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J.T. would like to add the following sentence to the first paragraph (sentences 1-6).
(1)Texas is known for its superb high school marching bands. (2)Each week during football season, thousands of students take to the field to display their musical and marching talents. (3) These same students also compete in local state, and national competitions and exhibitions. (4) However, marching bands aren't found in just this state or even just this country. (5) But in one country there are marchers who skip the music component all together. (6) Students at Japan's Nippon Sports Science University, NSSU, participate in an intricate marching-like exhibition known as precision walking.
Where is the most effective place to insert this sentence?
Students from around the world are also part of musical marching groups.
A. After sentence 1
B. After sentence 2
C. After sentence 4
D. After sentence 5
C. After sentence 4?
Which sentence is extraneous and should be deleted?
(22) Myers thinks the changes in students’ behavior are partly due to the improved lessons that she and the other teachers are able to create. (23) While some educators and parents may argue that teachers cannot prepare effective lessons in a shorter school week, many teachers offer an alternative scenario. (24) Before, they had to work on weekends to plan lessons. (25) Now, they are using Friday as their planning day. (26) “We’re still in school mode on Fridays, and we’ve found we’re creating far superior lessons,” Myers says. (27) High school English teacher Candyce Matlosz has found that longer days allow students to spend more time on activities. (28) And as a teacher with over twenty years of experience, Matlosz knows a lot about teaching English. (29) “For example, the science teachers have enough time to run labs, have the students write the lab reports, and clean up the labs in one class period,” she says. (30) “In English class, students can write a rough draft, revise, and write a final draft of essays in one or two days instead of taking a week.”
A. Sentence 27
B. Sentence 29
C. Sentence 28
D. Sentence 30
C. Sentence 28
What revision is needed in the sentence below:
The senator entered the press room, prepared to meet the reporters.
A. The senator entered, prepared to meet the reporters, the press room.
B. Prepared to meet the reporters, the senator entered the press room.
C. The senator, entering the press room, prepared to meet the reporters.
D. No change needed
B. Prepared to meet the reporters, the senator entered the press room.
Nancy has not used the most effective word in sentence 4. Which word should replace have to create a more effective sentence?
(4) Every day in schools across the nation, teens have challenging classes, hours of homework, and extracurricular activities such as sports and music.
A. carry
B. accept
C. manage
D. enroll
C. manage
Reese wants to improve the clarity of sentence 12. How should sentence 12 be revised?
(12) The brain's blood vessels have fluid that is running along the side of them, the team determined, and this fluid is what is carrying waste away from the brain.
A. Running along the brain's blood vessels, the team determined is a fluid that carries waste away from the brain.
B. The team determined that fluid running along the brain's blood vessels carries waste away from the brain.
C. Waste by a fluid that is running along the brain's blood vessels is carried away from the brain, the team determined.
D. Along the side of the brain's blood vessels is a fluid, the team determined, and this carries away from the brain waste.
B. The team determined that fluid running along the brain's blood vessels carries waste away from the brain.
What is the most effective transition to add to the beginning of sentence 17?
(16) Other people from around the world also expressed interest in making sweaters for the little penguins. (17) The Penguin Foundation, the group now in charge Knits for Nature soon had 40,000 sweaters on hand.
A. However
B. For example
C. Furthermore
D. As a result
D. As a result
There is a redundant sentence in the third paragraph (sentences 11-18). Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?
(11) More than eight million people watched a live Internet stream that showed Baumgartner plummeting toward Earth. (12) People were able to watch Baumgartner on computers. (13) He spun wildly at first, but fortunately, he soon regained control. (14) For the next minutes, anxious viewers watched and held their collective breath. (15) At the 5,000-foot mark, Baumgartner opened a parachute to slow his descent to Earth. (16) A little more than nine minutes after jumping out of the capsule, Baumgartner landed safely in the New Mexico desert and lifted his arms in victory. (17) He had succeeded! (18) Not only had he become the first person to break the sound barrier in a free fall, but he had also broken records for the highest manned balloon flight and the highest skydive.
A. Sentence 12
B. Sentence 13
C. Sentence 14
D. Sentence 15
A. Sentence 12
What is the most effective way to combine sentences 8 & 9?
(8)Bottled water may be attractively packaged. (9) It is simply processed tap water.
A. Bottled water may be attractively packaged, but it is simply processed tap water.
B. Bottled water is simply processed tap water because it is attractively packaged.
C. Bottled water may be attractively packaged, so it is simply processed tap water.
D. Bottled water is attractively packaged, because it is simply processed tap water.
A. Bottled water may be attractively packaged, but it is simply processed tap water.
The word mixing is not the most effective word to use in sentence 6. Which word best replaces mixing in the sentence?
(6) The mixing of moisture, bacteria, and air makes food deteriorate quickly.
A. merger
B. mingling
C. connection
D. combination
D. combination
What is the most effective way to revise sentence 32?
(32) The park opened in 1944 which during its first year attracted visitors of only 1,409.
A. In 1944, when the park opened, there were only 1,409 visitors during the entire year.
B. A total of 1,409 people only visited the park in 1944 during the first year.
C. That year when the park first opened, only 1,409 people actually visited it back in 1944.
D. 1,409 people was the number of visitors to the park during the first year when it was opened, which was in 1944.
A. In 1944, when the park opened, there were only 1,409 visitors during the entire year.
What revision, if any, is needed in sentence 20?
(20)Embarrassed by the debacle, Sophia decided to just open the windows and if that would fix the problem.
A. Embarrassed by the debacle, Sophia decided to just open the windows for seeing if that would fix the problem.
B. Embarrassed by the debacle, Sophia decided to just open the windows and see if that would fix the problem.
C. Embarrassed by the debacle, Sophia decided to just fix that problem that would open the windows.
D. No change is needed.
B. Embarrassed by the debacle, Sophia decided to just open the windows and see if that would fix the problem.
There is a redundant sentence in the last paragraph (sentences 23-28). Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?
(23) Scientists aren't sure why Thonis-Heracleion disappeared into the water. (24) There's no certainty regarding this issue. (25) Some think that a rise in sea level combined with unstable sediment might have been the reason. (26) Others suggest that an earthquake was responsible. (27) Still others believe that it might have been a combination of these factors. (28) As the study of the site continues, researchers are learnign more and more about this remarkable city and the period in which it thrived.
A. Sentence 24
B. Sentence 25
C. Sentence 26
D. Sentence 27
D. Sentence 27
What is the most effective way to combine sentences 7 and 8?
(7) After a two-and-a-half-hour trip, he reached his target altitude. (8) Then he ran through an extensive checklist.
A. After a two-and-a-half-hour trip and after he reached his target altitude, he then ran through an extensive checklist.
B. After a two-and-a-half-hour trip, he reached his target altitude, then he ran through an extensive checklist.
C. After a two-and-a-half-hour trip, he reached his target altitude, where he ran through an extensive checklist.
D. After a two-and-a-half-hour trip, where he ran through an extensive checklist, he reached his target altitude.
C. After a two-and-a-half-hour trip, he reached his target altitude, where he ran through an extensive checklist.
Mariko wants to use a more effective and descriptive word than wrecked in sentence 22. Which word should replace wrecked in this sentence?
(22) She surveyed the counter, wrecked with the expected debris of a child-assisted cookie bake.
A. tangled
B. woven
C. confused
D. cluttered
D. cluttered
What revision, if any, should be made in sentence 11?
(11) While managing the kids, she'd made what had looked like a perfect dough.
A. She'd made it while managing the kids, what had looked like a perfect dough.
B. While managing the kids, she had made a dough, looking perfect.
C. She's managed the kids while making a dough that had looked like a perfect dough.
D. No change is needed.
D. No change is needed.
What is the most effective transition to add to the beginning of sentence 6?
(5) Most people think if they are tired when they first wake up that they must need more sleep. (6) They are mistaken when they conclude that any sleep is good sleep.
A. Even though
B. In contrast
C. Furthermore
D. However
D. However
Joe thinks he may have included an extraneous idea in the second paragraph (sentences 9-16). Which sentence, if any, should he delete from this paragraph?
(9) Before people can begin riding the waves, they must gather the necessary equipment. (10) A surfboard, which can be selected from a wide range of weights and styles, is needed first. (11) Beginners usually get lighter, more buoyant boards, while experts choose heavier, more maneuvaralble boards. (12) Next comes surfboard wax, a substance that is rubbed on the board to make it easier to grip. (13) After that, a surfer may want to purchase a surfboard leash, a strap that connects the board to one of the surfer's ankles. (14) That way the board won't get lost when the surfer falls off. (15) It takes a lot of practice to get really good at surfing and not fall off. (16) And finally, surfers who plan to swim in cold water will usually want to buy or rent a wetsuit to stay warm.
A. Sentence 12
B. Sentence 13
C. Sentence 15
D. No sentence should be deleted from this paragraph.
C. Sentence 15
What is the most effective way to combine sentences 7 and 8?
(7) One such study found that native English speakers in a Spanish immersion program significantly outperformed monolingual English-speaking students on English vocabulary tests. (8) This student was published in the Journal of Educational Psychology.
A. One such study, published in the Journal of Educational Psychology, found that native English speakers in a Spanish immersion program significantly outperformed monolingual English-speaking students on English vocabulary tests.
B. One such study found that native English speakers in a Spanish immersion program significantly outperformed monolinhgual English-speaking students on English vocabulary tests and published in the Journal of Educational Psychology.
C. One such study found that native English speakers in a Spanish immersion program significantly outperformed monolingual English-speaking students on English vocabulary tests, which was published in the Journal of Educational Psychology.
D. One such study found that native English speakers in a Spanish immersion program published in the Journal of Educational Psychology signficantly outperformed monolingual English-speaking students on English vocabulary tests.
A. One such study, published in the Journal of Educational Psychology, found that native English speakers in a Spanish immersion program significantly outperformed monolingual English-speaking students on English vocabulary tests.
The meaning of sentence 2 is unclear. Which phrase should replace it in this sentence?
(2) A bit of grey smoke was seeping out of the edges of the oven, while it was lurking in the air.
A. a strange smell
B. a problem
C. something else
D. the smoke
A. a strange smell
What is the most effective way to combine sentence 8 and 9?
(8) Early attempts to provide provisions to troops left them weakened. (9) Troops were also left malnourished and susceptible to disease, which could be fatal.
A. Early attempts to provide provisions to troops left them weakened and troops were also left malnourished and susceptible to disease, which could be fatal.
B. Early attempts to provide provisions to troops left them weakened, malnourished, and susceptible to disease, which could be fatal.
C. Early attempts to provide provisions to troops left them weakened; troops were also left malnourished and susceptible to disease, which could be fatal.
D. Early attempts to provide provisions to troops left them weakened, and were also malnourished and susceptible to disease, which could be fatal.
B. Early attempts to provide provisions to troops left them weakened, malnourished, and susceptible to disease, which could be fatal.
Kelly is considering whether or not she should add the following supporting detail to the fourth paragraph (sentence 15-20).
Experts suggest that feeling tired in the morning is sometimes a symptom of sleep deprivation.
(15) Rather than relying on the snooze button, people need to consider developing different routines. (16) The easiest option for those who still cannot resist the snooze button is to put the alarm on the other side of the room. (17) Having to get out of bed to turn it off changes the likelihood of hitting the snooze button. (18) Another option, if your schedule allows it, is to just reset the alarm. (19) Rather than hitting the snooze button several times, setting your alarm for 30 minutes later will extend the entire sleep process instead of constantly restarting it. (20) However, it must be stressed that getting up 30 minutes later in the morning is not an excuse to stay up 30 minutes later the night before.
A. After sentence 16
B. After sentence 17
C. After sentence 18
D. Kelly should not add this sentence to the paragraph.
D. Kelly should not add this sentence to the paragraph
Kate thinks there is a sentence in the fourth paragraph (sentences 15-21) that should be deleted. Reread the paragraph. Which sentence, if any, should be deleted from this paragraph?
(15) Finally, speaking a second language will be essential for those who hope to excel in today's global marketplace. (16) With computers, online networking, and streaming video, people from all over the world are more interconnected than ever. (17) People all over the world are now working together through the Internet. (18) More and more businesses are working closely with companies in other countries. (19) Employers need workers who can communicate in different languages and different cultures are understood. (20) Such skills will open doors not only in the field of business but also in medicine, technology, teaching, and military communication. (21) Regardless of the path you choose, you'll have a distinct advantage if you know a second language.
A. Sentence 17
B. Sentence 18
C. Sentence 20
D. No sentence should be deleted from the paragraph.
A. Sentence 17
Sentence 16 needs to be revised.
(16) Natalie and Owen turned around with their hands over their ears to block the shrill sound, who had been watching a movie.
Rewrite this sentence in a clear and effective way.
Natalie and Owen, who had been watching a movie, turned around with their hands over their ears to block the shrill sound.
J.T. want to use a more appropriate transition in sentence 11. Which of the following can best replace Furthermore in this sentence?
(11) Furthermore, they walk in perfect step by following the direction of an announcer.
A. For example
B. In conclusion
C. Overall
D. Instead
D. Instead
What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 15?
(15) A misstep by just one student creates a flaw in the perfectly coordinated display that is visible.
A. A misstep by just one students and a flaw is created that is visible in the perfectly coordinated display.
B. A misstep by just one student creates a visible flaw in the perfectly coordinated display.
C. A misstep by just one student creates a flaw in the perfectly coordinated display, the flaw is visible.
D. A misstep by just one student creates a visible flaw that can be seen in the perfectly coordinated display.
B. A misstep by just one student creates a visible flaw in the perfectly coordinated display.