Editing
Sentence: The scientist explained the experiment with detail and care.
What change needs to be made in this sentence?
A. Change "explained" to "explaining"
B. Change "with" to "in"
C. Change "detail" to "details"
C. Change "details" to "detail"
Sentence: Each of the students have completed their assignments.
What change needs to be made in this sentence?
A. Change "have" to "has"
B. Change "their" to "there"
C. Change "students" to "student"
D. No change needed
A. Change "have" to "has"
A. The sound of the rain, tapping on the window, made it hard to concentrate on my homework, which was due tomorrow.
B. The sound of the rain tapping on the window made it hard to concentrate—my homework was due tomorrow.
B. The sound of the rain tapping on the window made it hard to concentrate—my homework was due tomorrow.
1. The word collected is not the most appropriate word to use in the sentence below. Which word should replace collected in this sentence?
Jasmine collected information from different sources to write her research paper.
A. gathered
B. built
C. created
D. stacked
A. gathered
1. What is the MOST effective way to revise sentence 8?
A. While walking home, Sarah saw a puppy on the sidewalk that was lost.
B. Sarah saw a lost puppy on the sidewalk while walking home.
B. Sarah saw a lost puppy on the sidewalk while walking home.
Sentence: The students was excited to start the new project.
What change needs to be made in this sentence?
A. Change "was" to "were"
B. Change "students" to "student"
C. Change "excited" to "exciting"
D. Change "start" to "starting"
A. Change "was" to "were"
Sentence: We should of brought our jackets because it got colder than we expected.
What change needs to be made in this sentence?
A. Change "should of" to "should have"
B. Change "got" to "gets"
C. Change "than" to "then"
D. Change "our" to "are"
A. Change "should of" to "should have"
2. What revision, if any, should be made in sentence 8?
A. We walked through the museum amazed by the artwork, stopping at every exhibit.
B. We walked amazed through the museum, stopping by the artwork at every exhibit.
A. We walked through the museum amazed by the artwork, stopping at every exhibit.
2. The word fixed is not the best choice in the sentence below. Which word should replace fixed to better match the sentence?
After the heavy storm, the workers fixed the damaged roof before the next rainfall.
A. repaired
B. adjusted
C. constructed
D. improved
A. repaired
2. What is the BEST way to rewrite sentence 10 for clarity?
A. He only studied for his math test for an hour.
B. He studied for only an hour for his math test.
B. He studied for only an hour for his math test.
Sentence: The teacher gave a clear and concise explanation of the topic.
What change, if any, needs to be made in this sentence?
A. Change "gave" to "give"
B. Change "concise" to "concisely"
C. No change needed
D. Change "of" to "on"
C. No change needed
(12) The science fair was the highlight of the school year for me. (13) I worked hard on my project about solar energy. (14) My display board had pictures and facts about solar panels. (15) I spent hours researching how solar panels generate electricity. (16) The science fair was my favorite event of the year.
Which sentence should be removed because it repeats information?
A. Sentence 13
B. Sentence 14
C. Sentence 16
C. Sentence 16
3. What revision, if any, should be made in sentence 12?
A. The dog ran through the park, wagging its tail happily, chasing squirrels, and barking loudly.
B. The dog, wagging its tail happily, ran through the park, barking loudly and chasing squirrels.
B. The dog, wagging its tail happily, ran through the park, barking loudly and chasing squirrels.
3. The word happy in the sentence below does not best convey the intended meaning. Which word should replace happy?
Mia was happy when she saw the surprise party her friends had planned just for her.
A. joyful
B. thrilled
C. satisfied
D. cheerful
B. thrilled
3. Which revision of sentence 5 makes the meaning clearer?
A. In the library, the students discussed the project that was due.
B. The students discussed the project that was due in the library.
A. In the library, the students discussed the project that was due.
Sentence: The team was excited to compete in there first championship game.
What change needs to be made in this sentence?
A. Change "was" to "were"
B. Change "there" to "their"
C. Change "compete" to "competing"
D. Change "championship" to "Championship"
B. Change "there" to "their"
(6) Our family trip to the mountains was an unforgettable experience. (7) We spent our days hiking through the forest and enjoying the fresh air. (8) The mountains had tall trees, fresh air, and endless trails to explore. (9) At night, we gathered around the campfire and told stories.
Which sentence should be removed because it repeats information?
A. Sentence 7
B. Sentence 8
C. Sentence 9
B. Sentence 8
4. What revision, if any, should be made in sentence 6?
A. The old library was quiet, filled with rows of books, dim lighting, and a strong smell of paper and ink.
B. The old library was quiet, dimly lit, and filled with rows of books and the strong smell of paper and ink.
B. The old library was quiet, dimly lit, and filled with rows of books and the strong smell of paper and ink.
4. The word made in the sentence below is too vague. Which word would be a better replacement?
The artist made a sculpture out of clay for the art exhibition.
A. created
B. formed
C. constructed
D. arranged
A. created
4. What is the MOST effective way to revise sentence 14?
A. Maria gave her friend a book with a beautiful cover that she borrowed.
B. Maria borrowed a book with a beautiful cover and gave it to her friend.
B. Maria borrowed a book with a beautiful cover and gave it to her friend.
Sentence: The book on the shelf belong to my sister.
What change needs to be made in this sentence?
A. Change "belong" to "belongs"
B. Change "on" to "in"
C. Change "sister" to "sisters"
D. Change "shelf" to "shelfs"
A. Change "belong" to "belongs"
(2) My best friend and I always spent our afternoons at the park. (3) We would sit on the swings and talk for hours. (4) The playground was usually crowded with kids laughing and playing. (5) Every day after school, my best friend and I met up at the park.
Onir has included a sentence in this paragraph that repeats information. Which sentence should be removed?
A. Sentence 3
B. Sentence 4
C. Sentence 5
C. Sentence 5
5. What revision, if any, should be made in sentence 10?
A. She sat on the porch listening to the birds chirping in the trees and sipping a cup of tea.
B. She sat on the porch sipping a cup of tea and listening to the birds chirping in the trees.
C. She sat on the porch, chirping in the trees and listening to the birds while sipping a cup of tea.
B. She sat on the porch sipping a cup of tea and listening to the birds chirping in the trees.
5. The word ran in the sentence below does not accurately describe the character's action. Which word would be a better replacement?
Liam ran toward the school bus, hoping to catch it before it drove away.
A. hurried
B. sprinted
C. dashed
D. wandered
B. sprinted
5. Which revision improves the clarity of sentence 7?
A. The teacher told us after class we could ask questions.
B. The teacher told us we could ask questions after class.
B. The teacher told us we could ask questions after class.