Edit and Revise
Edit and Revise x2
Essays
Basics
Poetry
100

Find the editing error:

Bill, Jill, Bo, Joe, and I are going down to the fair for corndogs

period at the end (.)

100

Find the editing error: 

Can we visit tokyo, Japan when I am older?

Capitalize Tokyo

100

What is the very first thing we do when we start an essay?

INDENT!

100

What does MINTS stand for & why do we use it? 

Capitalization

Months (& days of the week)

I- the word 'I'

Names (of proper nouns)

Titles of songs, books, movies, etc. 

Start of sententces 

100

I do not want to have you

to fill the empty parts of me

I want to be so complete 

I could light a whole city

and then I want to have you

cause the two of us combined

could set it on fire

-rupi kaur

What type of figurative language is used in the poem?

Metaphor: ...the two of us combined could set it on fire. 

200

Find the editing error:

When are we going to visit grandma in florida again?

Capitalize Florida

200

Find the editing error:

"Can we have more apple pie? said John. 

Quotes after pie and question mark

200

What summarizes what our essay is about? The purpose of our writing?

a thesis

200

What does FANBOYS stand for & what is their best friend?

For, And, Nor, But, Or, Yet, So 


a comma 

200

I do not want to have you

to fill the empty parts of me

I want to be so complete 

I could light a whole city

and then I want to have you

cause the two of us combined

could set it on fire


-rupi kaur

True/False    The narrator wants to feel overwhelmed by their love with their partner that it is felt by the entire city, and their passion starts a fire. 

False

300

Find the editing error:

She were going to Walmart, but she had a coupon for Target. 

were to was

300

Find the editing error:

When will he stop trying two cheat on his tests?

two --> to

300

language that uses words or expressions with a meaning that is different from the literal interpretation; Things that make your writing more exciting

Figurative language

300

What does AAAWWUBBIS stand for? 

What kind of sentence uses it?

Although, After, As, While, When, Until, Before, Because, If, Since


Complex Sentences

300

I do not want to have you

to fill the empty parts of me 

I want to be so complete 

I could light a whole city

and then I want to have you

cause the two of us combined

could set it on fire

-rupi kaur

What does lines 3-4  imply? 

I want to be an entire person on my own. I want to know who I am, be a full person, be complete on my own before I'm with someone else. If I was a light I want to be so bright I could shine as bright as an entire city. 

400

Find the editing error:

Their going to go to work on Thursday and Friday at Taco Bell. 

Their to They're

400

Find the editing error:

Jennifer try to play with her friends, but they were in quarantine.

try to tried

400

How do I end my essay?

Restated thesis

400
Which sentence needs to add a comma to it? Where? 


After the football game we all went to McDonald's for food.

We all went to McDonalds for food after the football game. 

After the football game, we all went to McDonald's for food.

If a sentence starts with an AAAWWUBBIS, it gets a comma. 

400

You treat them as if

they have a heart like yours

but not everyone can be as soft 

and as tender as you

you don't see the person they are

you see the person 

they have  the potential to be 

you give and give till

they have taken everything 

out of you and leave

you empty

-rupi kaur 

Why is the speaker empty? Is this an example of explicit or implicit?  

explicit, because it's explaining why exactly you're empty; you're giving too much. You're empty because you give and give to people that take and take. 

500

Find the editing error: Hint* 2 errors

Billy and i like cinnamon rolls and chocolate milk to.

Capitalize I.     to --> too

500

Combine the 2 sentences: 

There would be no one to live for during those coming years. She would live for herself. 

1. There would be no one to live for during those coming years; she would live for herself. 

2. There would be no one to live for during those coming years, for she would live for herself. 

3. There would be no one to live for during those coming years: she would live for herself. 

500

What type of essay tells you their point of view, and tries to get you to agree with them? 

Argumentative

500

What are the reasons we use a colon (:) ? 

There's 4!

1. to list things

2. before a noun/noun phrase

3. to connect sentences

4. before a quote 

500

The moment came & the soldiers, all rookies, none of whom had had any training, but who had nevertheless all been issued, uniforms, boarded the train. The band played & the crowd cheered. Although no one noticed, I'm sure my grandmother had a tear in her eye for the only son, going off to war. The train groaned as if it knew the destiny to which it was taking its passengers, but it soon it began to move. Still cheering & waving their flags, the band still playing, the train slowly departed the station.

What does this piece of figurative language contribute to the momentum of?

“The train groaned as if it knew the destiny to which it was taking its passengers, but it soon began to move.”

a)The quick & slow movements that come with war.

b)The slow dread & wait that lies behind the fate on the other side of war.

c)The locomotive sounds mimic the sounds that come from the shooting rifles in the war.

d)The imagery of how they will all die in the end.

b) the slow dread & wait that lies behind the fate on the other side of war. 

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