she doesn't like what her dad packs.
B) My friend shares her lunch with me, then she doesn't like what her dad packs.
C) My friend shares her lunch with me because she doesn't like what her dad packs.
D) My friend shares her lunch with me she doesn't like what her dad packs.
C My friend shares her lunch with me because she doesn't like what her dad packs.
13 How should sentence 36 be changed? (36) The moral of “The Seagull and the Crow” was clearly this no matter how dissimilar two creatures might be, they will have opportunities to help and support each other.
A Insert a colon after this
B Change dissimilar to dissimular
C Delete the comma
D Change they to you
A Insert a colon after this
Read this paragraph: (12) In 1957, two friends invited Jane to visit Africa. (13) Finally, her dream of seeing htese animals was coming true. (14) A few months after she arrived in Africa, she met a famous scientist. (15) His name was Dr. Louis Leakey. (16) Dr. Leakey needed someone smart to help him examine chimps in the wild. (17) After meeting Jane Goodall, he knew that he had found the finest person for the job. (18) In 1960, Jane began to study chimps. (19) Dr. Goodall continued studying them for the next 35 years. The writer would like to add the following sentence to the paragraph.
Tell the best place to put the following sentence.
At first it was difficult for her to be alone with the chimps, but she soon learned to enjoy watching them in the wild.
Since this sentence tells about studying the chimps, it should go after sentence 18.
7 In sentence 5, the word trip is not the appropriate word to use.
(2) Board-toting swimmers head for the water, lie down on their fiberglass surfboards, and paddle far out into the ocean. (3) Once there, they wait patiently for the perfect wave. (4) As soon as it comes, they spring to their feet, balance themselves on their boards, and ride majestically to shore. (5) Then they repeat the trip over and over and over again.
Which of the following should replace trip in this sentence?
A standard
B process
C operation
D journey
B process
10 What is the most effective way to revise sentence 21? (21) These are called breaks, and when surfers find one, they paddle their surfboards out into it and the perfect wave for which they are patiently waiting.
F These are called breaks, and when surfers find one, they paddle their surfboards out into it and patiently wait for the perfect wave.
G These are called breaks, and when surfers find one, they paddle their surfboards out into it because of the perfect wave they patiently wait for.
H These are called breaks, and when surfers find one, they paddle their surfboards out into it, they patiently wait for the perfect wave.
J Sentence 21 does not need to be revised.
F These are called breaks, and when surfers find one, they paddle their surfboards out into it and patiently wait for the perfect wave.
Melanie forgot her lunch. She called her mother. Combine the sentences.
A) Melanie forgot her lunch because she called her mother.
B) Melanie forgot her lunch, so she called her mother.
C) Melanie forgot her lunch and called her mother.
D) Melanie forgot her lunch so she called. Her mother.
B Melanie forgot her lunch, so she called her mother.
14 What change, if any, should be made in sentence 4? (4) In fact, in the 2012 presidential election, fewer then 40 percent of U.S. citizens between the ages of 18 and 24 voted.
F Change presidential to Presidential
G Change the comma after election to a semicolon
H Change then to than
J No change should be made in sentence 4.
H Change then to than
Read the paragraph: (20) She learned that they were more like humans than people used to think. (21) She watched the chimps playing and she watched the chimp eating and she watched the chimps caring for their young and she watched the chimps making tools. (22) She wrote reports about all the things she saw. (23) Her reports taught the rest of the world how chimps behave. The writer would like to add a central idea statement to the beginning of the paragraph.
Which of these sentences would be the best choice? A) While in Africa, she enjoyed the weather.
B) Over the years, she wrote many letter home.
C) Now that she was older, she planned to return to England.
D) While studying the chimps, she discovered many new things about chimps.
D) While studying the chimps, she discovered many new things about chimps.
8 Joe would like to replace sentence 8 with a sentence that better articulates the thesis of his paper. Which of the following will accomplish this goal? (8) Surfing requires certain materials, certain waves, and certain personality traits.
F Surfing requires just the right equipment, careful observation of the waves, and the patience to perfect a difficult skill.
G Surfing certainly requires specific materials, identified waves, and various personality traits.
H Surfing requires people who are willing to think about the equipment, the waves, and their own personality traits.
J Surfing requires people who care about the materials used, waves seen, and variety of personality traits represented.
F Surfing requires just the right equipment, careful observation of the waves, and the patience to perfect a difficult skill.
12 What is the correct way to write sentence 4? (4) As I watched friends find dates for homecoming, I was initially a little discouraged, it looked as though my first homecoming dance would be missing a key character.
F As I watched friends find dates for homecoming, I was initially a little discouraged. Because it looked as though my first homecoming dance would be missing a key character.
G As I watched friends find dates for homecoming, I was initially a little discouraged. It looked as though my first homecoming dance would be missing a key character.
H As I watched friends find dates for homecoming. I was initially a little discouraged because it looked as though my first homecoming dance would be missing a key character.
J Sentence 4 is written correctly
G As I watched friends find dates for homecoming, I was initially a little discouraged. It looked as though my first homecoming dance would be missing a key character.
8 What is the most effective way to combine sentences 9 and 10? (9) Some penguins would try to groom themselves. (10) They swallowed the toxic oil and died.
F Some penguins would try to groom themselves because they swallowed the toxic oil and died.
G Attempting to groom themselves were some penguins, who swallowed the toxic oil and died.
H While attempting to groom themselves, some penguins swallowed the toxic oil and died.
J Some penguins would try to groom themselves, they swallowed the toxic oil and died.
H While attempting to groom themselves, some penguins swallowed the toxic oil and died.
18 What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 27? (27) It’s your privilage as a U.S. citizen, and it will definitely have an impact on your future.
F Change privilage to privilege
G Delete the comma
H Change it to they
J No change needs to be made.
F Change privilage to privilege
Read the following paragraph: (24) In 1977, Dr. Goodall created the Jane Goodall Institute. (25) Its office is located in Silver Spring Maryland. (26) The institute teaches people about chimps. (27) It also teaches people how to save the wild areas where the chimps live. (28) Dr. Goodall doesn't live among the chimps any longer. (29) She still gives speeches and writes about her experiences. (30) She hopes that more people will become interested in these wonderful animals.
The writer would like to add a transition between sentences 28 and 29. Which transition word works the best?
A ) Then,
B ) While,
C) First ,
D) However,
However is the best choice. There is a contrast in ideas-she no longer lives with the animals so you would not expect her to be talking and writing about them.
8 In sentence 5, awesome is not the most effective word to use. Which of the following could replace awesome in this sentence? (5) Without this gear he wouldn’t be able to survive the awesome temperatures or the thin atmosphere.
F brooding
G breathtaking
H decisive
J extreme
J extreme
19 What is the correct way to write sentences 15 and 16? (15) The 11-year-old also began writing a diary. (16) Which detailed what was happening in her region of Pakistan.
A The 11-year-old also began writing a diary it detailed what was happening in her region of Pakistan.
B The 11-year-old also began writing a diary. With details about what was happening in her region of Pakistan.
C The 11-year-old also began writing a diary that detailed what was happening in her region of Pakistan.
D The sentences are written correctly in the paper.
C The 11-year-old also began writing a diary that detailed what was happening in her region of Pakistan.