Argument Writing
Read this claim: “We shouldn’t have homework because it’s boring.” Revise it to be more convincing.
“Students should have less homework because it allows them more time to rest and participate in family activities.
Revise: “Dogs are cool. Let me tell you about them.”
“Dogs are loyal animals that have many important roles in people’s lives.”
Show “I was scared.”
“My heart pounded as I crept down the dark hallway, afraid to take another step.”
Fix: “Their going to the store later.”
“They’re going to the store later.”
Add detail: “The girl walked to school.”
“The girl slowly walked to school, her backpack bouncing with every step.”
Add a relevant fact or detail to: “We should have longer recess because it’s fun.”
“We should have longer recess because studies show that breaks improve focus and reduce stress.”
How to better explain: “The heart pumps blood. That’s what it does.”
“The heart is a strong muscle that pumps blood through the body, carrying oxygen and nutrients.”
Add to “One day I went to the zoo.”
“One day I went to the zoo and stood frozen as a giraffe leaned down and licked my hat!”
Fix punctuation: “I love cake and I like ice cream.”
“I love cake, and I like ice cream.”
Add prepositional phrase to: “The cat jumped.”
“The cat jumped onto the windowsill.”
Revise: “That’s why I think recess is good.”
“In conclusion, recess is important because it helps students stay active and ready to learn.”
Add transition: “The sun is hot. The sun is a star. The sun gives us light.”
“The sun is hot. Also, the sun is a star. Finally, it gives us light.”
What narrative elements are missing from the following statement: “I looked around. Then I ran.”
Setting and character details are missing. Who’s running? Where are they?
Fix: “After school we went to the museum of american history.”
“After school, we went to the Museum of American History.”
Fix spelling: “The resturant was very noisy.”
“The restaurant was very noisy.”
Find the opinion: “Recess helps students focus. It also gives them time to socialize. Recess is the best part of the day.”
“Recess is the best part of the day.”
Add a definition about photosynthesis
“Photosynthesis, which is the process plants use to make their own food, happens in their leaves using sunlight and water.”
Show character change: “At first, I didn’t like my new school. Now I have friends.”
“At first, I didn’t like my new school because everything felt strange. But now, after making new friends and learning my way around, I love it.”
Fix appositive: “My dog a golden retriever is very playful.”
“My dog, a golden retriever, is very playful.”
Fix fragment: “Running across the field.”
“I was running across the field when I saw the butterfly.”
Add a transition: “Kids need exercise. It helps them stay healthy.”
“Kids need exercise. In addition, it helps them stay healthy.”
Replace “I hope you liked learning about frogs!”
“In conclusion, frogs are fascinating amphibians with unique features that help them survive in many environments.”
Add dialogue: “I saw my friend at the park. We played together.”
“Hey!” I shouted. “Want to play tag?” “You’re it!” she yelled back, laughing.
Fix run-on: “We went to the game we stayed there for hours it was fun.”
“We went to the game, and we stayed there for hours. It was fun.”
Fix adjective order: “She wore a red silky long dress.”
“She wore a long, silky, red dress.”