Word Form
Apostrophes
Commas and Semicolons
Sentence Boundaries
Parallel Structure
100

It was true, but I felt more stressing in my second quarter.

It was true but I felt more stress/stressed in my second quarter.

100

To a country, the aerospace industry is very significant to it’s development.

To a country, the aerospace industry is very significant to its development.

100

To celebrate the graduation of my brother Aaron we must throw a big party.

To celebrate the graduation of my brother Aaron, we must throw a big party.

100

People used either letters or telephones to contact each other. Before the invention of the mobile phone.

People used either letters or telephones to contact each other before the invention of the mobile phone.

OR:

Before the invention of the mobile phone, people used either letters or telephones to contact each other.

100

Languages are related closely to read, write, speaking and listen in our daily life.

Languages are related closely to reading, writing, speaking and listening in our daily life.

200

This demonstrates how the author is reaching out to her audience to keep them engage in the information she explained.

This demonstrates how the author is reaching out to her audience to keep them engaged in the information she explained.

200

Discrimination is present in todays society, and they’re still a stereotype that prevents society as a whole from progressing.

Discrimination is present in today's society, and there's still a stereotype that prevents society as a whole from progressing.

200

People need to start saving water, in many cases people are unaware of the impacts of having a water drought.

People need to start saving water; in many cases, people are unaware of the impacts of having a water drought.

200

Chinese people use social media called weibo in China it is the same as Twitter.

Chinese people use social media called weibo in China. It is the same as Twitter.

200

Some suicide rulings are based on cops, physicians, or the coroners’ methods.

Some suicide rulings are based on cops’, physicians’, or coroners’ methods.

300

By this time next year, I will have pass all my classes.

By this time next year, I will have passed all my classes.

300

My brother is a Mexican American in his late 30’s, is covered with tattoos, and wears a muscle shirt.

My brother is a Mexican American in his late 30s, is covered with tattoos, and wears a muscle shirt.

300

She focused on the products that are on sale she can’t afford them.

She focused on the products that are on sale; she can’t afford them.

300

Demonstrating the approaches used in the study. The authors used more passive voice than active voice.

In demonstrating the approaches used in the study, the authors used more passive voice than active voice.

300

The author’s main pieces of evidence are her feelings, experiences from her childhood, and implies the effect these experiences had on her.

The author’s main pieces of evidence are her feelings, experiences from her childhood, and the effect these experiences had on her.

400

Mobile telephones were develop by two AT&T Labs researchers.

Mobile telephones were developed by two AT&T Labs researchers.

400

Rock climbing is important in Travis social activities and relationships.

Rock climbing is important in Travis'/Travis's social activities and relationships.

400

Both cultures are different yet they share the same purpose of preserving their language.

Both cultures are different, yet they share the same purpose of preserving their language.

400

I found that the mountain did not have enough snow, the staff used snow machines to make snow last year.

I found that the mountain did not have enough snow, so the staff used snow machines to make snow last year.

400

For instance, my basketball coach in middle school studied abroad in Africa for two years and taught young ladies about health, such as sexually transmitted diseases and basketball.

For instance, my basketball coach in middle school studied abroad in Africa for two years and taught young ladies about health, such as sexually transmitted diseases and birth control.

500

The confuse coach began practice.

The confused coach began practice.

500

The most important thing to enjoy you're life is to be thankful for everything.

The most important thing to enjoy your life is to be thankful for everything.

500

Many undergraduate and graduate students consider studying abroad while in college, however the reasons vary from person to person.

Many undergraduate and graduate students consider studying abroad while in college; however, the reasons vary from person to person.

500

The author is citing information in a correct manner the evidence for this is the reference list at the end of the reading he respects the original writer of those resources.

The author is citing information in a correct manner; the evidence for this is the reference list at the end of the reading. He respects the original writer of those resources.

500

The author used many different examples to illustrate his points, such as the use of water, keep using the same clothing for a long period of time, no shower but a soaked wet cloth for showers, etc.

The author used many different examples to illustrate his points, such as the use of water, the use of the same clothing for a long period of time, the use of a soaked wet cloth for showers, etc.

Or

The author used many different examples to illustrate his points, such as using water, the same clothing for a long period of time, a soaked wet cloth for showers, etc.