Capture the Audience
What to Avoid
Building Stronger Relationships
100

How would you change this to use the you attitude 

-our new flight schedule from Toronto to Montreal, which is on the hour every hour 

-you can now fly from Toronto to Montreal, on the hour every hour

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100

How can you change this out of using a gender bias?

-foreman

-supervisor

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100

How can you change this sentence to not show arrogance?

-if you'd like to order, mail us a reply card 

-To order, mail a reply card 

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200

How would you earn respect rather than attack in this sentence?

-once again you've managed to bring our company down

-let's go over the website to see what went wrong and where we can improve 

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200

How can you change this to not using a racial bais?

-Frank Clemi - Italian CEO

Frank Clemi - CEO 

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200

How is one way you may show credability? 

-honesty, objective, awareness of needs, knowledge, experience, expertise, proformance, sencerity 

300

How would you change this from a negative to a positive?

-It is impossible to fix your car!

I'm sorry but your car won't be complete until Tuesday! Would you like to borrow a courtesy car for the time being?

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300

How can you change this to not using a age bias?

-Mary Kirazy, 58 joined our law firm

-Mary joined our law firm 

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300

What is a way you can express yourself?

-Tone of voice 

-Style

-Impression

-Vary of style (personal, informal, formal)

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400

How would you change this sentence to pursuade someone into working harder?

-I'm tired of seeing so many errors in your blog

-proof reading your blog may avoid embarrasing mistakes 

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400

How can you change this to not use a disability bias?

-Disabled workers face many barriers on the job.

-Workers with physical challenges face many barriers on the job

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400

How would you change this style type from passive to active?

-You lost the shipment

-The shipment was lost

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500

How would you change the wording to not affect the audience's feelings?

-Cheap car 

Pre-used car

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500

How can you change this to not using a racial bias?

-Not surprisingly Shing Tung Yo excels at math

-Shing Tung Yo excels at math 

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500

How could you change this sentence from passive to active?

-Legal problems are created by this contract

-This contract creates legal problems 

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