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For example before the 1800s average person couldn't afford a computer but now almost every single person has them
For example, before the 1800s average person couldn't afford a computer, but now almost every single person has them
(comma after For example in any case, and before But in this situation)
For example, before the 1800s average person couldn't afford a computer, but now almost every single person has them
For example, before the 1800s average person couldn't afford a computer, but now almost every single person has IT
(a computer -> it)
Sure yesterday can be better than today
Sure, yesterday can be better than today
(comma after Sure in any case)
I like draving by nombers
I like draWing by nUmbers
(But people usually say paint by numbers)
In that day I went to school at the first time
That day I went to school FOR the first time
In my hands I was holding a big bouquet of flowers that my parents bought for me
I was holding a bid bouquet of flowers that my parents HAD bought for me
The world is getting wars
The world is getting WORSE
I like make friends
i like making / to male friends
I like collecting toys by my lovly anima
I like collecting my favorite anime toys
(and lovEly)
I felt nerves
nervous
The world even in the last 50 years has changed a lot.
The world, even in the last 50 years, has changed a lot.
(comma before even when we add more details)
On the other side there is ongoing war in the world
On the other HAND, there is AN ongoing war in the world
("on the other hand" should be followed by a comma at the start of a sentence and surrounded by commas in mid-sentence)
To know something new about that places
To know something new about THESE places
(These for plural things: places)
I want to meet a sociable AND funny person with whoM I can talk on different topics
So when I was a little girl I really like to study something new
So, when I was a little girl I really likeD to study something new
I already knew some of the children, because we were in the same kindergarten
I already knew some of the children, because we HAD BEEN in the same kindergarten
In the past not everyone could have some kind of education and today most familys can afford
In the past not everyone could have some kind of education and today most familIES can afford IT
(education -> it)
Long brown hairs
Long brown hair
(HAIR IS SINGULAR)
Tougether
Together
Look forward to go to school
Look forward to goING to school
Since then it's been 10 years
I think the world becomes only better
I think the world IS becomING only better
I'm KIND and positive
My favorite memory was 9 years ago.
My favorite memory HAPPENED 9 years ago.
Went by foot to school
Went to school by foot