Edit and Revise
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Bill, Jill, Bo, Joe, and I are going down to the fair for corndogs
period at the end (.)
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Can we visit tokyo, Japan when I am older?
Capitalize Tokyo
What is the very first thing we do when we start an essay?
INDENT!
What does MINTS stand for & why do we use it?
Capitalization
Months (& days of the week)
I- the word 'I'
Names (of proper nouns)
Titles of songs, books, movies, etc.
Start of sententces
I do not want to have you
to fill the empty parts of me
I want to be so complete
I could light a whole city
and then I want to have you
cause the two of us combined
could set it on fire
-rupi kaur
What type of figurative language is used in the poem?
Metaphor: ...the two of us combined could set it on fire.
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When are we going to visit grandma in florida again?
Capitalize Florida
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"Can we have more apple pie? said John.
Quotes after pie and question mark
What summarizes what our essay is about? The purpose of our writing?
a thesis
What does FANBOYS stand for & what is their best friend?
For, And, Nor, But, Or, Yet, So
a comma
I do not want to have you
to fill the empty parts of me
I want to be so complete
I could light a whole city
and then I want to have you
cause the two of us combined
could set it on fire
-rupi kaur
True/False The narrator wants to feel overwhelmed by their love with their partner that it is felt by the entire city, and their passion starts a fire.
False
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She were going to Walmart, but she had a coupon for Target.
were to was
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When will he stop trying two cheat on his tests?
two --> to
language that uses words or expressions with a meaning that is different from the literal interpretation; Things that make your writing more exciting
Figurative language
What does AAAWWUBBIS stand for?
What kind of sentence uses it?
Although, After, As, While, When, Until, Before, Because, If, Since
Complex Sentences
I do not want to have you
to fill the empty parts of me
I want to be so complete
I could light a whole city
and then I want to have you
cause the two of us combined
could set it on fire
-rupi kaur
What does lines 3-4 imply?
I want to be an entire person on my own. I want to know who I am, be a full person, be complete on my own before I'm with someone else. If I was a light I want to be so bright I could shine as bright as an entire city.
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Their going to go to work on Thursday and Friday at Taco Bell.
Their to They're
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Jennifer try to play with her friends, but they were in quarantine.
try to tried
How do I end my essay?
Restated thesis
After the football game we all went to McDonald's for food.
We all went to McDonalds for food after the football game.
After the football game, we all went to McDonald's for food.
If a sentence starts with an AAAWWUBBIS, it gets a comma.
You treat them as if
they have a heart like yours
but not everyone can be as soft
and as tender as you
you don't see the person they are
you see the person
they have the potential to be
you give and give till
they have taken everything
out of you and leave
you empty
-rupi kaur
Why is the speaker empty? Is this an example of explicit or implicit?
explicit, because it's explaining why exactly you're empty; you're giving too much. You're empty because you give and give to people that take and take.
Find the editing error: Hint* 2 errors
Billy and i like cinnamon rolls and chocolate milk to.
Capitalize I. to --> too
Combine the 2 sentences:
There would be no one to live for during those coming years. She would live for herself.
1. There would be no one to live for during those coming years; she would live for herself.
2. There would be no one to live for during those coming years, for she would live for herself.
3. There would be no one to live for during those coming years: she would live for herself.
What type of essay tells you their point of view, and tries to get you to agree with them?
Argumentative
What are the reasons we use a colon (:) ?
There's 4!
1. to list things
2. before a noun/noun phrase
3. to connect sentences
4. before a quote
The moment came & the soldiers, all rookies, none of whom had had any training, but who had nevertheless all been issued, uniforms, boarded the train. The band played & the crowd cheered. Although no one noticed, I'm sure my grandmother had a tear in her eye for the only son, going off to war. The train groaned as if it knew the destiny to which it was taking its passengers, but it soon it began to move. Still cheering & waving their flags, the band still playing, the train slowly departed the station.
What does this piece of figurative language contribute to the momentum of?
“The train groaned as if it knew the destiny to which it was taking its passengers, but it soon began to move.”
a)The quick & slow movements that come with war.
b)The slow dread & wait that lies behind the fate on the other side of war.
c)The locomotive sounds mimic the sounds that come from the shooting rifles in the war.
d)The imagery of how they will all die in the end.
b) the slow dread & wait that lies behind the fate on the other side of war.