Editing and Revising
1 (1) Buster Bear yawned as he lay on his comfortable bed of leaves and watched the first early morning sunbeams creeping through the Green Forest to chase out the Black Shadows. (2) Once more he yawned, and then he slowly get to his feet and shook himself.
What change should be made in sentence 2? A. Change Once to once B. Change more to most C. Change get to got D. Change shook to shooked
C. change get to got
(3) By the time the apples began to grew ripe, it was found that every night, one of them was gone.
The author has made an error in sentence 3. Select the response that corrects this error.
a. growing
b. grow
c. grows
d. grewing
Grow
(4) The purpose of the seat belt was to keep passengers above the vehicle in an accident.
The author has made an error in sentence 4. Select the response that corrects this error.
a. Change was to were
b. Change keep to kept
c. Change above to inside
d. Change an to a
C. Change above to inside
(3) Stowe was paid $300 to publish her story over a period of 10 months. (4) Stowe cares deeply about human rights. (5) The book divided people into those who wished to abolish slavery and those who wished to maintain slavery.
What change should be made in sentence 4?
a. Change cares to cared
b. Change deeply to deep
c. Change human to hooman
d. No change
A. Change cares to cared
(5) She would’ve lie down with me and get me to sleep, but long before I woke, she was gone.
What change should be made in sentence 5?
A. Change would’ve to would
B. Change lie to lied
C. Change woke to awake
D. Change gone to left
B. Change lie to lied
(4) Than he ate some radishes, and then, feeling rather sick, he went to look for some parsley.
A. Change Than to Then
B. Change ate to eat
C. Change went to goes
D. Change the period to a question mark
A. Change than to then
(5) Taking time and watching someone’s behavior and actions will allow me to decide if they are an good friend, instead of listening to someone else’s opinion.
What change should be made in sentence 5?
a. Change Taking to Takeing
b. Change decide to deside
c. Change an to a
d. Change else’s to elses
C. Change an to a
(2) Suggestions on the design are able to be made by writing letters to the principal from the students and the staff.
Sentence 2 needs to be revised. Rewrite sentence 2 in a clear and effective way.
Students and staff are able to make suggestions on the design by writing letters to the principal.
(1) In 1966, American vehicles where required to have seat belts.
What change needs to be made?
Change where to were
(2) Fees should be established for the services that the library’s provide.
What change should be made in sentence 2?
A. Change Fees to Fee
B. Change established to establishing
C. Change library’s to libraries
D. Change provide to providing
C. Change library’s to libraries
(4) His son and son’s wife was disgusted at this, so the old grandfather had to sit in the corner behind the stove.
a. Change son’s to sons
b. Change was to were
c. Change had to has
d. Change sit to sat
B. Change was to were
(2) There were odd storys about him, such as that when children died, he went part of the way with them, so that they should not be frightened.
a. change There to Their
b. Change were to was
c. Change storys to stories
d. Change frightened to frightening
C. Change storys to stories
(4) Chocolate has many minerals and antioxidants. (5) Minerals and antioxidants help keep you healthy.
The author would like to combine the ideas in sentences 4 and 5. Which response best combines these sentences?
a. Chocolate has many minerals and antioxidants which help keep you healthy.
b. Chocolate has many minerals and antioxidants, but those don’t keep you healthy.
c. Chocolate has many minerals and antioxidants, minerals and antioxidants help keep you healthy.
d. Chocolate has many minerals and antioxidants, nor do they help keep you healthy.
A. Chocolate has many minerals and antioxidants which help keep you healthy.
Excerpt from All About Weather
Section 1: Funnel spinning tornadoes
Section 2: Thunder and Lightning
Section 3: Blanket of White
Section 4: Sunshine and Rainbows
What change should be made to the selection?
a. Change All About Weather to All about weather
b. Change Funnel spinning tornadoes to Funnel Spinning Tornadoes
c. Change Lightning to Lightening
d. Change of to or
B. Change Funnel spinning tornadoes to Funnel Spinning Tornadoes
(4) Whooping Cranes was likely uncommon even before hunting and habitat loss reduced them to dangerously low numbers.
What change should be made in sentence 4?
a. Change was to were
b. Change uncommon to uncommonly
c. Change them to themself
d. Change dangerously to dangerous
a. Change was to were
(4) Thomas Lynde was sewing his late turnip seeds on the hill field beyond the barn.
What change should be made in sentence 4?
a. Change was to is
b. Change sewing to sowing
c. Change seeds to seads
d. Change field to feeled
B. change sewing to sowing
(6) To his great wonder, there stood a pair of shoes all ready made on the table.
What change should be made in sentence 6?
a. Change wonder to wander
b. Delete the comma after wonder
c. Change all ready to already
d. Change made to make
C. change all ready to already
(1) Research shows that children who learn play in nature are healthier both mentally and physically.
The author has made an error in sentence 1. What is the error that needs to be fixed?
Research shows that children who learn and play in nature are healthier both mentally and physically.
(3) The Salvation Army was unique in it’s commitment of support to establishing a place in the neighborhoods with high poverty and supported equal rights for women within the organization.
The author has made an error in sentence 3.What is the error?
Change it's to its
(5) When children work on assignments from home, they are relying on the aid from there parents, who may or may not understand the material.
The author has made an error in sentence 5. What is the error that needs to be fixed?
Change there to their
The author would like to combine the ideas in sentences 1 and 2. In the space provided, combine these sentences in a clear and effective way.
(1) The biggest penguins of all are the emperor penguins. (2) They are about as tall and heavy as third graders!
add and
(7) It wont be long until I am gliding on the heels of the sighing wind.
What change should be made?
Change wont to won't
(4) Stowe, was very passionate, cared a lot, and cared deeply about human rights.
Sentence 4 repeats information. Rewrite this sentence in a clear and effective way.
Stowe was very passionate about human rights.
(5) When someone finaly does break out of the circle, everyone chases him or her until that person is caught.
What change needs to be made?
Change finaly to finally
(5) They can also use computers to purchase books for themselves, and use computers to purchase books for their children from Amazon.
Sentence 5 repeats information. Rewrite sentence 5 in a clear and effective way.
They can also use computers to purchase books for themselves and their children from Amazon.