Revising & Editing
People have come to rely on plastic bags as everything from totes for groceries to trash-can linners to lunch bags.
What is change linners to liners.
A comparison between two unlike things, using like or as. Example: He was as stubborn as a mule.
What is a simile?
"Well, you could cut the silence with a knife. The clerk hemmed and hawed while they stood there lookin’ back at him real innocent and peaceful, and finally he said, “You’ll have to pay in advance.”
What type of rhetorical device is used in this sentence?
What is imagery?
A food chain is a link between plants and animals. It starts with a plant. The next part of the link is a plant eater. When the prairie plants were uprooted, the animals that depended on them lost their food source. So while the farmers produced more food for people, they broke the animals’ food chain.
What is the first part of the food chain?
What is a plant?
The answer to the prompt statement that directly responds to the question being asked and a requirement for all essays?
What is a thesis statement?
And in both 1988 and 1998, plastic bags that were blocking sewers, and drains in Bangladesh contributed to devastating flooding.
What is delete the comma after 'sewers'?
If you give human qualities to animals or objects in a writing, “the sky was crying and the clouds mourned loudly,” you are using...
What is personification?
Far from either shore it hits me that my daughter is a young woman, and suddenly everything is a metaphor for how short a time we are granted on earth: the red boats on the blue-black water, the russet and gold of late summer’s sunburnt grasses, the empty blue sky.
What does the word russet mean in this selection?
What is yellowish-brown or reddish-brown in color?
A food chain is part of a bigger system called a food web. That web links the living things in an ecosystem. The herbivores in that system depend on the plants. If the plants are removed, the herbivores cannot survive.
What do herbivores do?
What is eat plants?
There are three elements needed in your body paragraph.
What are topic sentence, text evidence, and commentary?
The best transition to put at the beginning of sentence 12.
(11) Learning another language also allows students to interact with people of different ethnicities, countries, and histories. (12) My youth group regularly travels to Central America to serve in an impoverished community, and my knowledge of Spanish has made it possible for me to converse with the people there.
A) To put it differently B) Still C) Otherwise D) For example
What is D?
The words and phrases used specifically to help the reader to imagine each of the senses: smell, touch, sight, hearing, and taste.
What is imagery?
My father was the perfect dad; he thought like a kid, but he was bigger than a bully. In fact, he was larger than life, older than the other dads but weirdly young, with a shoulder bunged up in World War I, and a Harley-Davidson he rode to work on mornings the Packard’s engine wouldn’t turn over. A big guy with a big grin and lures on his fishing hat.
What can you infer about the author's relationship with his father in this paragraph?
What is the author and his dad were close and loved each other?
"Title IX gave us some clout, but it didn’t give us our motivation,” said Jody Conradt, the Hall of Fame former women’s coach at the University of Texas."
What is the definition of the word clout in this sentence?
What is influence?
Adding details and developing your ideas is called...
What is commentary?
They enjoyed playing video games, bowling, and watched movies together.
What is the most effective way to revise this sentence? Write your answer on the whiteboard.
What is change it to: They enjoyed playing video games, bowling, and watching movies together.
This is expressed by the writer’s use of syntax, their point of view, their attitude, their diction, and the level of formality in the writing.
What is tone?
In order to prove that Gogol knows English, Ashoke does something he has never done before, and addresses his son in careful, accented English. “Go on, Gogol,” he says, patting him on the head. “Tell Mrs. Lapidus how old you are.”
What can you infer about Gogol based on this paragraph?
What is Gogol's not originally from an English speaking country?
Every year when I was a child, a man brought a big, black, squeaking machine to school. When he discovered I couldn’t hear all his peeps and squeaks, he would get very excited. The nurse would draw a chart with a deep canyon in it. Then I would listen to the squeaks two or three times, while the adults—who were all acting very, very nice—would watch me raise my hand. Sometimes I couldn’t tell whether I heard the squeaks or just imagined them, but I liked being the center of attention.
What can you infer about the author based on this paragraph?
What is that she is hard of hearing (deaf)?
Which 5 areas in the prompt are a reminder of what you are graded on?
Remember to —
• clearly state your thesis
• organize your writing
• develop your ideas in detail
• use evidence from the selection in your response
• use correct spelling, capitalization, punctuation, and grammar
Manage your time carefully so that you can —
• review the selection
• plan your response
• write your response
• revise and edit your response
What is thesis, organization, ideas/commentary, evidence, and conventions?
He used a wheelchair to get around. He communicated through a sophisticated computer system that responded to his eye movements. This sentence is choppy and ineffective.
What is the best way to combine these sentences into one? Write your answer on the whiteboard.
What is "He used a wheelchair to get around and communicated through a sophisticated computer system that responded to his eye movements."
This is the implied meaning of a word, usually the feelings associated with it.
What is connotation?
There is a reason Gogol doesn’t want to go to kindergarten. His parents have told him that at school, instead of being called Gogol, he will be called by a new name, a good name, which his parents have finally decided on, just in time for him to begin his formal education. The name, Nikhil, is artfully connected to the old.
What can you infer about Gogol based on this paragraph?
What is that he doesn't want to be called by a new name?
Everyone knows yawning is contagious. If you yawn, someone else will probably yawn shortly thereafter. As I did the research for this column, I noticed that nearly every article about yawning pointed out that just reading the article itself could make you yawn. Even your dog will yawn if it sees you yawning.
What the purpose of this paragraph?
What is to inform about yawning?
What words from the following prompt could you use in your thesis statement? Write a thesis stem on the whiteboard.
Explain how acquiring the forgotten key changes the protagonist.
What is "Acquiring the forgotten key changes the protagonist by...?"