Peer Revision
Which sentence needs to be moved? and where would it go to make the most sense?
(1) Owls are nocturnal hunters. (2) They have silent feathers. (3) They sleep during the day. (4) This helps them sneak up on prey.
Switch (2) and (3)
(1) Owls are nocturnal hunters. (3) They sleep during the day. (2) They have silent feathers.(4) This helps them sneak up on prey.
The recipe calls for flour sugar eggs and a pinch of salt.
The recipe calls for flour, sugar, eggs, and a pinch of salt.
These are words that imitate the sound they represent.
What is an onomatopoeia?
This is the moral of the story.
What is theme?
last tuesday, my friend and i went to see the new movie in atlanta.
Last Tuesday, my friend and I went to see the new movie in Atlanta.
Which sentence should be deleted for better focus? Why?
(1) Video games improve hand-eye coordination. (2) They also teach problem-solving. (3) Some consoles cost over $500. (4) Many games require teamwork to win.
Sentence 3. (It's about cost, while the rest are about the benefits of playing.)
No I do not think we have any homework tonight.
No, I do not think we have any homework tonight.
The crook was as sly as a fox.
What is simile?
This is considered the turning point of the story/the most exciting part of the story.
What is the climax?
is uncle bob coming to dinner, or is your uncle staying home?
is Uncle Bob coming to dinner, or is your uncle staying home?
Choose the best transition to connect these ideas:
For example,
Furthermore,
Secondly,
As a result,
"The school cafeteria stopped serving soda. _________, student energy levels have become more consistent during afternoon classes."
"As a result" (Shows Cause/Effect)
I wanted to go to the football game but I had to stay home and study.
I wanted to go to the football game, but I had to stay home and study.
"The wind whistled through the willow trees. The silver stars shimmered in the silent sky." Which sound device is used most heavily used?
What is alliteration?
(1) The runner’s heart thundered in her chest, (2) A steady, rhythmic beat against the pavement. (3) Left, right, left, right, (4) Suddenly— (5) A stumble.
Which line represents the "turning point" (or shift) in the poem’s pacing,
What is Line 4 (or Line 5)?
Line 4 breaks the established rhythm with a dash, and Line 5 uses a "short line" to physically represent the sudden stop or interruption of the run.
we are traveling south to reach the south, where the weather is warmer.
We are traveling south to reach the South, where the weather is warmer.
Which sentence should be removed to maintain the focus of the argument?
(1) Standardized testing provides a consistent way to measure student progress across different schools. (2) It allows teachers to identify specific areas where students might need extra help. (3) Many students feel anxious and stressed before taking these large exams. (4) Furthermore, the data collected helps districts allocate funding to schools in need.
What is Sentence 3? (The paragraph is arguing for the benefits/utility of testing. Sentence 3 is about emotions/drawbacks, which contradicts the specific focus.)
To win the championship the team practiced for three hours every day.
To win the championship, the team practiced for three hours every day.
"The morning sun peeked over the mountain, stretching its golden arms across the valley. The dew sparkled on the grass." Which phrase in this passage is an example of personification?
What is "stretching its golden arms"? (Sunbeams are compared to human arms.)
The problem or struggle in a text.
Bonus points if you can name types of conflicts in a text.
Conflict
man vs. man, man vs. self, man vs. nature, and man vs. society
i asked, "mom, did you see the aurora borealis in the northern sky?"
I asked, "Mom, did you see the Aurora Borealis in the northern sky?"
What is the most logical order for these sentences to create a cohesive narrative?
(1) Only then did the scientists realize the experiment was a success. (2) The team spent months calibrating the sensitive equipment. (3) After the data was collected, they spent weeks cross-referencing the results. (4) Once the lab was ready, they initiated the first phase of the launch.
What is 2, 4, 3, 1? (Logic: Prep the lab → Run the test → Analyze data → Realize success.)
Mr. Henderson my old annoying science teacher told us the Milestones would be easy.
Mr. Henderson, my old, annoying science teacher, told us the Milestones would be easy.
Identify the two types of figurative language and which lines.
(1) The desert was a furnace. (2) We walked for miles under the blazing heat. (3) The sand felt like hot coals under our boots.
What is "The desert was a furnace" (Metaphor) and "like hot coals" (Simile)?
In a memoir about surviving a blizzard, the author describes the scientific process of how frostbite affects the body while also describing their own feelings of fear. While the main purpose of the author is to share a personal experience, this specific inclusion of medical facts serves what other purpose?
To inform the reader about the process of frostbites
the president of the student council met with president lincoln yesterday.
The president of the student council met with President Lincoln yesterday.