(Semi)colons, Commas, and Capitalization oh my!
Name three ways to fix the single error (60 seconds):
Turner’s best argument for finding the closely related element met is that the relationship was consistent with the nature of a familial relationship, however the court may not accept this argument since they were not legally family members.
1. Replace "however" with a coordinating conjunction (FANBOYS)
2. Replace the comma with a period
3. Replace the comma with a semicolon
What are the components of a case illustration in order? (30 seconds)
1. Hook
2. Holding
3. Trigger Facts
4. Reasoning
Identify the error in this citation (30 seconds):
Id at 507.
There should be an italicized period after Id.
Properly add an apostrophe to the words below (45 seconds):
It (singular, possessive)
Crow (plural, possessive)
Cactus (plural, possessive)
Walters (singular, possessive)
Its
Crows’
Cacti’s or Cactuses’
Walters’s
What will Prof. Simon do if you put a period outside the quotation marks on your final memo?
Make you give her money/buy her dinner
Identify all grammatical errors (90 seconds):
On a warm Monday, much like this one, Turner began his drive up the mountain with Dormer, a man who certainly has bad reflexes.
No grammatical errors
What five components do you typically include in a roadmap? (30 seconds)
1. Conclusion
2. Policy Concerns
3. Big Rule Statement
4. Other general legal propositions (e.g., the burden)
5. Big Application
*This list is not in a particular order*
Identify the two errors in this case name (30 seconds):
State Farm Mutual Auto. Ins. Co. v. Connolly by and through her parents Connolly,
1. Mutual should be abbreviated to Mut.
2. The correct format is Connolly ex rel. Connolly
Identify the errors in the following quote (30 seconds):
"We believe that what Keck meant by "or otherwise" can be discerned from the court's use of Leong v. Takasaki, 520 P.2d 758 (Haw. 1974)."
The inside quotation marks should be single, not double, quotation marks.
"We believe that what Keck meant by 'or otherwise' can be discerned from the court's use of Leong v. Takasaki, 520 P.2d 758 (Haw. 1974)."
What did Ryan Turner and Randy Dormer usually fight about?
Who got the last of Sue's brownies
Identify the grammatical error this sentence made (45 seconds):
In Hearn, the Court, while granting a motion to dismiss on other grounds, found that a husband and daughter who sued cigarette manufacturers for the death of their wife and mother, were closely related persons. Hearn v. R.J. Reynolds Tobacco Co., 279 F. Supp. 2d 1096, 1116 (D. Ariz. 2003).
"Court" should not be capitalized since the Arizona District Court is not (1) the U.S. Supreme Court, (2) the highest tribunal whose laws govern the outcome, or (3) the court being addressed.
Identify the three errors in the following sentences of an application section (60 seconds):
Unlike the plaintiff and decedent in Roman, who were a pet owner and pet, Turner and Dormer are both humans. Furthermore, like in Hearn, Turner and Dormer are immediate family members as step-son and step-father. Hearn v. R.J. Reynolds Tobacco Co., 279 F. Supp. 2d 1096, 1116 (D. Ariz. 2003) (applying Arizona law).
1. The “unlike” comparison comes before the “like” comparison.
2. The second sentence is not apples-to-apples.
3. There is a citation in the application section.
Identify the four errors in this full citation (90 seconds):
Marquez v. Phoenix, 2008 WL 11338817 (D. Ariz. 2008).
1. The correct case name is Marquez v. City of Phoenix
2. The citation is missing a pincite
3. The citation is missing the docket number
4. Unpublished decisions require a full date
Identify the two errors in this sentence (60 seconds):
Arizona has a “strong policy interest 'In fully compensating injured plaintiffs to make them whole. Thus, Arizona allows unlimited recovery for actual damages, expenses for past and prospective medical care, past and prospective pain and suffering, lost earnings, and diminished earning capacity.” Hislop v. Salt River Project Agric. Improvement & Power Dist., 5 P.3d 267, 271 (Ariz. App. 2000).
1. The I that starts the internal quotation should be lowercase
2. Missing the closing single quotation mark
What is the name of Prof. Simon's dog?
Duke
Identify the error in this sentence (45 seconds):
Ivanna, an aggressive impulsive host, failed to build a higher railing, threw a stuffed bird, and killed Dormer.
There should be a comma between “aggressive” and “impulsive”
Identify the two errors in the following sentences that start a case illustration for Hislop (60 seconds):
The closely related person element is not met when there is no "familial relationship, or something closely akin,” between the victim and the bystander. Hislop v. Salt River Project Agric. Improvement & Power Dist., 5. P.3d 267, 269 (Ariz. Ct. App. 2000); see also Keck v. Jackson, 593 P.2d 668, 670 (Ariz. 1979) (holding that a claim was stated when the victim was the bystander's mother). In Hislop, the plaintiffs witnessed their coworker and friend die. Id.
1. The parenthetical is in the middle of the case illustration rather than the end
2. The holding should come before the facts
Bonus?
3. Incorrect use of Id.!
Identify the five errors in this citation (2 minutes):
Hislop v. Salt River Project Agr. Imp. and Power Dist., 5 P. 3d 267 at 282 (Ariz. Ct. App. 2000).
Hislop v. Salt River Project Agric. Improvement & Power Dist., 5 P.3d 267, 282 (Ariz. Ct. App. 2000).
1. Agr. should be Agric.
2. Imp. should be Improvement
3. And should be &
4. No space between P and 3d!!!!
5. There should NOT be an “at” before the pincite
Identify both errors (60 seconds):
According to Mrs. Dormer, Ms. Shalet was apologetic after the accident and explains that she “noticed Randy…and thought it would be funny” to throw the stuffed bird at him.
1. Change "explains" to "explained" to match the past tense verbs (parallelism)
2. The ellipses are improperly spaced and should have a space between each period . . . like this
What is wrong with these sentences? (2 errors)
A stuffed bird was thrown at Randy Dormer. She made the decision because she thought it was funny.
1. Passive voice
2. Nominalization
Example correction: Ivana threw a stuffed bird at Randy Dormer. She decided to throw the bird because it was funny.
Identify all six grammatical errors (60 seconds):
Unsurprisingly a Court is probably going to make the wrong decision here and find the Zone of Danger element met: everyone knows they coddle people who are easily frightened.
1. Add a comma after “Unsurprisingly”
2. Do not capitalize "Court" since this sentence is not directed at a known court handling this matter, for there is no known court handling this matter
3. Do not capitalize "Zone of Danger"
4. The colon should be a semicolon
5. Court is an “it”
6. After changing "they" to "it," you must change "coddle" to "coddles."
Identify the two errors in the following point heading for the CREAC on present intent and agreement to be married (60 seconds):
A. The element is met because Turner and Dormer had a close familial relationship.
1. The point heading does not specify which element is at issue in the following CREAC.
2. The point heading includes a conclusion rather than the operative facts.
Identify and correct the five errors in this citation (underline everything that should be italicized) (2 minutes):
Id.; See e.g. Keck, 593 P. 2d at 678.
Id.; see, e.g., Keck, 593 P.2d at 678.
1. See should not be capitalized because it does not start the citation sentence
2. See and e.g. should be italicized
3. There should be an italicized comma after “see”
4. There should be an unitalicized comma after “e.g.”
5. There should not be a space between P. and 2d
Identify the four errors in the following sentence (60 seconds):
‘A negligent infliction of emotional distress cause of action requires the plaintiff to: (1) witness an injury to a closely related person, (2) suffer mental anguish manifested as physical injury, and (3) be within the zone of danger so as to be subject to an unreasonable risk of bodily harm’. Pierce v. Casas Adobes Baptist Church, 782 P.2d 1162, 1165 (1989)
1. Single quotations should be double: ‘ → “
2. NO PERIOD AFTER THE QUOTATION MARK!!!
3. Missing “Ariz.” in the parenthetical
4. Missing period at the end of the citation
Where did Professor Simon go over fall break?
New York