EDITING
What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 1?
After eating two much candy, the little boy felt sick.
a) Change eating to ate.
b) Change needs to need.
c) Change little to big.
d) Change two to too.
d) Change two to too.
What change should be made in sentence 1?
The children work on their projects and the teacher walks around checking on them.
a) Change children to child.
b) Change projects to assignment.
c) Insert a comma after projects.
d) No change should be made.
c) Insert a comma after projects.
What word could be used in place of the word "said" to make this sentence sound better?
Mom said, "Get those muddy shoes off of the carpet!"
a) shouted
b) asked
c) replied
d) told
a) shouted
What is the best way to combine sentences 2 and 3?
I was invited to a Halloween party last week. I don't have a costume. Mom is going to take me to the store to find one.
a) I don't have a costume, or Mom is going to take me to the store to find one.
b) I don't have a costume, so Mom is going to take me to the store to find one.
c) I don't have a costume so Mom is going to take me to the store to find one.
b) I don't have a costume, so Mom is going to take me to the store to find one.
What change can Steven make to improve the clarity of sentence 6?
(5)My teacher was very proud of me. (6)She always tells them that if they read for 20 minutes every night they will become better readers. (7)Being a better reader will make learning all subjects much easier.
a) Change them to her students.
b) Change read to rode.
c) Change every night to night time.
d) Change night to day.
What change needs to be made in sentence 4?
The boy and his sister ate there dinner and went to bed.
a) Change boy to boys.
b) Change ate to eats.
c) Change went to goes.
d) Change there to their.
d) Change there to their.
What change should be made in sentence 2?
(1)Ms. Ramos and Ms. Galvez were standing in the pod discussing the football game that they watched last night. (2)She heard a noise and turned around. (3)There was a dog in the building!
a) Change she to they.
b) Change noise to noyse.
c) Change turned to tuned.
d) No change is needed in the sentence.
a) Change she to they.
What word could be used in place of "sad" to make the sentence sound better?
When I got home from school, Mom told me that my friend's mom had called and said that she was sick and couldn't come over to play. I felt so sad.
a) sleepy
b) disappointed
c) confused
d) excited
b) disappointed
Which transition word is best to add at the beginning of sentence 5?
(1)Mom bought me some roller skates. (2)I was excited to use them, but I kept falling every time I stood up. (3)She held on to me until I could do it by myself(4)I practiced and practiced. (5)I could do it all by myself.
a) However
b) Therefore
c) Soon
d) Afterward
c) Soon
Leo has included an extraneous sentence. Which sentence should be deleted?
(1)We always have so much fun baking cookies and cakes on the weekends. (2)Mom takes us to Kroger to buy the ingredients. (3) My dad doesn't like to go to Kroger because he doesn't like waiting in line. (4)She helps us preheat the oven and mix all the ingredients together. (5)Then we all sit down and eat the goodies together!
a) sentence 1
b) sentence 2
c) sentence 3
d) sentence 4
c) sentence 3
What change should be made in sentence 5?
Clarissa asked her mom to let her take ballet lessons. Clarissa practiced and practiced. Eventually, her teacher ask her if she wanted to be the lead in the ballet performance. Clarissa's hard work paid off, and she was finally a ballerina!
a) Change mom to Mom
b) Change ballet to ballets
c) Change paid to payed.
d) Change ask to asked.
d) Change ask to asked.
What change should be made in sentence 8?
(7)Aunt Patty took us to the library every Saturday during the summer and told us that we could check out as many books as we wanted to. (8)We selected books and then sat quiet in the library for hours reading.
a) Change we to they.
b) Change books to book.c) Change quiet to quietly.
d) Change hours to ours.
c) Change quiet to quietly.
How can Manuel improve his essay?
I love to play with my grandparents' dogs when I visit them. Their names are Woof and Good Dog. Woof jumps up on me and gives me kisses.
a) Woof is brown with white spots all over him.
b) Good Dog is a little yappy dog that chases his tail around and around.
c) Last summer, Woof jumped on me and pinned me down on the ground. He licked and licked my face until I was dripping wet. Grandma had to come outside and help me up off of the ground!
c) Last summer, Woof jumped on me and pinned me down on the ground. He licked and licked my face until I was dripping wet. Grandma had to come outside and help me up off of the ground!
What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 3?
(1)My sisters and I were so excited to be at Sea World. (2)Right when we arrived we ran over to the Bamboo Shoot ride. (3)Mom said that the line was very long, but we didn't mind waiting in the very long line.
a) Mom said that the line was very long, but we didn't mind waiting.
b) Mom said that the line was very long and we didn't mind waiting in the long line.
c) Mom said that the line was very long so we didn't mind waiting in the line that was long.
a) Mom said that the line was very long, but we didn't mind waiting.
Xavier would like to add a sentence to bring his paper to a more effective conclusion. Which sentence should he add after sentence 37 to help achieve this goal?
I love riding the Bamboo Shoot ride. I love eating popsicles in the wade pool and watching the dolphins do tricks. These are the things that make Sea World my favorite place. I can't wait to go back to Sea World next summer.
a) Sometimes the dolphins come close and splash water all over me.
b) The Bamboo ride is a little scary sometimes, but it's worth it!
c) Until I can return next summer, I will just enjoy the pictures we took of my favorite place ever!c) Until I can return next summer, I will just enjoy the pictures we took of my favorite place ever!