Rate the thesis w/the rationale.
Prompt: Explain how the author develops the idea in the article that it is not easy to become a NASA astronaut.
Thesis: They launch the rocket over two years and work for the iss in outer space and went to the space station.
0, A thesis is not evident because the writer summarizes facts from the excerpt.
A. Even though marriage is a strong and respected institution in Russia, more and more people are choosier got leave tougher before marriage, despite cultural pressures.
B. I am going to explain why many could in Russia are echoing to live together rather than get married.
C. In this essay, I will make an argument about marriage in Russia.
A, because a thesis statement should not directly announce your topic by using phrases such as, "This essay will talk about..."
Prompt: Write an essay explaining whether soccer or football is better.
Thesis Statement: I believe soccer is better than football.
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Eliminate "I believe" and tell the reason why as your answer.
Thesis: To improve the quality of instructions, students should be able to grade their teachers.
A. Speaking to a local journalist, one student said, "Student assessments of teachers are necessary for quality instruction. I'm grateful that the administration adopted this much-needed program."
B. Several students surveyed about their teachers' effectiveness said that they questioned the anonymity of the survey and therefore were not completely truthful.
C. In one school, almost all teachers reported that they would change their approach if student feedback indicated that it was not working.
This survey shows the strong reaction of teachers and them will to adjust with the information that they receive from their students.
Prompt: Explain how the author develops the idea in the article that it is not easy to become a NASA astronaut.
Thesis: In the article, she explains how tough it can be to become an astronaut because there are a lot of steps, studying, and preparing to do and it’s serious.
3, The writer offers a clear thesis that maintains a clear focus and is fully developed.
A. People should know a foreign language because in paragraph 2 it says it will help you get a job.
B. Why should people know a foreign language?
C. Knowing a foreign language is a very useful skill because it can help one advance in a career, relate better to others, and open one's mind to the ideas of another culture.
C. because a thesis statement should be a complete sentence with an answer and not a question or text evidence.
Thesis: There are many reasons people shop at Target.
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Thesis: The government should decide what students eat for lunch.
A. School lunches, on average have only about 550 calories; however, lunches brought from home have about 850 calories.
B. The GAO report said that students in one district refused to eat school lunches for three weeks.
C. The rules make lunches cheap for students, but they cost schools money.
A. This fact proves that school lunches have a lower calorie count and are healthier compared to the food that students bring from home.
Prompt: Explain how the author develops the idea in the article that it is not easy to become a NASA astronaut.
Thesis: They have to learn a lot of many different things and different languages, many different subjects.
1, The thesis is evident but is not developed enough with specific details that respond to the prompt. Words like “things” and repeating “many different” do not show a clear understanding of the text.
A. Michaelangelo's artwork is powerful because of its strong spiritual undertones.
B. Michaelangelo's artwork is famous and is admired by many.
C. Michaelangelo was a great artist in Rome during the 1500's.
A. because a thesis statement states an attitude or opinion on a topic. It doesn't just state the topic, itself. A thesis should not be a fact.
Prompt: Explain the benefits of Language Arts being taught in all high schools in the USA with the same curriculum.
Thesis: Language Arts is taught in all high schools in Texas.
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There is no answer/opinion (vague)
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Claim: Standardized tests are not an effective way to measure student learning.
1. There are many aspects of intelligence that standardized testing doesn’t cover such as creativity, critical thinking, and emotional intelligence. These are skills that can’t be measured with multiple choice responses.
2. Standardized testing has had a negative impact on student performance. The United States has fallen from 18th place in math performance world-wide to 31st between 2002-2009. There has been no change in reading scores.
2. is better because it is a fact and statistic that can be proven. Facts are stronger and it was very specific.
Prompt: Explain how the author develops the idea in the article that it is not easy to become a NASA astronaut.
Thesis: The author is developing the idea that being an astronaut is not an easy job because you have to be ready for all possibilities that require a lot of training.
2, The writer presents the thesis with some details (like requiring training), but details are not consistent when the writer references ”all of the possibilties.”
A. The North and South fought the Civil War for many reasons, some of which were the same and some different.
B. Americans should eliminate the regular consumption of fast food because a fast food diet leads to preventable and expensive health issues, such as diabetes, obesity, and heart disease.
C. Eating fast food is bad and should be avoided.
B. because a thesis statement can be made more specific by listing subtopics. These help give your reader a clear idea of what will follow in your essay. Remember, a good thesis statement will usually have a "because" clause.
Thesis: It is important to wash your hands after using the restroom because you can get a lot of germs from not washing your hands, especially if you touch the toilet seat or the faucet, which is disgusting and full of many germs that might make you sick, possibly with he flu or even corona virus.
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There is too much information.
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Claim: Standardized tests are not an effective way to measure student learning.
1. Educational experts do not believe standardized testing is fair since English Language Learners and students receiving special education services are forced to take the same test as everyone else.
2. The cost of testing students takes funds away from other worthwhile educational expenses like sports, academic clubs, technology, and lowering class sizes. It costs the state of Texas approximately $22 million per year to test all of the students in the state.
2. is the best piece of text evidence because it is specific and a act compared to the opinions. Although they are experts, compared to a fact, it's still an opinion.
Prompt: Explain how the author develops the idea in the article that it is not easy to become a NASA astronaut.
Thesis: It is not easy to be an astronaut because you have to apply to get in NASA then you train for two years before lift off and you learn all types of stuff.
2, The writer presents the thesis with some details (like applying to NASA and training for two years), but details are not consistent when the writer ends with “you learn all types of stuff.”
A. Franklin Delano Roosevelt began the system of Social Security during the depression years in the 1930s.
B. We shouldn't have Social Security anymore.
C. The current system of Social Security needs a complete overhaul in administration and philosophy if it is going to benefit future generations.
C. because you have specific to tell more than a just a fact. It tells the answer with topics that the ECR will be about.
Prompt: Explain some reasons bullying at school is effecting students.
Thesis: We need to take a stance and end bullying in schools because students are harming themselves, transferring schools and skipping school.
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Eliminate "we"
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Claim: Standardized tests are not an effective way to measure student learning.
1. According to a 2001 study published by the Brookings Institution, 50-80% of annual test score improvements were only temporary and "caused by fluctuations that had nothing to do with long-term changes in learning..."
2. Tim, a high-school junior, recalls how much time was spent in class preparing for the state test. He was disappointed when all lessons, projects, and discussions stopped for several weeks so the class could review test-taking strategies. According to him, it was the most boring time of the entire school year.
1. is the better piece of text evidence because #2 tells a story form a student and #1 is a fact.