What change, if any, should be made in sentence 21?
F Change I thought to Thought
G Change skipping to skiping
H Change Event to event
J Make no change
H. Change Event to event
What is the correct way to write sentences 24 and 25?
F My father was very clear about this. How long to wait before trying to flip the pancakes over.
G My father was very clear. About how long to wait before trying to flip the pancakes over.
H My father was very clear about this he told me how long to wait before trying to flip the pancakes over.
J My father was very clear about how long to wait before trying to flip the pancakes over.
J. My father was very clear about how long to wait before trying to flip the pancakes over.
What change should be made in sentence 7?
F Change play to plays
G Change soccer or football to Soccer or Football
H Change chassing to chasing
J No change should be made in sentence 7.
H. Change chassing to chasing
The meaning of sentence 12 is unclear. What change can Claire make to improve the clarity of this sentence?
F Change He to Another counselor
G Change cliff to spot
H Change him to them
J Change the rope to it
F. Change he to Another counselor
You don't have to follow a prompt when writing an essay.
True or False
False
What change should be made in sentence 29?
F Change Ive to I’ve
G Change already to alreddy
H Change where to were
J No change should be made.
F. Change Ive to I've
What is the most effective way to combine sentences 24 and 25?
F Since he made his way steadily down with a grin, it began to spread over his face.
G He made his way steadily down because a grin began to spread over his face.
H As he made his way steadily down, a grin began to spread over his face.
J He made his way steadily down a grin began to spread over his face.
What change should be made in sentence 13?
A Change the comma after lumps to a period
B Change instructed to instructing
C Change stired to stirred
D No change should be made in sentence 13.
C. Change stired to stirred
How does sentence 23 need to be changed?
A. Change it to they
B. Change me to us
C. Change the period to a comma
D. Sentence 23 does not need to be changed.
A. Change it to they
What should you always start an expository essay with?
A hook, thesis, detail, or closing statement?
A hook
What change needs to be made in sentence 22?
F Change your to you’re
G Change the period to a comma
H Delete the quotation marks at the end of the sentence
J No change needs to be made in sentence 22.
F. Change your to you're
What is the correct way to write sentences 13 and 14?
F If we had a rock-climbing wall on our playground, it could also be used for PE classes.
G We could have a rock-climbing wall on our playground. Which could also be used for PE classes.
H We could have a rock-climbing wall on our playground, it could also be used for PE classes.
J The sentences are written correctly in the paper
F. If we had a rock-climbing wall on our playground, it could also be used for PE classes.
What change should be made in sentence 30?
A Change has to having
B Change sended to sent
C Change to children to they have gone to children
D No change should be made.
B. Change sended to sent
Claire’s paper ends abruptly and leaves the reader wondering what happens next. Which sentence should Claire add to the end of her paper?
F He had made it down and had actually rappelled.
G “Where’s my snack?” he asked the counselors.
H He didn’t have a doubt about what he wanted to say.
J “Can I do it again?” he shouted with excitement.
J. "Can I do it again?" he shouted with excitement.
Name a concluding word
in summary, in conclusion, all in all, overall, to sum up, as can be seen, as shown above, etc.
What change should be made in sentence 22?
A Change didn’t to did’nt
B Insert a comma after pancake
C Change spreads out to spread out
D Sentence 22 should not be changed.
B. Insert a comma after pancake
What is the correct way to write sentence 20?
F Otherwise, the pancakes would stick to the surface. And have a big mess to clean up.
G Otherwise, the pancakes would stick to the surface then we would have a big mess to clean up.
H Otherwise, the pancakes would stick to the surface, and we would have a big mess to clean up.
J The sentence is written correctly in the paper.
H. Otherwise, the pancakes would stick to the surface, and we would have a big mess to clean up.
What change needs to be made in sentence 35?
F Change saw to seen
G Change instead of to instead off
H Change address it to address them
J Change themselfs to themselves
J Change themselfs to themselves
Claire wants to strengthen the focus of her story. Which of the following is the BEST replacement for sentence 10?
A. Being at camp had been a wonderful experience for Jared and the other kids.
B. Jared was sometimes a little afraid to do things he had never done before.
C. Today was Jared’s last chance to overcome his fear and give rappelling a try.
D. Even though the others had been rappelling down the side of the cliff, Jared didn’t want to.
C. Today was Jared's last chance to overcome his fear and give rappelling a try.
Name two tools writers use to make their writing better.
The answer is NOT spelling, punctuation, or capitalization
Figurative language, sparkle words, staying on topic, organization, writing in sequential order.
How does sentence 4 need to be changed?
A Change have become to has become
B Change then to than
C Change to me to too me
D Sentence 4 does not need to be changed.
B. Change then to than
What is the correct way to write sentences 17 and 18?
A All the attention prompted Blare to create an organization. Which he called Blare’s Bears for Haiti.
B All the attention prompting Blare to create an organization called Blare’s Bears for Haiti.
C All the attention prompted Blare to create an organization, it was called Blare’s Bears for Haiti.
D All the attention prompted Blare to create an organization called Blare’s Bears for Haiti.
D. All the attention prompted Blare to create an organization called Blare's Bears for Haiti.
What change needs to be made in sentence 10?
F Change were to was
G Change climmed to climbed
H Change fell to falled
J No change needs to be made.
G. Change climmed to climbed
Claire forgot to include an important detail in the last paragraph (sentences 16–29).
"With trembling legs he took his first step."
Reread the paragraph carefully. Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?
A After sentence 19
B After sentence 20
C After sentence 21
D After sentence 26
B. After sentence 20
In your own words, what is a thesis statement?
The main idea/topic of the essay.