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The Walrus & The Carpenter
100

Cory would like to strengthen his introductory paragraph so that it helps to present his argument better. What is the most effective way to revise sentence 3?

B: His nonviolent philosophy and his steadfast devotion to his cause made him the person we celebrate today.

100

How does the author's introduction of Mrs. Paquette in the first three paragraphs support the theme of the passage?

D: It reinforces the narrator's limited view of Mrs. Paquette.

100

Which quote from the poem provides the best evidence that the Walrus and Carpenter plan to eat the Oysters?

D: “‘A loaf of bread,’ the Walrus said,/ ‘Is what we chiefly need:’” (stanza 13)

200

What is the best transition to include at the beginning of sentence 7?

C: However,

200

Which detail from the passage best supports the answer to the previous question?

D:  . . . I knew only what I saw of her within the four walls of her classroom.

200

Which of the following best describes a central theme in the poem?

D: People who have power over others tend to use it for their own benefit.

300

Cory would like to provide a more effective transition between the second paragraph (sentences 4–7) and the third paragraph (sentences 8–12.) Which of the following should be added before sentence 8 to help readers effectively transition from the second to the third paragraph?

D: Another thing that makes Dr. King stand out from other protestors of the time is the fact that he never backed down on his beliefs, even in the face of violence.

300

"In my eyes, Mrs. Paquette was little more than a vampire herself, perhaps one permitted to walk the earth only during normal school hours, who then returned to her coffin and corrected papers until dawn"

What impact does the sentence have on the overall meaning of the passage?

D: It shows the limited point of view of the narrator.

300

Read lines 77-84


In these lines, the Walrus’ words and actions suggest that he —

B: is a deceptive character who does not put much effort into lying.

400

Cory is not satisfied with the third paragraph (sentences 8–12.) Which sentence should be removed because it does not pertain to the main idea of the paragraph?

A: Sentence 9

400

"When Count Dracula appeared at the window and began to hypnotize Miss Wells, I watched Mrs. Paquette grow languid and listless, and I tried to imagine her rehearsing this scene over and over until it was perfect, then returning home to a slush pile of papers waiting for her keen eye, her magic touch."

What is the meaning of languid in the sentence?

D: Without energy

400

By opening this narrative poem with a description of the setting, the author —

establishes the strange and unusual landscape in which the events take place.

500

Cory would like to end his essay with a statement that leaves the reader with a powerful message. Which statement should he add after sentence 13?

C: Let us honor his memory and sacrifice by not forgetting his timeless example and valuable teachings.

500

"When Count Dracula appeared at the window and began to hypnotize Miss Wells, I watched Mrs. Paquette grow languid and listless, and I tried to imagine her rehearsing this scene over and over until it was perfect, then returning home to a slush pile of papers waiting for her keen eye, her magic touch."

Which word from the sentence best supports the answer to the previous question?

B: listless

500

Read lines 13-18

These details about the setting are notable because they show that —

A: Everything on this beach might seem to be exactly how it should be, but at the same time is extremely unusual.

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