Tone
Language
Emphasis/Parallel
Active vs Passive/Modifiers
Sentence Types and Faults
100
Revise this sentence for the "You" view. To avoid suffering the kinds of monetary losses we have experience in the past, our credit union prohibits the cashing of third-party checks presented by our members.
What is To prevent you from losing money in double-endorsed check transactions, our bank now cashes only single-endorsed checks.
100
Revise the following sentence to plain English. Please ascertain whether we must perpetuate our current contract despite perplexing profits.
What is Please find out whether we must continue our current contract despite astonishing profits.
100
Choose A or B Which is more emphatic? a. We thought our written proposal was good. b. We thought our written proposal was clear, efficient, and powerful.
What is B
100
Revise this sentence to make it in active voice. A company credit card was used by the manager to purchase office supplies.
What is The manager used a company credit card to purchase the office supplies.
100
What type of sentence is this. Global transportation increasingly makes seasonal foods available year round. a. Simple Sentence b. Compound Sentence c. Complex d. Compound-Complex
What is A
200
Revise this sentence to make the tone conversational yet professional. Kindly inform the undersigned whether or not your representative will be making a visitation in the near future.
What is Please tell me whether your representative will be visiting before (date).
200
Revise the sentence to eliminate terms that suggest stereotypes or are sexist. Every employee is entitled to see his personnel file.
What is Every employee is entitled to see his or her personnel file. (Or) All employees are entitled to see their personnel files.
200
Which is more emphatic? Choose A or B. a. The company spent a great deal on employee training. b. The company spent $100,000 on remedial writing training for employees.
What is B
200
Revise this sentence so it is in passive voice. Accounting seems to have made a serious error in this report.
What is A serious error seems to have been made in this report.
200
Which type of sentences are these? 1. If you want peaches in the winter, you can have them. 2. Because fuel for international trade is not taxed, shippers can send foods inexpensively. a. Simple Sentence b. Compound Sentence c. Complex Sentence d. Compound-Complex Sentence
What is 1. C 2. C
300
Revise the following sentences to emphasize the "You" view. We are pleased to announce an arrangement with H-P that allows us to offer discounted computers in the student bookstore.
What is All you need to do is go to the campus student bookstore to purchase HP computers at discounted prices.
300
Revise the sentence to eliminate terms that suggest stereotypes or are sexist. Any applicant for the position of fireman must submit a medical report signed by his physician.
What is Applicants for firefighter positions must submit medical records signed by their physicians.
300
Which is more emphatic? Choose A or B. a. You had a call from Kaitlen Murphy who wants your Excel spreadsheet on the departmental budget. b. You had a call from someone who wanted something.
What is A
300
Revise to fix the dangling and misplaced modifiers. The editor and chief's rules were to be observed by all staff members, no matter how silly they seemed.
What is Staff members were to observe all of the editor and chief's rules.
300
Choose A, B, or C then Revise. Although they began as a side business for Disney. Destination weddings now represent a major income source. a. Fragment b. Run-on c. Comma Splice
What is A- Although they began as a side business for Disney, destination weddings now represent a major income source.
400
Revise the following statements to make them positive. 1. Customers are ineligible for the 10 percent discount unless they show their membership cards. 2. Titan Insurance Company will not process any claim not accompanied by documented proof from a physician showing that the injuries were treated.
What is 1. Customers with membership cards receive a 10 percent discount. 2. We can process your claim when you send us a letter from your doctor showing that he or she treated your injuries.
400
Revise to use plain English. He hypothesized that the vehicle was not operational because of a malfunctioning gasket.
What is He determined that the vehicle was not operating because of a gasket that was not working correctly.
400
Revise these sentence so its parts are balanced. 1. To improve your listening skills, you should stop talking, your surroundings should be controlled, be listening for main points, and an open mind must be kept. 2. Training seminars must be stimulating and a challenge.
What is 1. To improve your listening skills, you should stop talking, control your surroundings, listen for main points, and keep an open mind. 2. Training seminars must be stimulating and challenging.
400
Put sentence one into passive voice and sentence two and three into active voice. 1. We cannot ship your order for smart surge protectors until May 5. 2. To protect students, laws were passed in many states that prohibited the use of social security numbers as identification. 3. Checks are processed more quickly by banks because of new regulations.
What is 1. Your order for smart surge protectors will be shipped on May 5. 2. To protect students, many states passed laws prohibiting the use of social security numbers as identification. 3. Banks process checks more quickly because of new regulations.
400
Revise and choose A, B, or C. 1. About 2,000 weddings are held yearly, Which is twice the number just ten years ago. 2. Weddings may take place in less than one hour however the cost may be as much as $5,000. a. Fragment b. Run-on c. Comma-Splice
What is 1. A - About 2,000 weddings are held yearly, which is twice the number just ten years ago. 2. C- Weddings may take place in less than one hour; however, the code may be as much as $5,000.
500
Revise the following sentences to emphasize the "you" view. To help us process your order with our new database software, we need you to go to this Web site and fill out the customer information required.
What is To have your orders processed more quickly and efficiently, please fill out your customer information at our Web site.
500
Revise to plain English. Because we can not monitor all cash payments, we must terminate the contract.
What is Because we can not oversee all cash payments, we must end the contract.
500
Revise these sentences to make them parallel. 1. PaulaDay, director of Okefenokee branch, will now supervise all Eastern Division operations; the Western Division will be supervised by our Oroville branch director, Reggie Kostiz. 2. Our newly hired employee has started using the computer and to learn her coworker's names.
What is 1. Paula Day, director of the Okefenokee branch, will now supervise all Eastern Division operations; Reggie Kostiz, director of the Oroville branch, will now supervise all Western Division operations. 2. Our newly hired employee has started to use the computer and to learn her coworker's names. or Our newly hired employee has started using the computer and learning her coworker's names.
500
Revise all of these dangling and misplaced modifiers. 1. After being in the refrigerator for a week, Rachel said the salad tasted strange. 2. Using two search engines, the Web site was finally located. 3. Acting as committee chairman, many caterers were interviewed by Susan.
What is 1. Rachel said the salad tasted strange after being in the refrigerator for a week. 2. The Web site was located using two search engines. 3. Committee chairman, Susan, interviewed many caterers.
500
What type of sentences are these. Choose A, B, C, or D. 1. Lemons from Argentina fill supermarket shelves in Spain, but local lemons rot on the ground. 2. Food has moved around the world since Europeans brought tea from China; however, food has never moved at the speed or in the amounts it has recently. a. Simple Sentence b. Compound Sentence c. Complex Sentence d. Compound-Complex Sentence
What is 1. B 2. D
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